Paper— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Speak in grammatically correct, concise sentences. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., "Yes, I make paper crafts") then add one or two specific details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect verb forms.

例: Yes, I make paper crafts. For example, I create paper architecture models and simple paper art with my children, which is always a precious family activity.

提案: Answer the question about your childhood directly. Use past tense and one or two specific examples. Keep sentences short and avoid unrelated information about your son unless you explain the connection clearly.

例: As a child, I enjoyed making simple paper books and drawing cartoons. I would fold paper into little booklets and draw comic strips to share with my friends.

提案: Use correct tense and avoid repetition. Begin with a clear topic sentence ("No, I rarely write physical letters") and then explain why with one supporting detail and a linking word (e.g., "because").

例: No, I rarely write physical letters nowadays because I usually use email or messaging apps, but sometimes I write a handwritten note because it feels more sentimental.

提案: Be specific and complete your idea. Use linking words (e.g., "because") and give a reason or example. Avoid repetition and finish the sentence with a clear point.

例: Yes, I think some people still keep handwritten letters because they are personal keepsakes and can hold emotional value that digital messages often lack.

提案: Keep answers concise and correct collocations ("when I go out"). Use one clear reason with an example. Remove repeated words and complete the example.

例: Absolutely. When I go out I always carry a notebook and pen in my bag so I can write down shopping lists or quick reminders.

× Yes, I have been made paper architecture.

✓ Yes, I have made paper architecture.

The present perfect progressive 'have been made' is incorrect here because the student wants to say they created paper architecture and still have the result/experience. 'Have made' (present perfect) correctly uses the past participle 'made' with auxiliary 'have' to show completed action with present relevance. Remove the extra 'been' to fix the verb form. Suggestion: Use 'I have made' to describe experiences up to now.

× I sometimes made paper art with my children.

✓ I sometimes make paper art with my children.

The time adverb 'sometimes' indicates a habitual action, which requires the simple present tense 'make' rather than the simple past 'made'. Use simple present for repeated or habitual actions. Suggestion: Use 'I sometimes make' for habitual activities.

× So So it was it is a very precious time for for my life.

✓ So it is a very precious time in my life.

Mixed tenses and word duplication occur: 'was it is' mixes past and present; 'for for' is repeated; preposition 'in' is required ('in my life' is the natural collocation). Keep consistent present tense 'is' to describe the lasting value of the time. Suggestion: Use one tense and remove duplicate words.

× My son, my son likes drawing a cartoon cartoon book.

✓ My son likes drawing cartoons and making cartoon books.

Repetition 'my son, my son' and 'cartoon cartoon' are errors. 'Likes drawing a cartoon cartoon book' is ungrammatical: 'drawing cartoons' or 'drawing for a cartoon book' would work. Also added parallel structure 'drawing... and making...' to better reflect the intended activities. Suggestion: Avoid repetition and use parallel verbs for clarity.

× So he often made a cart paper cartoon book and show me show me two show me two is a phrase.

✓ So he often makes a cardboard cartoon book and shows it to me. 'Show me two' is a phrase.

Use simple present 'makes' and 'shows' for habitual actions. 'Made' and 'show' mixed tenses; 'cart paper' is unclear—'cardboard' fits. The phrase explanation should be separated and put in quotes; keep clear sentence structure. Suggestion: Use simple present for habitual actions and correct noun choice.

× No, I seldom seldom write wrote wrote a handwriting handwriting letters, but sometimes I would like I want to write a handwriting because it is sentimental.

✓ No, I seldom write handwritten letters, but sometimes I want to write by hand because it is sentimental.

Multiple issues: duplicated words, mixed tenses 'write wrote', incorrect noun/verb forms 'a handwriting handwriting letters'. Use 'seldom write' (simple present) for frequency and 'handwritten letters' or 'write by hand' for the action. 'Would like I want to' is redundant; choose 'want'. Suggestion: Use 'seldom write handwritten letters' or 'seldom write by hand' and avoid repetition.

× Yes, I thought people still keep writing by handwritten handwritten letters because because handwritten writer is more is more

✓ Yes, I think people still keep handwritten letters because handwritten writing is more personal.

The student used past tense 'thought' but should use present 'think' to answer generally. Repetition 'handwritten handwritten' and 'because because' are errors. 'Handwritten writer' is incorrect; 'handwritten writing' or better 'handwritten letters' and add adjective 'personal' to complete the comparison. Suggestion: Use present tense for general beliefs and choose correct noun/adjective forms.

× absolutely, yes when I go to outside I definitely carry carry a notebook and pen in my bag In order to in order to remember to do such as shopping and

✓ Absolutely. Yes, when I go out I definitely carry a notebook and a pen in my bag in order to remember things such as shopping.

'Go to outside' is incorrect; native expression is 'go out'. Duplicate words 'carry carry' and 'in order to in order to' must be removed. Add article 'a' before 'pen'. The phrase 'remember to do such as shopping and' is incomplete; change to 'remember things such as shopping' to complete the idea. Suggestion: Use 'go out', include articles where needed, remove duplicates, and finish the list or generalize with 'things such as'.