Paper— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời có ý tưởng phù hợp nhưng mắc nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và diễn đạt chưa tự nhiên: dùng “had write” thay vì “wrote”, “want write” thay vì “want to write”, và cấu trúc “I want myself in the future can read” chưa đúng. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp ngay từ đầu, sau đó giải thích mục đích viết thư. Ngoài ra, tránh lặp lại “can read” và “in the future”; hãy dùng từ nối như “so that” để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, I once wrote a letter to my future self. I described my experiences and feelings at that time so that I could read it again years later. It was a meaningful paper activity because I wanted to see how much I had changed.

提案: Bạn đã trả lời đúng chủ đề và đưa ra nhiều đối tượng cụ thể, nhưng có lỗi dùng từ và ngữ pháp như “enjoy to write” cần sửa thành “enjoyed writing”, “write little to anyone” chưa tự nhiên, và “I think so” không phù hợp trong ngữ cảnh này. Vì câu hỏi nói về thời thơ ấu, nên dùng thì quá khứ nhất quán. Hãy sắp xếp câu trả lời theo cấu trúc: hoạt động chính → viết cho ai → lý do.

例: As a child, I enjoyed writing short letters and notes. I usually wrote to my mother, family members, and close friends because it helped me express my feelings. I especially liked writing letters to my future self, as I found the idea meaningful and exciting.

提案: Câu trả lời khá rõ ràng, có câu trả lời trực tiếp và lý do cụ thể. Tuy nhiên, “I'm a writing person” nên thay bằng cách diễn đạt tự nhiên hơn như “I enjoy writing”, “write this” cần sửa thành “write them”, và nên dùng số nhiều “close friends” nếu nói chung. Bạn cũng nên hạn chế nhắc lại “meaningful” nhiều lần và có thể thêm một ví dụ cụ thể về dịp bạn viết thư.

例: Yes, I still write physical letters occasionally because I enjoy expressing my feelings on paper. I usually write them to my family or close friends on special occasions, such as birthdays. Although digital messages are more convenient, handwritten letters feel more personal and memorable.

提案: Bạn có quan điểm rõ ràng và đã đưa ra nguyên nhân hợp lý, nhưng một số từ chưa chính xác: “gone out of sight” nên đổi thành “become less common” hoặc “gone out of fashion”, “digital eras” cần là “the digital era”, “mobile phone” nên dùng số nhiều hoặc thêm mạo từ, và “labels” phải là “letters”. Câu quá dài và thiếu dấu ngắt; hãy dùng “because” và “therefore” để liên kết ý rõ ràng hơn. Bạn có thể bổ sung rằng thư viết tay vẫn được giữ trong những dịp đặc biệt.

例: Yes, some people still keep handwritten letters, but they have become much less common. In the digital era, most people use mobile phones to communicate, so they rarely send paper letters. However, handwritten letters are still valued because they feel personal and are often kept as special memories.

提案: Bạn trả lời trực tiếp và đưa ra lý do rõ ràng, nhưng cần sửa “I'm really carry” thành “I don't usually carry”, “the the” là lỗi lặp từ, và “note apps in my phone” nên nói tự nhiên hơn là “the Notes app on my phone”. Câu trả lời sẽ hiệu quả hơn nếu bạn nêu ngoại lệ, chẳng hạn chỉ mang giấy bút khi đi học hoặc tham dự cuộc họp. Hãy tránh lặp từ “phone” và dùng cấu trúc điều kiện để thêm chi tiết.

例: No, I don't usually carry paper and pens when I go out because I can use the Notes app on my phone. It is more convenient for recording information, making lists, or writing down ideas. However, I take a pen with me when I attend classes or important meetings.

× I had write a paper letter to myself in the future.

✓ I had written a letter on paper to my future self.

After the auxiliary verb had, the main verb must be in the past participle form. The past participle of write is written, not write.

× I want write my experience now and I want myself in the future Can read, can read it and things about it.

✓ I wanted to write about my experiences so that my future self could read the letter and learn about them.

The original sentence contains incomplete and incorrectly connected clauses. Use a complete structure with a subject, a verb, and a clear purpose clause: so that my future self could read it.

× I really enjoy to write little to anyone.

✓ I really enjoy writing little letters to people.

The verb enjoy must be followed by a gerund, or verb ending in -ing. Therefore, enjoy writing is correct, not enjoy to write.

× I think so to my future self, to my mother, to my family, to my close friends, because I think it's very meaningful.

✓ I like writing to my future self, my mother, my family, and my close friends because I think it is very meaningful.

I think so to is not a complete or natural sentence structure. Use the verb phrase I like writing to introduce the people who receive the letters.

× I usually write this for my family, for myself in the future, for my close friend.

✓ I usually write these for my family, my future self, and my close friends.

These refers to multiple physical letters, so the plural demonstrative these is needed instead of this. Close friends is plural because the sentence refers to more than one friend.

× Because in this digital eras people usually use mobile phone to chat with their friends and family.

✓ Because in this digital era, people usually use mobile phones to chat with their friends and family.

Era is singular after this, so digital era is correct. Mobile phones should be plural because people generally use more than one phone across the population.

× Honestly, I'm really carry paper and pens when I go out because I have my mobile phone.

✓ Honestly, I rarely carry paper and pens when I go out because I have my mobile phone.

The form I am carry is grammatically incorrect. For a regular habit, use the simple present: I rarely carry. The adverb rarely also matches the intended meaning of the answer.

× I can use the the note apps in my phone to note information if I need.

✓ I can use the Notes app on my phone to record information if I need to.

The definite article the was repeated accidentally. Use the singular name the Notes app when referring to the application, and use on my phone rather than in my phone.