Paper— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答要更直接并修正语法错误，避免冗长和重复。先一句点明“做过”：例如“I used to make paper crafts as a child.” 然后简短说明场景和频率，并用连接词衔接。注意单词拼写（crafts 而不是 crops），以及介词和冠词的使用。

例: I used to make paper crafts a lot when I was a child. My primary and secondary school art teachers often taught us simple projects like origami and paper flowers, so I practiced them frequently.

提案: 回答不够清晰，有词汇和表达错误（crowds?；时态不一致）。建议先直接回答具体喜欢做什么，再用一到两句解释原因或举例，使用恰当的连接词如“because”或“so”。尽量用现在/过去时一致。

例: As a child, I preferred writing and drawing on paper rather than making paper models. I often wrote down ideas or sketched random pictures because it helped me remember thoughts and relax.

提案: 总体信息明确，但句子碎片化且有重复。建议先用一句话回答，再用一两句具体说明写信的对象和目的，使用连词如“so”或“and”。修正短语（reserve → keep），并避免重复表述。

例: Yes, I still write physical letters, mostly to myself to record my thoughts and future plans. I usually put them in a box and keep them so I can read them later.

提案: 答案混乱且有语法及词汇错误（‘Hamilton’用法不当；‘out fashioned’不正确）。建议先给出简洁立场（大多数人不常写），然后提供原因或例子，并用连接词如“however”或“because”。避免使用不相关的词汇。

例: I think fewer people write handwritten letters nowadays because digital messages are faster and more convenient. However, some people still appreciate letters for personal or sentimental reasons.

提案: 回答内容明确但句子冗长且有重复（because because）。建议一句直接回答，再一句说明原因并给具体例子，注意简洁与连贯。可以用短语如“for example”或“so”。

例: Yes, I usually carry paper, pens and a couple of notebooks when I go out. As a student, I prefer taking handwritten notes because it's easier for me to review and remember information.

× When I was a child, I made many crops with paper and the art lessons at in primary school and even the secondary school many teachers taught me.

✓ When I was a child, I made many crafts with paper, and in primary and even secondary school, many teachers taught me during art lessons.

句子结构混乱，词汇使用错误（'crops' 应为 'crafts'），介词短语位置不当。建议将信息分成并列部分：先说明做什么，再说明在学校的情况；把 'at in' 合并为 'in'，并将 'primary school and even the secondary school' 简化为 'primary and secondary school'。这样句子更通顺，语序正确。

× Well, to be honest, I seldom use papers for crowds, but I like to use papers to write something that occurred to my mind or draw something that I casually thought of.

✓ Well, to be honest, I seldom use paper for crafts, but I like to use paper to write down things that occur to my mind or draw things I casually think of.

'papers' 与不可数名词 'paper' 的用法不当（量词/可数性错误）；'crowds' 用错词，应为 'crafts'；时态与动词形式需要与一般现在时一致（'occurred' 改为 'occur'，'thought of' 改为 'think of'）。建议用不可数名词 'paper' 表示材料，并使用一般现在时表达习惯性动作。

× Yes, I still write physical letters. Mostly write to myself to record what I thought or what I want to do in the future.

✓ Yes, I still write physical letters. I mostly write to myself to record what I think or what I want to do in the future.

第二句缺主语（'I'）且时态不一致：'what I thought' 使用过去时不符合持续习惯，应为一般现在时 'what I think'。建议补上主语并统一使用一般现在时表达经常性行为。

× I usually put those letters into a box and reserve it to maybe whenever I want to see those letters in the future.

✓ I usually put those letters into a box and keep them so I can read them whenever I want to in the future.

'reserve it to maybe whenever' 结构不自然且代词指代混乱（'it' 指代不明）。建议改为更自然的表达 'keep them so I can read them whenever I want'，并保持代词与复数名词一致。

× Well, from my perspective, there are some people still handwritten letters today, but there are also some people that had dropped the handwritten letters and these and social media or anything else.

✓ Well, from my perspective, there are still some people who write handwritten letters today, but there are also some who have stopped writing them because of social media and other things.

原句时态和动词形式错误：'are some people still handwritten letters' 应为 'people who write handwritten letters'（动词短语需完整）；'had dropped' 时态用错，建议使用现在完成时 'have stopped' 表示到现在为止的变化；'and these and social media' 语序和用词混乱，改为 'because of social media and other things' 更自然。

× But I still I think Hamilton is a classical thing and cannot be out fashioned.

✓ But I still think handwritten letters are a classic and cannot go out of fashion.

句中多余的 'I' 造成重复；'Hamilton' 显然用词错误，应为 'handwritten letters'；'classical thing' 不自然，用 'a classic' 更合适；'out fashioned' 词序或拼写错误，应为 'go out of fashion'。建议去掉多余代词，替换错误词汇并使用习惯搭配。

× Yes. In most of the cases, I will carry paper and pens with me when I go out even with more notebooks because surely because I'm a student now and I prefer to write my notes on the paper instead of tablets.

✓ Yes. In most cases, I carry paper and pens with me when I go out, even more notebooks, because I'm a student now and I prefer to write my notes on paper instead of on a tablet.

句子冗长且有重复（'because surely because'）；'in most of the cases' 更常见为 'in most cases'；'even with more notebooks' 位置及介词错误，应改为 'even more notebooks'；'on the paper' 与 'tablets' 搭配不自然，建议 'on paper' 和 'on a tablet'。同时将将来时 'will carry' 改为一般现在时 'carry' 更符合习惯性动作的描述。