Paper— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答要更简洁并且注意时态一致。开头可以直接回答并给出一到两句具体细节，用连接词让句子更连贯，例如说明什么时候做、和谁一起以及比赛的规则或结果。注意语法（e.g. "make airplane" → "make paper airplanes"，避免重复 like/to）。

例: Yes. I used to make paper airplanes as a child. On weekends my friends and I would go to the park and hold contests to see whose airplane could fly the farthest, which was always great fun and helped me practise folding techniques.

提案: 回答需更直接并使用更自然的表达，减少重复，注意用词和拼写（e.g. "unwide" 不合适，应为 "unwind"）。提供具体例子或主题可以使回答更具体（如常画的东西）。用连接词如 "because" 或 "so" 来组织原因和结果。

例: I enjoyed drawing on paper because it let me create my own little world and relax. For example, I often drew imaginary landscapes and characters, which helped me feel less stressed and more creative.

提案: 句子需要更准确和简洁，注意词汇拼写（"mid auction" 应为 "Mid-Autumn"，"fain" 应为 "find"），避免重复（"confirm, confirm"）。说明频率和原因时用清晰的连接词，给出具体情境让内容更有说服力。

例: Yes, I still write physical letters to friends on special occasions such as birthdays, the Mid-Autumn Festival and New Year. I find handwritten letters help me express my feelings more sincerely, so I usually write a short, personal message for each friend.

提案: 回答要更自然并避免过度绝对化（如 "more important than anything" 可能不合适）。注意词汇和搭配（"hard written" → "handwritten"，"give letter back" → "give letters back"，"calling those paper well" 不通顺）。解释保存原因并举例会更好。

例: Yes, many people still keep handwritten letters. I personally store the letters I receive in small boxes because they remind me of special moments and friendships, and I like looking back at them sometimes.

提案: 回答要更简洁并注意语法（"an student" → "a student"，"drop notes" → "take notes"，"make me more remember" → "help me remember better"）。提供频率、场合和原因的具体细节，并用连接词连接原因和结果。

例: Yes, I often carry a notebook and pens, especially as a student. Even in lectures I prefer taking notes by hand because it helps me remember information better than typing on an iPad.

× Definitely I love to make airplane with paper when I was a child and at the weekend I love to go to the park and I love to flip the paper into an airplane and have a competition with my friend that which airplane flies the longest distance.

✓ Definitely. I loved to make airplanes out of paper when I was a child, and on weekends I liked to go to the park and turn paper into airplanes and have competitions with my friends to see which airplane flew the farthest.

错误类型：可数名词单复数与搭配问题。原句中“make airplane”应为复数或不定冠词前加单数“an airplane”，并且应使用介词搭配“make ... out of paper”或“turn paper into airplanes”。另外“at the weekend”在美式英语中常用“on weekends”，“have a competition with my friend that which airplane flies the longest distance”结构不自然，需改为“have competitions with my friends to see which airplane flew the farthest”。建议：注意可数名词单复数，一般描述习惯性动作用复数或泛指时用复数；使用常见固定搭配如“make X out of Y”“turn X into Y”；比较句用“to see which ...”结构。

× I love drawing on paper as drawing can make me draw my little own world on a real paper and I think it makes me become more creative and I can relax and unwide as I can draw off my pressure on the paper.

✓ I loved drawing on paper because drawing let me create my own little world on real paper. I think it made me more creative and helped me relax and unwind because I could draw away my stress on the paper.

错误类型：时态使用不当与词汇搭配。上下文是“as a child”相关经历，因此应使用过去时（loved, let, made, helped, could）。另外“unwide”是拼写错误，应为“unwind”；“draw off my pressure”不合适，应为“draw away my stress”。建议：回忆过去时用过去式，注意常用短语拼写和搭配，如“relax and unwind”“draw away my stress”。

× Definitely I'm still writing the letters to my friends in special days like birthday or mid auction or new year festival as I fain writing letters physically can make me better to confirm, confirm my emotions, my feelings to my friend more accurately and honestly.

✓ Definitely. I still write letters to my friends on special occasions like birthdays, the Mid-Autumn Festival, or New Year, because I find writing letters by hand helps me express my emotions and feelings to my friends more accurately and honestly.

错误类型：现在时错误与词汇拼写及介词使用。应使用一般现在时“I still write”表示习惯；“in special days”应为“on special occasions”或“on special days”；“mid auction”是拼写错误，应为“Mid-Autumn (Festival)”；“I fain”错误，应为“I find”；“writing letters physically”更自然为“writing letters by hand”；“confirm”用词不当，改为“express”。建议：描述习惯用一般现在时，注意固定搭配（on occasions, write letters by hand），检查拼写并选用合适动词（find, express）。

× Absolutely. Hard written letters are important than anything. I love writing letters to my friends and my friends will give letter back to me. I'm calling those paper well in my small boxes in my room. It's my charity's memory.

✓ Absolutely. Handwritten letters are more important than anything. I love writing letters to my friends and my friends write letters back to me. I keep those papers well in small boxes in my room. They are my cherished memories.

错误类型：形容词/副词及词序用法错误和词汇使用不当。“Hard written”应为“handwritten”；比较句缺少“more”；“will give letter back to me”时态和可数错误，应为“write letters back to me”；“I'm calling those paper well”完全不自然，应为“I keep those papers well”；“It's my charity's memory”意图应为“cherished memories”或“treasured memories”。建议：注意形容词搭配（handwritten）、比较级形式（more ... than）、名词单复数，以及选择合适表达来传达“珍贵回忆”。

× Oh absolutely as I'm still an student and even though I'm in the lecture I'm using the paper and pen to drop notes because I think dropping notes using those two things will make me more remember about the knowledge instead of dropping those on my iPad.

✓ Oh absolutely, as I'm still a student, and even during lectures I use paper and a pen to take notes because I think taking notes with those two things helps me remember the material better than taking notes on my iPad.

错误类型：冠词与单复数问题及动词搭配。“an student”应为“a student”；“in the lecture”更自然为“during lectures”；“using the paper and pen to drop notes”不正确，应为“use paper and a pen to take notes”（take notes是固定搭配，不是drop notes）；“make me more remember about the knowledge”语序和搭配错误，应为“helps me remember the material better”。建议：注意冠词选择（a/an），使用常见固定搭配（during lectures, take notes, remember the material），调整语序以符合英语习惯。