Paper— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Clarify meaning, correct vocabulary and grammar, and be concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No + brief detail), then add one supporting detail using linking words. Use the correct word 'origami' and past tense consistently. Avoid irrelevant or unclear words.

例: Yes, I used to make paper crafts when I was a child. For example, I often folded origami figures like cranes and frogs, and I enjoyed giving them to friends.

提案: Answer directly and use correct tense and vocabulary. Begin with a topic sentence, then add a specific supporting detail and a linking word. Replace vague phrases like 'nearly loved' with clear expressions.

例: I liked making origami and drawing on paper as a child. For instance, I spent hours folding cranes and sketching animals, which helped me relax and be creative.

提案: Be concise and use accurate words (e.g., 'physical letters' or 'handwritten notes'). Give a clear topic sentence, then one specific example connected by a linking word. Complete your sentence and avoid unfinished thoughts.

例: Yes, I sometimes write handwritten notes to express my appreciation. For example, when I gave a friend a present last year, I included a short handwritten letter to thank them.

提案: Provide a balanced, clear response and use linking words. State your opinion and support it with a specific reason or example. Avoid question marks at the end of statements and improve grammar.

例: Yes, some people still keep handwritten letters, while others prefer typing. For example, older relatives often save cards and letters, whereas younger people usually store messages digitally.

提案: Use clear vocabulary and correct prepositions. Start with a direct yes/no statement, then add a specific supporting detail using a linking word. Replace unclear phrases like 'in plants' with the correct object (e.g., 'in my bag').

例: Yes, I usually carry a small diary and a pen with me. For example, I keep them in my bag so I can quickly jot down ideas or reminders when I'm out.

× Yes, I hop when I was a child, I often played for them or pip which is called Oligami.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I often made them or did origami.

The original sentence uses incorrect verb 'hop' and 'pip' and has awkward structure. The tense 'when I was a child' requires past simple verbs. Replace 'hop' with nothing, use 'made' or 'did' to refer to creating crafts, and correct 'Oligami' to 'origami'. Also restructure to 'Yes, when I was a child, I often made them or did origami.' Suggestion: Use past simple for habits in the past and correct vocabulary.

× Odigami is one of famous praying in Japan.

✓ Origami is a famous craft in Japan.

'Odigami' is a misspelling of 'origami'. 'One of famous praying' is incorrect: 'one of' requires a plural noun (e.g., 'one of the most famous crafts') or use 'a famous craft'. 'Praying' is wrong word choice. Use 'Origami is a famous craft in Japan.' Suggestion: Choose correct noun and article form.

× As I mentioned before, I would like to play Oligami or drawing on paper.

✓ As I mentioned before, I liked to do origami or draw on paper.

The student mixes conditional/modal 'would like to' with past reference 'As I mentioned before'. For past habits use past simple ('liked to do', 'drew') or 'used to'. Also 'drawing' should be parallel with 'do origami' so use infinitive 'draw'. Correct spelling 'origami'. Suggestion: Match tense for past habits and keep parallel verb forms.

× I nearly loved them.

✓ I really loved them.

'Nearly' means 'almost' and contradicts 'loved'; likely intended meaning is 'really' or 'very'. Use 'really loved' to express strong affection. Also ensure tense consistency with past habit. Suggestion: Use adverb that matches intended meaning.

× Yes I sometimes like physical correlators to express my appreciation for example, I once gave a present to other people. I like

✓ Yes, I sometimes like to write physical letters to express my appreciation; for example, I once gave a present to other people.

'correlators' is incorrect word; likely 'letters'. Need infinitive 'like to write' for habitual action. Missing commas and semicolon for clarity. Sentence fragment 'I like' at the end is incomplete and should be removed or completed. Maintain past tense for past example. Suggestion: Use correct vocabulary ('letters') and complete the sentence structure.

× Yes some people take a note on paper while other people usually do typing on memo?

✓ Yes, some people take notes on paper while other people usually type memos.

'Take a note' should be plural 'take notes' for general habit. 'Do typing' is awkward; use 'type'. 'On memo' is incorrect preposition and singular; use 'memos' or 'on a memo' depending on meaning. Remove question mark as it's a statement answering question about habits. Suggestion: Use plural nouns for general habits and correct verb collocation ('type memos').

× Yes, every day I bring my diary in plants to take note on the diary.

✓ Yes, every day I bring my diary and a pen to take notes in it.

'In plants' is incorrect; likely 'and a pen'. 'Take note on the diary' is awkward: use 'take notes in it' or 'write in it'. Use plural 'notes' for habitual action. Ensure correct prepositions: 'in it' for writing inside a diary. Suggestion: Use correct items ('pen'), plural 'notes', and proper prepositions ('in it').