Paper— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, give one or two specific examples, and use linking words to connect ideas. Avoid repetition and filler words. Also correct basic grammar (e.g., tense, articles, word order).

例: Yes. I made a lot of paper crafts when I was a child because I enjoyed making things by hand. For example, I folded origami animals like cranes and cats and also made paper masks for school plays. As a result, paper crafting became one of my favorite hobbies.

提案: Answer directly using correct tenses and fewer hesitations. State frequency and give a specific recent example with a reason. Use linking words such as 'but' or 'because' to clarify contrast or reason.

例: Yes, I do sometimes. I wrote a few handwritten letters last year for a school activity where students exchanged messages. However, I don’t write them often because I usually communicate by email or messaging apps.

提案: Speak more confidently and use clearer vocabulary and grammar. Give a direct opinion followed by a reason and an example. Replace vague phrases with specific ones and avoid filler words.

例: I think very few people keep handwritten letters nowadays because most communication is digital. For instance, people tend to store messages on their phones or computers instead of saving paper letters, so the practice is declining.

提案: Give a concise direct answer and one clear reason. Correct small errors (e.g., 'pin and pins' → 'pens and paper'). Use linking words like 'because' and avoid repeating the same idea.

例: No, I usually don’t. I rarely carry pens or paper because I do most of my work on a computer or tablet, so I don’t need them when I go out.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence, then give specific examples and a brief comment about why you enjoyed it. Remove fillers and minor grammar mistakes. Use linking words like 'for example' or 'such as'.

例: As a child, I loved folding paper into shapes. For example, I made origami animals such as cats, dogs and cranes, and I also created paper decorations for festivals because it was creative and fun.

× 'Definitely yes, I have my many crafts with paper when I was when I was in my childhood.'

✓ 'Definitely yes. I made many crafts with paper when I was a child.'

'Subject-verb agreement and sentence structure: "I have my many crafts with paper when I was when I was in my childhood" is ungrammatical. The correct past action is expressed with simple past "I made" not present perfect "I have" plus timing "when I was a child." Remove redundant words and use a clear past tense. Suggestion: use simple past for completed past activities and a concise time expression.'

× 'Uh, it is my, I think it, it is kind of my hobby since I was really like to make things by by hand and usually paper to make many crafts.'

✓ 'I think it has been a hobby since I was young because I really like making things by hand, often using paper to make crafts.'

'Sentence structure and tense consistency: "it is kind of my hobby since I was" mixes present simple and a time-from-past phrase. Use present perfect "has been" with "since" to show continuous state from past to present. Also replace "like to make" with gerund "like making" and remove repeated words. Break into clearer clauses.'

× 'Yeah, I still write physical letters when uh, last year, but it is not very often, uh, since our school have activities that you can send uh, letters to your, umm, classmates and I think it is very meaningful.'

✓ 'Yes, I wrote a physical letter last year, but not very often, because our school has activities where you can send letters to your classmates, and I think that is very meaningful.'

'Tense and subject-verb agreement: The speaker mixed present "I still write" with a past time "last year." Use simple past "I wrote" for a specific past time. Also "our school have" should be "our school has" (singular subject). Use "where" for the activity description and remove filler words.'

× 'I suppose that, uh, there is just a little people do keep handwriting letters today and this situation is Dec declining now, so.'

✓ 'I suppose that only a few people still keep handwritten letters today, and this trend is declining.'

'There be' and word choice: "there is just a little people" is incorrect because "people" is plural; use "there are" or better "only a few people." "Handwriting letters" should be "handwritten letters." "This situation is Dec declining now" seems to attempt "declining" — use "this trend is declining." Also remove fillers and final "so."'

× 'No, I don't carry paper and pens when I go out since I usually use computer and tablet to work so pin and pins is not necessary for me. So I don't carry this when I go out.'

✓ 'No, I don't carry paper and pens when I go out because I usually use a computer or a tablet to work, so pens are not necessary for me. I don't carry them when I go out.'

'Subject-verb agreement and article use: Use articles "a computer" and "a tablet." "Pin and pins is" is incorrect; likely meant "pens are" (plural subject with plural verb). Use consistent pronouns "them" for "paper and pens." Replace "since" with "because" for clarity. Remove repetition.'

× 'I usually fold paper, uh, into some interesting things like some animals, cats, dogs, and uh yeah, I use paper to make many handmade crafts.'

✓ 'I usually folded paper into interesting shapes like animals such as cats and dogs, and I used paper to make many handmade crafts.'

'Past tense issue: The question asked "What did you like to do with paper as a child?" so answers should be in past tense. Change present tense verbs "fold" and "use" to past tense "folded" and "used." Also streamline wording by removing filler words and redundant "some."'