Paper— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then give one or two specific supporting details. Correct grammar (countable nouns, verb forms) and avoid repetition. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' properly.

例: Not really. I haven't made many paper crafts because paper seems fragile and I don't have very steady hands. For example, I tried folding an origami crane once but it tore easily, so I usually avoid making paper models.

提案: Answer clearly and update grammar and vocabulary: say whether you personally still write letters, then explain the general trend with one clear reason and an example. Avoid vague phrasing like 'real' and 'existed'.

例: Not often. Most of my communication is digital now because smartphones and email are faster. For instance, I usually send long messages by email instead of writing a paper letter.

提案: Be specific and moderate claims. Give a balanced answer: say some people keep them and explain why, with a clear linking word. Fix grammar (subject-verb agreement, articles) and avoid repetition.

例: Some people do keep handwritten letters because they have sentimental value. For example, many families keep old letters from relatives as keepsakes, even though most everyday messages are digital now.

提案: This answer is generally clear but repeativeness and small errors reduce its quality. State simply whether you carry them, then give a specific reason and brief example. Correct small errors and avoid repeating phrases.

例: Yes, I usually carry a pen and a small notebook. For example, while preparing for the IELTS I always keep a pen and eraser in my bag to practice writing and make quick notes during study sessions.

提案: Begin with a direct topic sentence about your childhood activities. Provide one or two specific examples and use linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Improve tense consistency and phrasing (e.g. 'back then' rather than 'at that moment').

例: When I was a child, I used paper mainly for homework because we didn't have much technology back then. For instance, I spent hours writing essays and doing math exercises on paper every day.

× Well, to be honest, I never made some handcraft artifact by papers because papers were fragile and easily broken in.

✓ Well, to be honest, I have never made any handcrafted items from paper because paper is fragile and easily torn.

Errors: 'never made some' should be 'have never made any' (use present perfect for life experience and 'any' with negatives); 'handcraft artifact' is unnatural — 'handcrafted items' is correct; 'by papers' should be 'from paper' (preposition and uncountable noun); 'papers were fragile and easily broken in' should be 'paper is fragile and easily torn' (subject-verb agreement, use present general truth, and correct adjective/verb choice). Suggestion: use present perfect for experiences, use 'any' in negatives, use 'from' for material, and 'torn' for paper damage.

× Additionally, my hand were not delicate enough to do 1.

✓ Additionally, my hands were not delicate enough to do it.

Errors: 'my hand were' — subject-verb agreement and plural/singular issue; should be 'my hands were' (plural) or 'my hand was' if singular. 'to do 1' is unclear; likely meant 'to do it.' Suggestion: ensure subject and verb agree in number and use clear pronouns like 'it' instead of '1'.

× Well, physical letters are real in the modern world because with the development of mobile devices, people were eager to write letters on their mobile phones to replace physical existed letter.

✓ Well, physical letters still exist in the modern world, but with the development of mobile devices, people are eager to write messages on their phones to replace physical letters.

Errors: 'are real' is odd — use 'still exist'; tense and aspect mixture: present general facts should be present simple; 'people were eager' uses past tense incorrectly — should be 'are eager' or 'tend to'; 'mobile phones' is simpler than 'mobile phones to replace physical existed letter'; 'existed' misused. Suggestion: use present simple for current trends, use 'exist' for presence, and correct noun forms ('letters' plural).

× Of course, of course, yes, As my previous statement, physical exist. Letters were real today, so every letter written in a real paper were valuable and we should keep it forever.

✓ Of course. As I said before, physical letters still exist today, so every letter written on real paper is valuable and we should keep them forever.

Errors: redundant repetition; sentence fragments and punctuation issues; 'physical exist.' is incorrect; tense inconsistencies: 'were real today' mixes past and present; 'written in a real paper' should be 'written on real paper'; 'were valuable' should be 'is valuable' for general truth or 'are valuable' matching plural; pronoun agreement: 'every letter' -> 'is valuable' but 'we should keep them' refers to letters (use plural 'them') or rephrase. Suggestion: use present simple for general truths, 'on paper' collocation, and maintain agreement between nouns and verbs.

× Yes, of course. Yes, of course. Since I was preparing the IELTS exams, I often carried a pen and a eraser with my bag to do some practice of the writing task and reading task.

✓ Yes, of course. Since I have been preparing for the IELTS exam, I often carry a pen and an eraser in my bag to practice the writing and reading tasks.

Errors: tense consistency: 'Since I was preparing' mixes past with 'often carried' — better present perfect continuous 'have been preparing' if still preparing; 'IELTS exams' — singular 'exam' is common; article errors: 'a eraser' -> 'an eraser'; preposition: 'with my bag' -> 'in my bag'; 'do some practice of the writing task and reading task' -> 'practice the writing and reading tasks'. Suggestion: use present perfect continuous for ongoing actions, correct articles 'a/an', and use 'in my bag' and natural collocations.

× Well, as a child, the technology at that moment is not well developed. So we need to complete our homework on paper. That is the main usage of paper in my childhood.

✓ Well, as a child, technology at that time was not well developed, so we had to complete our homework on paper. That was the main use of paper in my childhood.

Errors: tense and time expression: 'at that moment is not well developed' mixes present with past — should be past 'was not well developed'; 'we need to' should be past 'we had to' because referring to past; 'main usage' -> 'main use' is more natural. Suggestion: maintain past tense when describing childhood, and use natural collocations like 'at that time' and 'main use'.