Paper— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cần trả lời trực tiếp và rõ ràng hơn, dùng câu chủ đề ngắn gọn, sửa ngữ pháp và phát âm. Thêm chi tiết cụ thể về thứ bạn làm (ví dụ: origami frog), quá trình hay cảm xúc, và dùng liên từ nếu cần. Tránh lặp và câu không hoàn chỉnh.

例: Yes, I have. I used to make origami figures, especially a paper frog. I enjoyed folding the paper step by step because it was relaxing and satisfying to see the frog take shape.

提案: Cần sử dụng thì quá khứ khi nói về tuổi thơ, nói rõ hoạt động và cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể. Sắp xếp câu theo cấu trúc chủ đề + chi tiết hỗ trợ, sử dụng liên từ để mạch lạc. Sửa lỗi từ vựng (e.g. "made" thay cho "found").

例: As a child, I liked making different shapes out of paper. For example, I often made paper frogs, flowers and simple boxes, and I liked decorating them with coloured pens.

提案: Câu trả lời mâu thuẫn ("absolutely" vs "rarely"). Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng (Yes/No + short explanation), sửa ngữ pháp và cấu trúc. Thêm chi tiết cụ thể (khi nào, cho ai, và lý do).

例: Not really; I rarely write physical letters nowadays. However, I sometimes write handwritten notes to my son and to some of my former primary and secondary school teachers because I think they appreciate the personal touch.

提案: Ý tưởng rõ nhưng cần diễn đạt mạch lạc hơn, tránh lặp từ, và mở rộng bằng ví dụ hoặc lý do. Dùng từ vựng chính xác hơn (e.g. "instant messaging" thay cho "social media app" lặp lại).

例: Many people do not keep handwritten letters today because instant messaging and social media allow them to communicate quickly. As a result, people tend to delete old messages and rarely store paper letters.

提案: Ý chính tốt nhưng có lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng ("when I wear" unclear, "teached" → "taught"). Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề, giải thích lý do ngắn gọn và cụ thể, dùng tối đa 3 câu hỗ trợ. Tránh lặp.

例: Yes, I always carry a pen and some paper when I go out. My mother taught me to do this so I can quickly jot down notes or reminders if I might forget something.

× Yes, I did. I have made up paper plain, some origin products check out a frog. Maybe that?

✓ Yes, I did. I have made simple paper crafts, some original products like a paper frog, maybe.

Student used incorrect verb forms and awkward word choices ('made up paper plain', 'origin products check out a frog'). Use 'made' with past participle structures correctly: 'have made' + object. Replace unclear nouns with 'paper crafts' and 'original products like a paper frog' to convey meaning clearly. Suggestion: practice common collocations (paper crafts, make a frog) and simple noun phrases.

× I prefer found it into some different shapes such frog plants maybe a sugar can or something that makes from paper.

✓ I used to fold it into different shapes, such as frogs, plants, maybe a paper cup or something made from paper.

Multiple errors: tense and verb choice ('prefer found' is incorrect). Use 'used to' for past habits. 'Found' should be 'fold' and 'that makes from paper' should be passive 'made from paper'. Also use plural forms and correct phrase 'such as'. Suggestion: learn 'used to' for past habits and correct verb 'fold' for paper shaping.

× Absolutely now I rarely write physical letters but I usually write it to send to my son up my teachers in my primary and secondary schools.

✓ Absolutely. Now I rarely write physical letters, but I usually wrote them to send to my teachers when I was in primary and secondary school, and sometimes to my son.

Tense inconsistency: student mixes present and past. 'Now I rarely write' conflicts with 'usually write it to send...in my primary and secondary schools' which refers to past, so use past tense 'wrote' and 'when I was'. Also pronoun and article errors: 'write it' -> 'wrote them'; 'my teachers in my primary and secondary schools' -> 'my teachers when I was in primary and secondary school'. Suggestion: separate present habits from past habits and align verb tenses.

× Maybe not because they can chat with each other through social media app and social media app just take some a few seconds to share send the text to each other.

✓ Maybe not, because they can chat with each other through social media apps, which only take a few seconds to send messages to each other.

Awkward phrasing and article issues: 'social media app' should be plural 'social media apps' or 'a social media app'; 'just take some a few seconds' is redundant—use 'only take a few seconds'; 'share send the text' should be 'send messages'. Suggestion: use correct number agreement for nouns and avoid redundant words.

× Absolutely, I usually carry a pen and some paper with me when I wear. That's because my mom teached me to do that because if I need to write down something like take note about something that I maybe I may forgot

✓ Absolutely. I usually carry a pen and some paper with me when I go out. That's because my mom taught me to do that, in case I need to write something down or take a note about something I might forget.

Errors: wrong verb 'wear' should be 'go out'; past tense 'teached' should be 'taught'; sentence structure and modal consistency: use 'in case' and 'might forget' for possibility. Also word order: 'write something down' and 'take a note'. Suggestion: memorize irregular verbs (teach-taught), use 'in case' for purpose, and practice common collocations ('go out', 'write something down').