Paper— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答要更直接且句子更流畅，避免重复和语法错误。可以先给出主题句（如"No, I haven’t made paper crafts"），然后用一两句解释原因，使用连接词并纠正词汇（crafts 而非 crops； dislike/do not enjoy 而非 hate on）。注意发音停顿次数，控制在最多5句内。

例: No, I haven’t made paper crafts. I don’t enjoy hands-on crafts because I’m not very skilled at them, and I prefer activities like reading or watching movies instead.

提案: 结构总体可以，但要更自然简洁并注意词汇搭配（use email 而非 writing some letters with e-mail； faster → faster）。可以先给出直接回答，再用一两句具体原因并使用连接词如 "because" 或 "so"。保持句子数不超过5句。

例: Not really. I mostly use email now because it’s faster and more convenient for both work and staying in touch with friends.

提案: 回答可以更精练并用更自然的连接词（for special occasions, such as…）。避免重复（like… just like…）和不确定词过多（I guess → In many cases）。可以补充具体例子说明谁会保存信件（e.g., older generations）。

例: Yes, many people still keep handwritten letters, especially for special occasions such as birthdays, Christmas, or anniversaries, and older family members often cherish these keepsakes.

提案: 要更礼貌自然地表达不常携带笔纸的习惯，避免口语填充词（so that so）。先给出直接回答，然后说明例外情况并用连接词（however, unless, when）。注意代词搭配（carry… with me）。

例: No, I don’t usually carry paper and pens with me. However, I might bring them when I travel or need to complete a specific task that requires writing.

提案: 回答应为连贯完整的句子，避免断句和重复（Drawing, Drawing a lot）。先给出主题句（I liked drawing and writing stories），然后补充细节（what kinds of drawings or stories, how often）。收尾处不要留下未完成的句子。

例: As a child I liked drawing a lot, mostly cartoons and animals, and I also used to write short stories about imaginary adventures almost every week.

× Not really I I have never made any crops with paper because I just hate on doing this.

✓ Not really. I have never made any crafts with paper because I just hate doing this.

该句存在多处问题： 1) “I I” 是重复，应删除重复词。 2) “crops” 用词错误，原意应为“crafts”（手工艺品）；“crops” 意为农作物。 3) “hate on doing” 中“on” 多余，固定搭配为“hate doing sth.”。 修改建议：删除重复词，替换错误词汇“crops”为“crafts”，并去掉“on”。（语法问题类型涵盖：26 句子结构错误、11 介词使用错误）

× I am not pretty talented with some crafts and also painting.

✓ I am not very talented at crafts or painting.

错误分析： 1) “pretty” 在这里用作副词表示“相当”，但“pretty talented” 口语可接受，书面更自然用“very”。 2) 介词搭配错误：应为“talented at” 而不是“talented with”。 3) “with some crafts and also painting” 结构不够自然，改为“at crafts or painting”。 修改建议：将“pretty”换为“very”（或保留口语的 pretty），将介词改为“at”，并使用“or”连接两项。（语法问题类型：27 主谓一致/结构相关、11 介词使用错误）

× Not really, I don't write physical letters anymore and now I just focus on writing some letters with e-mail because it's quite faster and more convenient for keeping in touch, especially for work.

✓ Not really. I don't write physical letters anymore; now I just focus on writing emails because it's faster and more convenient for keeping in touch, especially for work.

错误分析： 1) 标点和句子连接问题：原句逗号过多，建议分句或用分号。 2) “writing some letters with e-mail” 用词和搭配不自然，应为“writing emails”或“writing letters by email”。 3) “quite faster” 比较级前不应加 quite，改为“faster”或“quite a bit faster”。 修改建议：重构句子，使用“emails”作为名词，调整比较级搭配，修正标点。（语法问题类型：6 现在时问题/26 句子结构错误）

× I guess they still keep handwritten letters today, especially for some specific days just like birthdays and for some specific festivals, just like Christmas, New Year's festival. And they will try to write.

✓ I guess people still keep handwritten letters today, especially for specific occasions like birthdays and festivals such as Christmas and New Year. They still try to write them.

错误分析： 1) 主语不明确，原句开头的“they”指代不清，改为“people”。 2) “some specific days just like” 用法重复且冗长，改为“specific occasions like”。 3) “New Year's festival” 用词不自然，改为“New Year”或“New Year's Day”。 4) “And they will try to write.” 时态和表达不自然，改为“They still try to write them.” 更清晰。 修改建议：明确主语，简化短语，调整节日表达，并指明“them”（指手写信）。（语法问题类型：26 句子结构错误、12 代词使用错误）

× No, I'm lazy person so that so I usually don't carry paper and pens with myself when I go out.

✓ No, I'm a lazy person, so I usually don't carry paper and pens with me when I go out.

错误分析： 1) 缺少不定冠词：应为“a lazy person”。 2) “so that so” 是冗余且错误的表达，删除重复词并使用“so”。 3) 代词错误：“with myself” 不自然，正确为“with me”。 修改建议：加上冠词，去掉多余短语，改正反身代词为宾格代词。（语法问题类型：22 冠词错误、16 连词使用错误、12 代词使用错误）

× But except for some special case, if I'm going to have some trip or even I have to deal with some specific missions then I will.

✓ But except for some special cases, if I'm going on a trip or have to deal with some specific tasks, then I will.

错误分析： 1) “some special case” 应为复数“some special cases”或“a special case”。 2) “going to have some trip” 搭配错误，应为“going on a trip”。 3) “specific missions” 词不当，改为“specific tasks” 更自然。 4) 句子连接和时态可简化为“If ... , I will.” 修改建议：调整名词单复数，修正动词短语搭配，替换不自然词汇。（语法问题类型：1 单复数问题、26 句子结构错误、11 介词使用错误）

× What did you like to do with paper as a child?

✓ What did you like to do with paper as a child?

该问题句本身语法正确，过去时“did”与动词原形“like”搭配正确，无需修改。 (语法问题类型：6 现在时问题 — 这里标注为核实，实际无误)

× I usually like. Drawing, Drawing a lot, even though I am not talented at it.

✓ I usually liked drawing a lot, even though I wasn't very talented at it.

错误分析： 1) 断句错误：“I usually like. Drawing, Drawing a lot” 不连贯，应为过去时完整句子。 2) 时态不一致：问题是过去习惯，应使用过去时“liked/drew”。 3) 句尾“at it” 指代不清，但可理解为绘画，保持为“at it”。 修改建议：将动词改为过去时，合并短句，形成完整句子。（语法问题类型：5 过去时问题、26 句子结构错误）

× And also I used to write a lot of stories when I was a kid and they are.

✓ I also used to write a lot of stories when I was a kid.

错误分析： 1) 句尾“and they are.” 不完整且不符合语境，应删除。 2) 句子其余部分时态正确，使用“used to” 表示过去习惯。 修改建议：删除不完整从句，保留完整陈述。（语法问题类型：26 句子结构错误、5 过去时问题）