Paper— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cần trả lời trực tiếp hơn, sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác, rút ngắn câu tránh lặp từ. Nên dùng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng rồi thêm 1–2 câu chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ loại quà, khi nào mua). Tránh lỗi chính tả như “witchcraft” và cấu trúc sai như “go to buy”.

例: I don't usually make paper crafts because I don't know origami. However, on special occasions I buy paper gift decorations, such as handmade cards or wrapped boxes, to impress my friends and family.

提案: Cần làm rõ ý chính và sửa nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp khiến ý khó hiểu. Tránh câu mâu thuẫn với “usually” vs “now” nếu không giải thích. Nên dùng 1 câu chủ đề (có/không viết thư), rồi 1 câu giải thích rõ lý do cụ thể (ví dụ cảm xúc, kỷ niệm).

例: I don't often write physical letters nowadays. I prefer digital messages, but I sometimes write letters for special occasions because handwritten notes feel more personal and memorable.

提案: Cần tránh phát biểu chung chung và các luận điểm không liên quan (ví dụ ‘giải quyết vấn đề sức khỏe’ là vô lý). Sửa ngữ pháp và dùng từ đúng (handwritten letters, keep). Nên nêu 1–2 lý do hợp lý và cụ thể (kỷ niệm, giá trị tình cảm).

例: Yes, some people still keep handwritten letters because they are sentimental keepsakes that preserve memories. For example, people often keep old love letters or notes from family members as reminders of important moments.

提案: Cần câu chủ đề rõ ràng và sửa thì, số nhiều/ít, và từ vựng (landscape, scenery). Giữ câu ngắn và logic: nói khi nào bạn mang theo và vì sao, kèm ví dụ cụ thể (ghi ý tưởng, vẽ phác thảo).

例: It depends on the situation. If I'm going to a park or an event, I usually bring a small notebook and a pen so I can sketch landscapes or jot down ideas, because I enjoy capturing beautiful scenes.

提案: Cần sửa ngữ pháp (when I were → when I was, become → be), làm câu ngắn gọn và kết thúc ý rõ ràng. Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề (‘I used to make paper planes’) rồi thêm 1–2 chi tiết (ai cùng chơi, nơi thử nghiệm, cảm xúc).

例: As a child, I used to make paper planes and fly them with my friends. I loved pretending to be a pilot and imagining the city views and clouds as I launched them.

× To be honest, I don't have any talent in origami so I don't make any craft with paper, but in special occasion I often go to buy gift witchcraft with paper to give my friends and my family to impress them.

✓ To be honest, I don't have any talent in origami so I don't make any crafts with paper, but on special occasions I often go to buy paper crafts as gifts to give my friends and my family to impress them.

The sentence has multiple issues: use plural 'crafts' for general items (Singular and plural), 'in special occasion' should be 'on special occasions' (incorrect preposition and plural), 'gift witchcraft with paper' is confused and should be 'paper crafts as gifts' (incorrect word choice/pronoun), and 'to give my friends and my family to impress them' is corrected to 'to give my friends and my family to impress them' where structure is fine. Suggestions: use plural nouns for general statements, use 'on' with 'occasion' and pluralize when speaking generally, and use the correct noun phrase 'paper crafts' or 'paper-made gifts'.

× To be honest, I usually write physical letters now because I found it very easy to enhance memories and I can't understand deeper when writing in the on the letter.

✓ To be honest, I usually write physical letters now because I find it very easy to preserve memories and I can't understand things as deeply when writing in an email.

Errors include tense mismatch 'found' should be present 'find' for habitual action, awkward phrase 'enhance memories' better as 'preserve memories', 'can't understand deeper' incorrect adverb placement and form; use 'can't understand things as deeply', and 'in the on the letter' is incorrect noun phrase: likely contrast to email so change to 'in an email'. Suggestion: keep tense consistent for habits (simple present), use clear collocations like 'preserve memories', and correct adverbial phrase order 'as deeply'.

× To be honest, people still keep handwriting letters today because it can improve their memory, memorize things and help them advise some problem with our health like eyes problem.

✓ To be honest, people still keep handwritten letters today because they can improve memory, help them remember things, and alert them to some health problems like eye problems.

Issues: 'handwriting letters' should be 'handwritten letters' (adjective form), 'it can improve their memory, memorize things' mixes subjects and verbs; use consistent verbs 'they can improve memory and help them remember things'. 'help them advise some problem with our health' is incorrect; better 'alert them to some health problems'. 'eyes problem' should be 'eye problems'. Suggestion: use correct adjective forms, parallel verbs, and correct collocations like 'handwritten letters' and 'eye problems'.

× This depend on my habit. If I want to join something I often bring paper and pens with me because I can draw any landscape that I want and I found some scape majestic.

✓ This depends on my habits. If I want to join something I often bring paper and pens with me because I can draw any landscape that I want and I find some sceneries majestic.

Errors: 'This depend' should be 'This depends' (subject-verb agreement). 'my habit' better as plural 'my habits' for general behaviour. 'I found' should be 'I find' to match present habitual context. 'scape' is incorrect noun; use 'scenery' or 'sceneries' and adjust adjective 'majestic'. Suggestion: ensure verb agrees with subject, maintain consistent tense for habitual actions, and use correct nouns like 'scenery'.

× To be honest, when I were a kid, I used to wrap paper to become a paper plane, because at this time I really love become a pilot to see the cloud in the sky and the views of the cities and.

✓ To be honest, when I was a kid, I used to fold paper into a paper plane because at that time I really loved the idea of becoming a pilot to see the clouds in the sky and the views of the cities.

Errors: 'were' should be past singular 'was' (subject-verb agreement/past tense). 'wrap paper to become a paper plane' incorrect verb; use 'fold paper into a paper plane'. 'at this time' should be 'at that time' for past reference. 'I really love become a pilot' wrong tense and structure: use 'I really loved the idea of becoming a pilot'. 'the cloud' should be plural 'the clouds'. Remove trailing 'and.' Suggestion: use correct past tense forms, appropriate verbs for actions (fold), and correct infinitive structures 'becoming a pilot'.