Paper— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clear and concise. Begin with a direct topic sentence saying yes and briefly describe one or two crafts. Use correct grammar (e.g., "I used newspapers to make handmade cards and a small model car") and avoid unclear phrases like "summary delivery car." Keep it to 1–3 short sentences.

例: Yes. I used old newspapers to make handmade cards for my friends and a small model delivery car as a craft project. I enjoyed recycling materials and personalising each card with drawings.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence ("As a child, I liked to..."). Use linking words to connect ideas (e.g., "because", "and", "so"). Be specific about activities and feelings, and avoid unfinished clauses. Limit to 3–4 sentences maximum.

例: As a child, I liked to draw colourful illustrations with crayons because it made me feel creative. I also made handcrafted letters for my friends, as giving something made by hand felt more personal and meaningful.

提案: Give a concise direct answer and support it with 1–2 clear reasons using linking words (e.g., "because", "so"). Correct grammar: say "handwritten letters" and avoid fragments. Mention a specific example or feeling to strengthen your response.

例: Yes, I still write handwritten letters because they feel more personal and show appreciation. For example, I send a short handwritten note to friends on special occasions so they can keep it as a memento.

提案: Answer directly and clearly. Use correct nouns and tenses ("handwritten letters", "are", "were"). Explain briefly why some people keep letters, with a concrete reason such as sentimental value or memories. Avoid vague or repetitive phrases.

例: Yes, many people still keep handwritten letters because they are sentimental reminders of important relationships. I keep letters I received from close friends because they remind me of special moments and real emotions.

提案: Give a direct yes/no and a short, specific reason. Use correct vocabulary ("pen", "notebook", "crayon") and coherent linking words ("because", "for example"). Avoid unclear phrases like "roll down things" or "use friends to get us."

例: Yes, I usually carry a small notebook and a pen because I like to jot down ideas and reminders. For example, I write quick notes when someone asks for my contact details or when I want to remember an idea.

× Yes, I have newspaper to make a handcraft letters for my friend and a summary delivery car.

✓ Yes, I used newspaper to make handcrafted letters for my friend and a small delivery car.

The student used singular 'newspaper' with plural 'letters' and awkward phrasing. 'Newspaper' as material is uncountable or 'a newspaper' for one paper; 'handcraft letters' should be 'handcrafted letters'. Also 'summary delivery car' is unclear; likely 'small delivery car'. Use consistent singular/plural and proper modifiers. Suggested improvement: decide whether you mean 'newspaper (material)' or 'a newspaper' and match nouns and adjectives accordingly.

× Since it was made about myself.

✓ I made them about myself.

The phrase 'Since it was made about myself' mixes passive and reflexive incorrectly and uses 'since' wrongly. Use past simple 'I made' to match prior 'used newspaper' and 'myself' should be 'me' as the object. Improvement: use active voice and correct object pronouns.

× Usually I like to draw on the papers with my crayon and drawing those beautiful illustration makes me very happy because I can be more creative on the paper and also I go through the paper to make handcraft letters to my friend because I think that.

✓ Usually I like to draw on paper with my crayons, and drawing those beautiful illustrations makes me very happy because I can be more creative on paper. I also use paper to make handcrafted letters for my friend because I enjoy doing that.

Errors include article/plural ('the papers' to 'paper' or 'my crayons'), gerund vs. clause ('drawing ... makes' OK but needed subject-verb agreement and plural 'illustrations'), awkward 'go through the paper' corrected to 'use paper'. 'Handcraft letters' -> 'handcrafted letters'. Use consistent tense (present habitual) and correct plural forms. Suggestion: break long sentence into two and ensure noun-verb agreement.

× Yes, I think that writing letters with my hands rather than typing on the message can show my appreciation more toward the person who received the letter.

✓ Yes, I think that writing letters by hand rather than typing messages can show my appreciation more to the person who receives the letter.

Errors: 'with my hands' is better as 'by hand'; 'typing on the message' is unnatural — use 'typing messages'; article and tense: 'who received' -> 'who receives' to match general statement. Use 'to' rather than 'toward' for expressing appreciation. Suggestion: use standard idioms like 'by hand' and keep present simple for habitual actions.

× And also I think that making a handwriting paper can let the receiver to receive a physical things and he can store the letter.

✓ Also, I think that handwriting a letter lets the recipient receive a physical item that they can keep.

Problems: 'making a handwriting paper' is ungrammatical; use verb 'handwriting a letter' or 'writing a letter by hand'. 'Let the receiver to receive' incorrect structure; use 'lets the recipient receive' (no 'to'). 'a physical things' has article-number mismatch. Also use gender-neutral 'they' instead of 'he'. Suggestion: use concise verbs and correct article-number agreement.

× To memorize these relationships.

✓ To help memorize these relationships.

Fragment lacking clear verb; original is a sentence fragment. Adding 'help' makes it an infinitive phrase that completes previous thought. Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments by connecting to prior sentence.

× Yes, for me, I always keep those handwriting letters down because I think that knows better on the most valuable things to me because it represents the appreciation that the people express to worry and those letter was the true emotion that we all.

✓ Yes, I always keep those handwritten letters because I think they best represent what is most valuable to me; they show the appreciation people express and those letters contained real emotion.

Multiple errors: 'handwriting letters' -> 'handwritten letters'; 'keep ... down' unnecessary 'down'; 'I think that knows better' nonsensical; 'the most valuable things to me' -> 'what is most valuable to me'; 'people express to worry' unclear; tense consistency 'those letter was' -> 'those letters contained'. Suggestion: simplify and use correct plural forms and past tense where needed.

× Still.

✓ They still do.

Single-word response 'Still.' is incomplete. Provide a complete clause 'They still do.' to answer question. Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments; answer in full sentences in tests.

× Absolutely. I always carry a can and also the character and a crayon with me often because I think I need to roll down things that I think it is very important in order to make me memorize those things and also I think many.

✓ Absolutely. I always carry a pen and a notepad and a crayon with me because I think I need to write things down to help me remember, and I often need them in many situations.

Many errors: 'can' likely 'pen'; 'the character' unclear — likely 'notebook' or 'notepad'; 'roll down things' -> 'write things down'; 'make me memorize' -> 'help me remember'. Sentence ended abruptly 'and also I think many.' Complete with 'many situations'. Suggestion: use precise vocabulary and common collocations like 'write things down' and 'help me remember'.

× Situations we need to use friends to get us, for example sign or giving something a note.

✓ For example, situations where we need to ask for help, sign something, or give someone a note.

Original sentence misuses 'use friends to get us' and has incorrect noun forms. Rewritten to list clear examples: 'ask for help', 'sign something', 'give someone a note'. Suggestion: use correct verbs and prepositions; restructure list items in parallel form.