Paper— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答直接回应了问题，也提到了制作时间、用途和环保理念，内容方向不错。但“theme”用词不准确，这里应使用“craft”或“activity”；“carden paper”应为“cardboard”或“card paper”；“grew to make”应改为“managed to make”；最后的“which tool”不完整，影响表达清晰度。建议使用“First, ... Then, ...”连接制作过程，并补充一个具体结果。

例: Yes, I made a lot of paper flowers for home decoration last year. I used recycled cardboard to make dozens of roses and leaves. It was an interesting and environmentally friendly hobby, and I was quite proud of the final result.

提案: 你提到了童年时喜欢剪纸以及和母亲一起制作卡片，回答有具体内容。但“loved them”指代不清，应改为“loved paper crafts”或“enjoyed doing paper cutting”；“found they relaxing”应改为“found it relaxing”；句子衔接略生硬。建议先直接说明活动，再用“especially”介绍具体作品，最后说明原因。

例: When I was a child, I really enjoyed paper cutting. I often made cards with my mother, especially ones with little animals and flowers. I found it relaxing, and it was also a lovely way for us to spend time together.

提案: 回答回应了问题，并给出了特殊场合和写信原因。但“firm”不适合形容信件，应使用“meaningful”或“personal”；“my best friend Wedding”应改为“my best friend’s wedding”；“express my best vision”表达不自然，应改为“express my best wishes”。建议拆分过长句子，并用“for example”引出具体经历。

例: Yes, I do, but only on special occasions, such as weddings and birthdays. Handwritten letters feel more personal and meaningful than text messages. For example, I wrote a letter for my best friend’s wedding to express my best wishes.

提案: 你能够进行对比，说明数字通信更方便快捷，也提到特殊场合，这是有效的回答思路。但开头“They don't”与后面的“most people”连接错误，应改为“Not really. Most people...”或“Some people do”；“stud andy had written letters”无法理解，应改为“still keep handwritten letters”；建议补充保存信件的原因，例如纪念价值。

例: Not really. Most people prefer text messages and emails because digital communication is faster and more convenient. However, some people still keep handwritten letters from special occasions because they have sentimental value and remind them of important memories.

提案: 回答非常直接，给出了不携带纸笔的原因以及使用手机的替代方式，结构清楚且长度合适。但“pets”是“宠物”，应改为“pens”；“all important tasks and information”可以改为更自然的“important tasks and notes”。建议加入一个具体例子，例如使用手机记录购物清单或提醒事项。

例: No, I don’t usually carry paper and pens with me because they can be inconvenient. I normally use my phone to write down important tasks and notes. For example, I use its reminder app to make shopping lists and keep track of appointments.

× I used to recycle the carden paper and grew to make dozens of roses and leaves which tool.

✓ I used to recycle paper and use it to make dozens of roses and leaves.

原句中“used to recycle”和“grew to make”结构不平行，而且句末的“which tool”无法构成正确的从句，导致句子结构混乱。可以使用“use it to make”清楚地表达“用纸制作……”的意思。

× When I was a child I loved them, doing paper cutting.

✓ When I was a child, I loved doing paper cutting.

“love”后面可以接动名词（-ing形式）来表示喜欢做某事，因此应使用“loved doing”。原句中的“loved them, doing”结构不正确，而且“them”在这里没有明确指代对象。

× I often made paper cards with my mother, especially little animals and flowers because I found they relaxing and interesting.

✓ I often made paper cards with my mother, especially cards with little animals and flowers, because I found them relaxing and interesting.

“find”后面需要使用宾格代词“them”，不能使用主格代词“they”。正确结构是“find + 宾语 + 形容词”，即“found them relaxing and interesting”。

× Yes, I do, but only for special occasions such as weddings and birthday parties because I found them more personal and firm.

✓ Yes, I do, but only for special occasions such as weddings and birthday parties because I find them more personal and formal.

“firm”通常表示“坚固的”或“坚定的”，不适合描述信件的正式程度。这里应使用“formal”，表示“正式的”。另外，谈论现在的看法时使用现在时“find”更合适。

× Yes, I do, but only for special occasions such as weddings and birthday parties because I found them more personal and firm.

✓ Yes, I do, but only for special occasions such as weddings and birthday parties because I find them more personal and formal.

问题是在描述目前仍然成立的观点，因此应使用一般现在时“find”，而不是一般过去时“found”。回答当前习惯或看法时，要注意保持现在时。

× Yes, I do, but only for special occasions such as weddings and birthday parties because I found them more personal and firm for instance, I write a handwritten letter for my best friend Wedding to express my best vision.

✓ Yes, I do, but only for special occasions such as weddings and birthday parties because I find them more personal and formal. For instance, I wrote a handwritten letter for my best friend's wedding to express my best wishes.

原句把两个完整句子直接连接在一起，缺少句号或合适的连接词，形成了句子连接错误。应在“formal”后使用句号，并用“For instance”开始新句子。另外，“my best friend's wedding”表示“我最好朋友的婚礼”，名词所有格形式要正确。

× They don't most people prefer to write text messages and emails because digital communication is more convenient and faster for everyday use.

✓ Most people don't keep handwritten letters; they prefer to write text messages and emails because digital communication is more convenient and faster for everyday use.

“They don't”后面直接接“most people”造成句子结构错误。应先明确主语“Most people”，再使用“don't”构成完整句子。两个独立分句可以用分号或句号分开。

× However, some people stud andy had written letters for special occasions.

✓ However, some people still write handwritten letters for special occasions.

“had written”是过去完成时，通常需要另一个过去时间点作为参照，但这里是在描述人们现在的习惯，因此应使用一般现在时“write”。表达现在仍然做某事时，也可以使用“still + 动词原形”。

× I wrote a handwritten letter for my best friend's wedding to express my best vision.

✓ I wrote a handwritten letter for my best friend's wedding to express my best wishes.

“wishes”通常以复数形式表示“祝愿”。“vision”表示“视野、愿景”，不符合祝福语境。这里需要使用“best wishes”。