Paper— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cố gắng rút gọn câu trả lời để tự nhiên hơn và tránh lặp ý; thêm một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: loại con vật, vật liệu, hoặc một kỷ niệm cụ thể) để tăng tính cụ thể và sinh động. Ngoài ra chỉnh lại ngữ pháp nhỏ (ví dụ: “a small model of buildings” → “a small model of a building” hoặc “small building models”) và dùng liên từ khi cần để mạch lạc.

例: Yes, I have. I used to make paper animals like cranes and frogs, and sometimes small building models from card stock. I enjoyed it because it was creative and helped me focus; for example, I once spent an entire Saturday constructing a paper village for a school project.

提案: Câu trả lời rõ ràng và tự nhiên, nhưng có thể ngắn gọn hơn và thêm một câu mở rộng nêu lý do cụ thể hoặc một ngoại lệ (ví dụ: khi nào bạn vẫn viết thư tay). Dùng từ vựng đa dạng hơn (e.g., "instantaneous" không cần thiết) và tránh lặp từ như “faster and more convenient”.

例: No, I haven't written physical letters for years. I usually use email or messaging apps because they're quicker and let me share photos instantly; I only write handwritten notes on special occasions like birthdays.

提案: Trả lời lặp lại thông tin từ câu trước; cần trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi về hành vi của người khác (people) thay vì nói về bản thân. Thêm quan sát hoặc ví dụ cụ thể (ví dụ: older generations keep letters, people save love letters) và dùng liên từ để chuyển ý rõ ràng.

例: Some people still keep handwritten letters, especially older generations and those who value sentimental items. For instance, many families save love letters or wartime correspondence as keepsakes because they feel more personal than digital messages.

提案: Câu trả lời ngắn, rõ ràng và phù hợp. Có thể thêm một ví dụ cụ thể về tình huống khi bạn sử dụng điện thoại thay vì giấy hoặc một ngoại lệ (ví dụ: khi cần ký tài liệu) để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn.

例: No, I don't. I rely on my smartphone to send messages and save notes because it's quicker; for example, I often type shopping lists into a notes app and share them with family instead of writing them down.

提案: Câu trả lời có nội dung nhưng có lỗi ngữ pháp và một câu không rõ nghĩa (“crawling” có vẻ sai ngữ cảnh). Nên sửa ngữ pháp (e.g., “I also spent time folding and making figures with leftover paper”) và thêm một chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: tên một con vật hay trò chơi). Giữ tối đa 3–4 câu để tự nhiên hơn.

例: As a child I practiced handwriting and did homework with paper and pens. I also spent time folding and cutting leftover sheets to make paper animals and little dolls, which I played with after school.

× When I was a kid I spent several hours folding and cutting on weekends.

✓ When I was a kid, I spent several hours folding and cutting on the weekends.

Incorrect or missing article/use of time expression: 'on weekends' is acceptable, but adding 'the' makes it sound more natural in this context; no tense change needed. Suggestion: include comma after introductory clause and use 'on the weekends' for clarity.

× I haven't written physical letters for many years.

✓ I haven't written physical letters for many years.

This sentence is grammatically correct; keep present perfect tense to show an action continuing up to now. No correction needed.

× I usually use e-mail or messaging apps to stay in touch with my family and friends because they are faster and more convenient and allow me to send photos instantly.

✓ I usually use email or messaging apps to stay in touch with my family and friends because they are faster and more convenient and allow me to send photos instantly.

Use of 'e-mail' vs 'email' is style; not a grammatical error. No plural/singular issue. Keep as 'email'.

× I haven't written physical letters for many years. I usually use emails or messaging apps to stay in touch with my family and friends because they are faster and more convenient and let me share photos instantly. However, I still appreciate letters for special occasion because they feel more personal and sentimental.

✓ I haven't written physical letters for many years. I usually use email or messaging apps to stay in touch with my family and friends because they are faster and more convenient and allow me to share photos instantly. However, I still appreciate letters for special occasions because they feel more personal and sentimental.

Errors: 'emails' can be 'email' (style) and 'let' should be 'allow' to match formal register; 'special occasion' should be plural 'special occasions'. Suggestion: use plural for count noun and 'allow' for formal parallelism.

× I don't carry paper or pens when I go out because I use my smartphone to send emails or messages on social networks.

✓ I don't carry paper or pens when I go out because I use my smartphone to send emails or messages on social networks.

Sentence is correct. No article change needed.

× It's more convenient and faster, especially when I need to share information quickly or save notes digitally.

✓ It's more convenient and faster, especially when I need to share information quickly or save notes digitally.

Sentence is correct; adverb placement 'quickly' is appropriate. No change needed.

× When I was a child, I usually used paper and pens to practice my handwriting and complete my homework.

✓ When I was a child, I usually used paper and pens to practice my handwriting and complete my homework.

Sentence is correct: past tense 'used' matches time frame 'When I was a child'. No change needed.

× We didn't have smartphones or other devices back then, so I also spend time crawling and making figures with leftover paper.

✓ We didn't have smartphones or other devices back then, so I also spent time folding and making figures with leftover paper.

Errors: tense inconsistency — main clause is past ('didn't have'), so the following action should be past 'spent' not 'spend'. Word choice 'crawling' is incorrect for making paper figures; likely 'folding' is intended. Suggestion: use past tense and correct verb 'folding'.

× I've made several paper crafts, like paper animals or a small model of buildings.

✓ I've made several paper crafts, such as paper animals and small models of buildings.

Use 'such as' or 'like' consistently; pluralize 'small models' to match 'several paper crafts' and change 'or' to 'and' for examples. Also keep present perfect tense 'I've made'.

× I enjoy doing this because it's creative and helps me concentrate.

✓ I enjoy doing this because it's creative and helps me concentrate.

Sentence is grammatically correct and consistent; no correction needed.