Paper— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence. Use correct tense and grammar, and give one or two specific supporting details linked logically. Avoid unrelated information about studies. For example, briefly say whether you make paper crafts and, if not, explain a specific reason and what you do instead.

例: No, I don't usually make paper crafts. I focus on my studies, especially biology and math, so I don't have much free time for hobbies. However, sometimes I fold simple origami when I want to relax.

提案: Start with a direct short answer, then add one clear reason and a brief example. Use correct verb forms and linkers like 'because' or 'so' to make your response coherent. Avoid vague phrases like 'a lot of rooms are available in the market.'

例: Not really, I rarely write physical letters because messaging apps are much faster. For example, I usually text my family on WhatsApp or send photos on Instagram instead of mailing notes.

提案: Give a balanced opinion: start with 'Some people...' or 'I think fewer people...', then explain why with a specific reason and an example. Use correct nouns and pronouns and avoid repetition. Use linking words like 'however' to contrast ideas.

例: I think fewer people keep handwritten letters now because most communication is online. However, some people still save letters for sentimental reasons, such as old family notes or cards that remind them of special occasions.

提案: Answer directly and give one or two specific situations when you carry them. Use simple correct sentences and linkage like 'because' or 'for example'. Avoid stray fragments and repetition.

例: Yes, I usually carry a small notebook and a pen because I need to take notes for classes and write reminders. For example, I jot down meeting times or shopping lists when I'm out with friends.

提案: Begin with a clear topic sentence about a childhood activity, then give one or two specific examples of how you used paper. Use past tense consistently and avoid filler words. Keep it concise and relevant to 'as a child.'

例: As a child, I liked drawing and making school notes on paper. For example, I drew pictures during art class and kept handwritten science notes that helped me learn new topics.

× Unfortunately, I am not make any craft with paper because I am a student.

✓ Unfortunately, I do not make any crafts with paper because I am a student.

The student used 'am not make' which mixes 'be' with base verb incorrectly. Use simple present tense for habitual actions: 'do not make'. Also use plural 'crafts' for general activities.

× Recently I am completed my 12 student supramidential stream.

✓ Recently I completed my 12th grade in the science stream.

The phrase 'I am completed' incorrectly combines present 'am' with past participle. Use simple past 'completed' to describe a finished action. Also correct nouns and ordinal '12th grade' and 'science stream' for clarity.

× Then I will also studying in the biological and math because it is very interesting subject and also challenging and I will also spend a lot of time with the subjects because this subject is very difficult.

✓ Then I will also study biology and math because they are very interesting and challenging subjects, and I will spend a lot of time on these subjects because they are difficult.

The student used 'will also studying' which incorrectly combines 'will' with -ing form; after 'will' use base verb 'study'. Also correct subject-verb agreement and plural forms: 'they are' and 'subjects'. Use 'spend time on' not 'with' when referring to subjects.

× Not really. I'm not writing the physical letters because in a in that time a lot of rooms are available in the market.

✓ Not really. I do not write physical letters because nowadays many other options are available in the market.

'I'm not writing' implies an action in progress; for general habit use simple present 'do not write'. 'In a in that time' is unclear; use 'nowadays'. 'A lot of rooms' is wrong collocation; use 'many other options'.

× So I will also use the smartphone in my daily routine and I will also texting and writing the letter with my friends and family to using the social media like WhatsApp and Instagram and all people can use these things.

✓ So I also use a smartphone in my daily routine, and I text and write messages to my friends and family using social media like WhatsApp and Instagram, which many people use.

Mixed tenses: 'will also use' and 'will also texting' are inconsistent. For habitual actions use simple present: 'use', 'text', 'write'. 'Writing the letter' should be 'write messages', and 'to using' is incorrect; use 'using'. Clarified sentence structure and subject.

× I think lot of people's always write the handwriting letters today because it give you a lot of happiness and always give a express her expression.

✓ I think many people still write handwritten letters today because they give you a lot of happiness and help express your feelings.

Errors: 'lot of people's' incorrect plural/possessive; use 'many people'. 'Always write the handwriting letters' redundant; 'still' or 'handwritten letters' is better. 'It give' subject-verb agreement: 'they give'. 'give a express her expression' is ungrammatical; use 'help express your feelings'.

× But in recent time a lot of people always use the smartphone and communicate with the online.

✓ But recently many people use smartphones and communicate online.

Use 'recently' instead of 'in recent time'. 'A lot of people always' is awkward; 'many people' is sufficient. 'Communicate with the online' is incorrect; say 'communicate online'.

× Then I will also prefer to some people always handwriting the letters so that's why.

✓ I would also prefer that some people continue handwriting letters for that reason.

'Then I will also prefer to some people always handwriting the letters' mixes future and gerund incorrectly. Use 'would prefer' or 'I prefer that' and 'handwriting' should be 'handwrite' or 'continue handwriting' with correct structure. Clarified meaning.

× Yes, I always carry papers and pens with our and when I'm going out because I am a student, then I will also going to with my friends and meeting the family member.

✓ Yes, I always carry papers and pens with me when I go out because I am a student, and I often go out with my friends and meet family members.

Multiple issues: 'with our' should be 'with me'. Use simple present 'when I go out' for habitual actions, not 'when I'm going out'. 'I will also going to with my friends' is ungrammatical; use 'I often go out with my friends'. 'Meeting the family member' should be 'meet family members'.

× Then I will also write down the paper and I'll I always share our motion to speak in face to face and communicate then I will also.

✓ Then I also write on paper and I always prefer to express myself face to face when communicating.

'Will also write down the paper' mixes future with habitual action; use 'write on paper'. 'I'll I always share our motion' is confusing and ungrammatical; clarify to 'I always prefer to express myself'. 'Face to face' should be 'face-to-face' but hyphen omitted is acceptable; simplified for clarity.

× But in a recent time, a lot of people are.

✓ But recently, many people do not.

Sentence is incomplete: 'a lot of people are' requires a complement. Provide a complete response consistent with context, e.g., 'many people do not' (keep handwritten letters).

× Uh, then I will also add child.

✓ When I was a child,

'Then I will also add child' is ungrammatical and mixes future with incorrect verbs. Use past reference 'When I was a child' to introduce childhood habits.

× I always do with the paper on the science lecture notes and, uh, English lecture notes because it is very important in my childhood life when it gave me a lot of knowledge about the studies.

✓ I always used paper for my science and English lecture notes because it was very important in my childhood; it gave me a lot of knowledge about my studies.

Tense inconsistency: describing past habits use past tense 'used' not present 'do'. 'It is very important in my childhood life' should be past 'it was very important'. Clarified sentence structure and possessive 'my studies'.

× Then I will also a lot of things then can I write on the paper?

✓ I also did many things on paper; I could write on it.

Original is fragmented and ungrammatical. Use coherent past-tense statements: 'I also did many things on paper' and 'I could write on it' to express ability and past activities.

× So that's why I will also like paper as a.

✓ So that's why I liked paper.

Mixed tense and incomplete phrase. Use past tense 'liked' to match discussion of childhood preferences and finish the sentence concisely.