Paper— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and disfluent. Keep answers short and directly relevant: start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No + brief detail), then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Focus on correct grammar and simple vocabulary rather than long, confused phrases.

例: Yes. I make simple paper crafts like origami flowers and paper boats. For example, when I am relaxing at home I often fold paper into small decorations, and my parents keep some of them as souvenirs.

提案: The reply is informal and repetitive. Provide a clear topic sentence about what you liked, then add one specific example and a short reason. Use linking words like "for example" or "because." Avoid filler words like 'man' and aim for grammatical sentences.

例: I liked making paper airplanes as a child. For example, I would fold different models and have competitions with friends because it was fun to see which plane flew the farthest.

提案: Your meaning is partly understandable but grammar is incorrect. Give a clear yes/no and explain frequency with a reason. Use simple present or past tense consistently, and include linking words like "but" or "however."

例: Yes, sometimes I still write physical letters, but not often. I usually email, however I write letters to close family members on special occasions because they feel more personal and memorable.

提案: The answer is vague and examples are unclear. Begin with a balanced statement (some do, some don't), then give specific occasions when people keep letters. Avoid unclear words and give two clear examples.

例: Some people still keep handwritten letters, especially for special occasions. For instance, people often keep love letters, graduation cards, or family letters because they have sentimental value.

提案: The response is confusing and word order is wrong. Answer directly (Yes/No), then explain when you do carry them with a clear example. Use correct negation and simple phrases.

例: No, I don't always carry paper and pens, but sometimes I take a pen and a small notebook when I travel. For example, I bring them on mountain trips to write notes or sketch the scenery.

× Yes I need stop in when I am or when I chill my parents team to love the mountains to

✓ Yes. I used to stop by with my parents when I was a child because my family loved the mountains.

The original sentence is disfluent and lacks clear grammatical structure. It mixes tenses and fragments ('need stop in', 'when I am or when I chill', 'team to love') making the meaning unclear. Corrected version clarifies tense (past habitual) with 'used to' and organizes clauses: subject + past verb + reason. Suggestion: state a clear subject and verb, use 'used to' for past habits, and provide a single coherent clause for the reason. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Man I'm hard to say man and people different things like aircraft airplanes and money

✓ It's hard to say. People make different things with paper, such as paper airplanes and play money.

The original contains filler words and poor structure; 'hard to say' needs a subject and verb form, and the list of items is unclear. The correction provides a clear subject and verb and uses 'such as' to introduce examples. Suggestion: remove unnecessary fillers, use a complete clause 'It's hard to say' and list examples clearly. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Yes I am I am not mostly like sometime written a letter and my family member and close friend it's memorable to email your messages.

✓ Sometimes I do write letters to family members and close friends, but mostly I send messages by email, which is more convenient.

The original mixes present and past forms improperly ('I am I am not mostly like sometime written a letter'). Use simple present 'I do write' for occasional actions and contrast with 'mostly I send'. Also correct noun plurality ('family members') and phrasing ('memorable to email your messages' is ungrammatical). Suggestion: use 'sometimes' with simple present for habitual actions and ensure noun number agreement and clear contrast words like 'but mostly'. Grammar problem type ID:6

× No, maybe some people hand write and letter some special occasional like Barbari banking variety university and more big potents

✓ No. Maybe some people handwrite letters for special occasions such as birthdays, banking procedures, university applications, and other important events.

The original has many incorrect words and prepositions ('hand write and letter', 'some special occasional', 'like Barbari banking variety university', 'big potents'). Corrected sentence uses the verb 'handwrite' and the preposition 'for' with 'special occasions', and 'such as' to introduce examples. Suggestion: use fixed collocations ('handwrite letters', 'special occasions') and list concrete examples; avoid incorrect or invented words. Grammar problem type ID:11

× No, always not, but sometimes I carry a pen and pen slid and go out somewhere like travelling some mountain and some personal space here.

✓ No, not always. But sometimes I carry a pen and a small notebook when I go out, for example when traveling to the mountains or to personal quiet places.

The original has awkward negation ('No, always not'), repetition ('pen and pen slid'), and unclear phrases ('some personal space here'). The correction uses natural negation ('not always'), clarifies items carried ('pen and a small notebook'), and expresses purposes and examples clearly. Suggestion: use 'not always' for negation, avoid repetition, and use precise nouns ('small notebook' instead of 'pen slid' which is unclear). Grammar problem type ID:26