Paper— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cải thiện: Tránh lặp từ và tiếng ngập ngừng; sử dụng câu chủ đề rõ ràng và cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể. Nên nói tối đa 3–4 câu, dùng liên từ như "for example" hoặc "such as" để liệt kê các đồ làm bằng giấy. Sửa ngữ pháp (thì quá khứ khi nói về khi còn nhỏ) và từ vựng chính xác (ví dụ: "paper fan", "paper pencil case").

例: Yes. When I was a child I enjoyed making crafts from paper. For example, I made paper pencil cases and small paper fans, and I often decorated them with colored markers. Those activities were my favorite hobby because they were creative and inexpensive.

提案: Cải thiện: Hoàn thiện câu và kết luận ý (hiện câu bị bỏ dở). Dùng cấu trúc rõ ràng: chủ đề + lý do + ví dụ. Tránh nói quá dài không có liên kết; dùng liên từ như "however" hoặc "because" để diễn đạt lý do cụ thể (ví dụ: cảm xúc, cá nhân hóa).

例: Yes, I still write physical letters sometimes because handwritten notes feel more personal. For example, I send handwritten birthday cards to close family members because I believe they appreciate the extra effort. However, I use email for quick messages.

提案: Cải thiện: Câu trả lời thiếu nhất quán: bạn nói "people keep" nhưng sau đó phủ nhận việc viết tay. Cần đưa quan điểm rõ ràng (có/không) rồi giải thích cụ thể và đưa ví dụ. Dùng liên từ như "although" hoặc "but" để đối lập. Tránh diễn đạt chung chung; nêu nhóm người vẫn giữ thư tay (ví dụ: người lớn tuổi, cặp đôi yêu xa).

例: I think some people still keep handwritten letters, although fewer people write them now. For instance, older generations often save letters from relatives, and couples sometimes keep love letters as mementos. But most everyday communication has moved to apps like Messenger.

提案: Cải thiện: Sửa lỗi từ vựng và ngữ pháp ("carry a phone" không "font"). Trả lời trực tiếp, rồi giải thích ngắn gọn với ví dụ cụ thể. Dùng linking words như "but" và "when" để nối ý. Giữ 2–3 câu súc tích.

例: No, I usually don't carry paper and pens when I go out because I use my phone to take notes. But when I go to school I always bring a notebook and pens to study and do written exercises.

提案: Cải thiện: Sử dụng thì quá khứ nhất quán khi kể về quá khứ, tránh câu bỏ dở. Cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể về những gì bạn vẽ, tần suất và lý do. Dùng liên từ như "because" và "so" để làm rõ lý do và kết quả. Giữ 2–3 câu rõ ràng.

例: As a child I used paper mostly for drawing and painting because it was my favorite hobby. I painted almost every day, filling sketchbooks with landscapes and cartoons, so our house had stacks of artwork everywhere.

× Yes, of course, when I was little, my my favorite hobby is doing playing with paper.

✓ Yes, of course, when I was little, my favorite hobby was playing with paper.

The sentence mixes past time reference 'when I was little' with present tense 'is'; use past tense 'was' for consistency and delete duplicate 'my' and wrong verb 'doing'. Suggestion: match verb tense to time reference and use 'playing with paper'.

× Umm, I have to, I have been to umm like uh, pencil case with paper and uh fan woods paper and I love it.

✓ I used to make things like pencil cases and paper fans, and I loved it.

The original has incorrect use of present perfect 'have been to' and unclear object phrases. Use 'used to' to indicate past habitual actions; 'make' is the correct verb for creating items; 'loved' matches past timeframe.

× Yes, of course I always write physical letters even though nowadays people use technology to write letters more but I still want to write with my own hand and I think it will make the readers feel more

✓ Yes, of course I always write physical letters. Even though nowadays people use technology more to write, I still like to write by hand because I think it makes readers feel more special.

Run-on sentence and awkward word order. Use present simple 'write' for habitual action, place 'more' correctly after 'use technology', and 'write by hand' is the natural phrase. Complete the thought by adding 'special'.

× Yes, I think people keep handwriting letters today a lot because nowadays technology improves a lot and we have like Facebook, Messenger and we can use it so to contact and there is no reason to write handwriting letters.

✓ Yes, I think people still keep handwritten letters today, but because technology has improved and we have platforms like Facebook and Messenger to contact each other, there is less reason to write handwritten letters.

Use 'handwritten' (adjective) instead of 'handwriting' and avoid repetition 'a lot'. Use present perfect 'has improved' to describe change over time. 'Less reason' is more natural than 'no reason'.

× No because when I go out I often care carry a font instead of paper and pens because I think it's more convenient but when I go to school I still carry paper and pens to study and write physical.

✓ No, because when I go out I often carry a phone instead of paper and pens because I think it's more convenient. But when I go to school I still carry paper and pens to study and write physically.

Typo 'care' should be 'carry' and 'font' should be 'phone'. 'Write physical' is incorrect; use adverb 'physically'. Add comma and split into two sentences for clarity.

× As a child, I usually use paper for painting because painting is my favorite hobbies.

✓ As a child, I usually used paper for painting because painting was my favorite hobby.

Past time 'As a child' requires past tense 'used' and 'was'. 'Hobbies' is plural but context needs singular 'hobby'.

× I paint every day and my house is full of paper and I draw a lot and I enjoy it so paper will be the good

✓ I painted every day; my house was full of paper. I drew a lot and enjoyed it, so paper was a great material for me.

Shift verbs to past tense to match childhood context: 'painted', 'was', 'drew', 'enjoyed'. Finish the final clause appropriately: 'paper was a great material for me' instead of incomplete fragment.