Paper— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答要更自然并直接回应问题。开头应有主题句，然后用一到两句具体细节支持。注意时态一致（过去时），避免重复或语法错误，例如“paper plans”应为“paper planes”。可以用连接词简洁扩展。

例: Yes, I used to make paper planes when I was a child. I would fold colourful paper into different designs and sometimes write short messages on them to throw to my classmates for fun.

提案: 注意时态一致和句子连贯。开头用主题句，再用连接词（for example, then）组织细节。避免重复和小错误（例如 wrote → write 的时态）。尽量保持不超过五句。

例: I liked buying different kinds of decorative paper and decorating them. For example, I would draw flowers and write short letters on the paper, then fold them and put them into colourful envelopes to give to friends.

提案: 回答应简洁并避免重复词（physical physical）。用一两句说明原因并用连接词加强逻辑（because, so）。可补充具体例子说明情感价值。

例: Yes, I still write physical letters to my teachers every Teacher's Day because I believe a handwritten note feels more personal and sincere than an email. For example, I usually include a short memory or thank-you note to show my appreciation.

提案: 回答不完整且句末未说完。需给出完整的主题句並用一到两句具体例子或原因支持。注意连贯性和语法（contain → containS, tense and singular/plural).

例: Yes, many people still keep handwritten letters because they carry sentimental value and memories. For example, I keep birthday cards from family members because they remind me of special moments and the effort they put into writing them.

提案: 回答清晰但口语填充词（yeah）应删减，品牌名首字母大写（Apple Pencil）。可用一两句具体优点支持并用连接词（because, so）增强逻辑。

例: No, I usually carry my iPad and Apple Pencil instead because they are more convenient for taking notes and storing information. For example, I can organise my notes, search them easily, and avoid carrying extra stationery.

× Yes, I made paper plans when I was a child and then I also write something on the paper and threw it to my classmates.

✓ Yes, I made paper planes when I was a child and then I also wrote something on the paper and threw it to my classmates.

句子中含有动词时态混用问题。句子开头用过去时 made，后面却用现在时 write，最后又回到过去时 threw。要保持时态一致，描述过去的行为应全部使用过去时：write 改为 wrote。另外注意拼写：plans 应为 planes（纸飞机）。建议在叙述过去经历时，全句使用过去时。

× I like to buy different kinds of paper and decorate them.

✓ I liked to buy different kinds of paper and decorate them.

题目问的是“作为孩子喜欢做什么？”这是对过去习惯的询问，应使用过去时态 liked 而不是现在时态 like。若想强调过去的习惯，可用 used to，比如“ I used to buy different kinds of paper and decorate them.” 建议根据上下文确定时态一致。

× For example, I might draw some flowers on the paper and wrote a letter on them.

✓ For example, I might draw some flowers on the paper and write a letter on them.

这句话中使用了情态动词 might，后面应接动词原形 draw/write，而不是过去式 wrote。情态动词后不能用过去式。将 wrote 改为 write；如果想表达过去常做，可用 might have drawn/used to，但与上下文保持一致更自然。

× then I will put it into envelopes.

✓ Then I put it into envelopes.

句子在叙述过去的行为，但用了将来时 will put，应改为过去时 put 以保持时态一致。若要表达习惯可用 used to put。注意句首大写。

× Yes, of course I always write physical letters to my teachers on the teacher's day every year because I believe that the physical physical letter has more emotional function than the email.

✓ Yes, of course I always wrote physical letters to my teachers on Teacher's Day every year because I believe that the physical letter had more emotional value than email.

多处问题：1) 时态不一致——问题是“你还写实体信吗？”若作过去习惯应用过去时 wrote；如果回答现在仍写则应全部用现在时（I always write ...）需根据语境选用。2) 第三人称单数不适用此句，主要是时态与名词用法问题。3) 重复词 physical physical 删除。4) 词汇搭配：use “emotional value” 比 “emotional function” 更自然；email 前通常不用定冠词。建议统一时态并使用自然搭配。

× Yes they do because handwriting letters contain a lot of emotion and it reminds them how important this person was for example I always keep my birthday cards because it's

✓ Yes, they do, because handwritten letters contain a lot of emotion and remind people how important a person was. For example, I always keep my birthday cards because they are meaningful.

原句存在结构混乱和时态不一致问题：1) handwriting letters（现在分词名词化）应改为 handwritten letters（形容词）。2) 主语一致性问题：it reminds them → remind people（复数主语对应复数动词或改用it并明确指代）。3) 句子太长，需要断句并补全结尾（原句以 because it's 未完）。建议分句，保持主谓一致并补全含义。

× No, I usually keep the iPad here and the apple pencil with me instead of carrying paper and pens because it's more convenient for me to make notes and yeah digitalization is very useful.

✓ No, I usually keep my iPad and Apple Pencil with me instead of carrying paper and pens, because they're more convenient for me to take notes, and digitalisation is very useful.

问题包括：1) 冠词和所有格用法：the iPad/the apple pencil 在此处更自然用 my iPad and Apple Pencil。2) 人称代词和动词一致：it’s 指代不明确，改为 they're（指代前面的设备）。3) make notes 更常用短语是 take notes。4) 拼写统一：Apple Pencil 专有名词首字母大写；digitalisation/digitalization 二选其一。建议使用my + 设备名，动词短语保持自然搭配，并保证代词指代清晰。