Paper— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly and use the correct plural form, “crafts.” Since you are describing a childhood habit, use the past tense consistently: “I loved making...” Also, “make paper boats” and “make paper butterflies” are more natural than “spread paper boats” and “spread butterflies.” Add one specific detail about when or why you made them.

例: Yes, I made several paper crafts when I was a child. I particularly enjoyed making paper airplanes, boats, and butterflies. I often made them at school or at home when I had free time.

提案: Use the natural expression “write on paper,” not “write a piece of paper.” Keep the tense consistent because the question asks about childhood: use “I liked” and “I wrote.” “English letters” is probably the intended phrase instead of “English lectures.” Avoid repeating “paper” and connect your examples with a clear linking phrase such as “In addition.”

例: My favourite thing to do with paper was writing on it. I liked practising Mandarin Chinese characters and English letters, and I sometimes copied words from other languages, such as Arabic and Thai. It was an enjoyable way to improve my handwriting and learn new scripts.

提案: Your answer is relevant and includes a personal example, but “in the digital age nowadays” is redundant, and you should not use both “but” and “however.” Say “I don’t write physical letters anymore because most communication is digital.” Replace “while she is asleep” with “when she is asleep” if you mean that she reads the note after waking up. You can combine the final two sentences more smoothly.

例: I don’t write physical letters anymore because most communication is digital these days. However, I sometimes leave short handwritten notes for my mother when she is asleep. I hope she enjoys reading them when she wakes up, especially because they show that I’m thinking of her.

提案: Answer with “handwritten letters,” not “handwritten lights,” and use the linking phrase “even in the digital age.” Your main idea is clear, but the explanation should be more specific: people may keep letters because they are sentimental, personal, or valuable as memories. Use normal capitalization and avoid beginning a new phrase with an unnecessary capital letter.

例: Yes, I think some people still keep handwritten letters, even in the digital age. They may treasure them because they are personal and remind them of important relationships or special occasions. In addition, calligraphy enthusiasts often keep beautiful letters because they regard handwriting as a form of art.

提案: Give a clear answer and correct the article in “I’m a big fan.” The expressions “ink pants” and “bow point pants” are not appropriate here; you may mean “ink pens” and “ballpoint pens.” Explain briefly what you use them for, and avoid repeating “paper,” “pens,” and “ink pens” too often. A comparison with fountain pens is useful, but make it grammatically clear.

例: Yes, I usually carry a small notebook and a couple of pens with me. I’m a big fan of ink pens because they are useful for practising calligraphy and writing down ideas. I prefer them to ballpoint pens because the ink flows more smoothly.

× Yes, I have made some craft with paper.

✓ Yes, I have made some crafts with paper.

The quantifier some is used with plural countable nouns. Therefore, craft should be changed to the plural form crafts.

× I just love to make paper airplanes when I was a kid as well as spread paper boats or even butterflies.

✓ I loved to make paper airplanes when I was a kid as well as spread paper boats or even butterflies.

The time expression when I was a kid refers to the past, so the verb love should be changed to its past-tense form loved. The word spread is grammatically unchanged because its past and base forms are identical.

× My favourite thing to do with paper was writing a piece of paper.

✓ My favourite thing to do with paper was writing on a piece of paper.

We write on paper, not write a piece of paper. The preposition on is required to describe the surface used for writing.

× I like to write Mandarin Chinese characters as well as English lectures on the paper or sometimes even foreign languages such as Arabic and Thai as well.

✓ I liked to write Mandarin Chinese characters as well as English lectures on the paper or sometimes even foreign languages such as Arabic and Thai as well.

The question asks about an activity the speaker enjoyed as a child, so the past-tense form liked is more appropriate than the present-tense form like.

× I don't write physical letters anymore in the digital age nowadays.

✓ I don't write physical letters anymore in the digital age nowadays.

The definite article the is required before digital age because this expression refers to the specific period in which we currently live. The sentence already contains the correct article.

× But however, I sometimes leave a physical note to my mother while she is asleep.

✓ However, I sometimes leave a physical note to my mother while she is asleep.

But and however both introduce contrast, so using them together is redundant. Use either But at the beginning of the sentence or However, followed by a comma.

× I think that some people still keep handwritten lights today because there are lots of calligraphy fans, even the digital age People see handwriting as a form of art.

✓ I think that some people still keep handwritten lights today because there are lots of calligraphy fans. Even in the digital age, people see handwriting as a form of art.

The original sentence incorrectly joins two independent ideas with only a comma. Separating them into two sentences makes the structure clear. The second sentence also needs the prepositional phrase in the digital age and a comma after the introductory phrase.

× I think that some people still keep handwritten lights today because there are lots of calligraphy fans, even the digital age People see handwriting as a form of art.

✓ I think that some people still keep handwritten lights today because there are lots of calligraphy fans. Even in the digital age, people see handwriting as a form of art.

The correct preposition is in when referring to a period such as the digital age. The phrase even in the digital age means that this remains true during the modern digital period.

× I'm big fan of ink pants because I think that it's better to practice calligraphy with ink pants rather than fountain pens and bow point pants.

✓ I'm a big fan of ink pants because I think that it's better to practice calligraphy with ink pants rather than fountain pens and bow point pants.

The singular countable noun fan requires an article. Because big begins with a consonant sound, the correct article is a.