Paper— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は質問に直接答えており、理由・具体例・将来の予定も含まれているため、内容の展開は良好です。ただし、最後の文は「practice for about twenty minutes a day」のように時間の表現を明確にし、文末にピリオドを付けるとより自然です。「I never had the opportunity」はやや不自然なので、「I’ve never had the opportunity」または「I’ve never had a chance to try it」とするとよいでしょう。

例: To be honest, I haven’t made any paper crafts yet because I’ve never had the opportunity. I’d like to try simple origami, such as making paper cranes, because I think it would be relaxing and help me become more creative. I might start at home by following online tutorials and practising for about twenty minutes a day.

提案: 主な答えは伝わりますが、時制と文型に誤りがあります。「What I liked the most to do」は「What I liked doing most」または「I liked drawing pictures most」とし、「This is memory」は意味が不明確なので削除してください。また、「by using a lot of colors and markers」は「using lots of colours and markers」のように簡潔にすると自然です。子どもの頃の具体的な作品や理由を1つ加えると、内容がより明確になります。

例: I liked drawing pictures most when I was a child. I enjoyed using lots of colourful markers to draw animals, houses, and imaginary characters. It was a fun and creative way to spend my free time.

提案: 最初の答えは明確ですが、後半に文法・語彙の誤りが多く、意味が途切れています。「faster rather than」は「faster than」、「auditionally」はこの文脈では使えないため削除し、「by hand」または「on paper」を使ってください。最後の文は不要なので、スマートフォンでメッセージを送る利点を具体的に1文で説明すると、自然で効果的な回答になります。

例: No, I don’t write physical letters anymore. Using my phone is much more convenient and faster than writing by hand. I can send a message instantly, and I can also share photos or voice messages.

提案: 「No」と断定した後に、個人的な経験の説明が途中で終わっており、文のつながりが不明確です。「people still keep handwritten letters today」と言い切るより、「some people still keep them, but fewer people do」とすると、より自然で現実的な意見になります。「I used to write letters by hand to my neighbours, friends, and siblings」のように語順を直し、その手紙を保存したかどうかまで説明してください。

例: Some people still keep handwritten letters, but I think fewer people do so nowadays. I used to write letters by hand to my neighbours, friends, and siblings, but most people now communicate through messaging apps. Personally, I would keep a meaningful letter because it feels more personal than a text message.

提案: 通常持ち歩かないという立場が明確で、大学での具体的な理由もあります。ただし、「I sometimes borrowing」は「I sometimes borrow」、「If I know I’ll need to write something quickly and memorize that」は不完全な文なので、「when I know I’ll need to write something down quickly」と直してください。「memorize」はこの文脈では不自然で、情報を記録するなら「write it down」や「remember it」を使います。

例: Usually, I don’t carry paper or pens when I go out because I mostly use my laptop or iPad to take notes at university. However, I sometimes bring a small notebook and a pen when I know I’ll need to write something down quickly. They are also useful if my devices run out of battery.

× What I liked the most to do with paper as a child is drawing pictures.

✓ What I liked most to do with paper as a child was drawing pictures.

The phrase refers to an activity the student enjoyed in the past, so was should be used instead of is. Also, liked most is the more natural word order.

× This is memory because I loved to do some creative activities such as drawing pictures by using a lot of colors and markers.

✓ This is a memory because I loved doing creative activities such as drawing pictures with lots of colors and markers.

The singular countable noun memory needs the indefinite article a. The phrase loved doing is also more natural than loved to do in this context.

× This is simply because using my phone is much more convenient and faster rather than writing physical letters auditionally.

✓ This is simply because using my phone is much more convenient and faster than writing physical letters by hand.

After a comparative expression such as more convenient and faster, use than, not rather than. The two things being compared are using a phone and writing letters by hand.

× This is simply because using my phone is much more convenient and faster rather than writing physical letters auditionally.

✓ This is simply because using my phone is much more convenient and faster than writing physical letters by hand.

Auditionally means in a way related to hearing, so it does not describe writing. By hand correctly expresses the intended meaning.

× We can use phone variable we are unwillable it is

✓ We can use our phones whenever we want, so we do not need to write physical letters.

The original sentence does not have a clear grammatical structure, and several words are incorrectly formed or placed. Use a complete sentence with a subject, a verb, and a clear connection between the ideas.

× In my experience, I used to write letters but by hand to my neighbors and my friends and my siblings I'm not

✓ In my experience, I used to write handwritten letters to my neighbors, friends, and siblings, but I do not anymore.

The original sentence contains an incomplete and confusing ending. The corrected version clearly contrasts a past habit, used to write, with the present situation, do not anymore. Use commas to separate items in a list.

× However, I sometimes borrowing a small notebook and pen.

✓ However, I sometimes borrow a small notebook and pen.

The adverb sometimes usually describes a simple present habit, so use the base verb borrow, not the -ing form borrowing. The simple present is appropriate for a repeated action.

× If I know I'll need to write something quickly and memorize that.

✓ I sometimes borrow a small notebook and pen if I know I will need to write something down quickly or memorize something.

The original sentence begins with if but does not contain a main clause, so it is a sentence fragment. Add a main clause and use or because writing something down and memorizing something are alternative purposes.