Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Clarify and organize your response with a clear topic sentence, correct vocabulary, and concise supporting details. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases (e.g. "cat style", "St. wear"). Use linking words to compare the two styles and give one specific example of each.

例: I like two main styles. First, I enjoy wearing cute, feminine outfits with ruffles and pastel colors for a soft, girly look. Secondly, I like streetwear—baggy jeans and oversized hoodies—for a relaxed, cool vibe. For example, on weekends I wear a ruffled blouse and skirt, but when I meet friends I usually choose an oversized hoodie and sneakers.

提案: Start with a direct answer, then give concise reasons using linking words. Fix grammar (use simple, correct sentence forms) and avoid trailing or incomplete sentences. Provide one brief example of what you wear for work.

例: I prefer comfortable clothes, especially when I am working, because smart clothes can restrict my movement and slow me down. For instance, I often wear a soft cotton shirt and trousers or jeans at the office so I can move freely while I work.

提案: Give a direct answer followed by one or two clear reasons. Avoid repeating the same idea (movement/comfort) and correct phrasing ("restrict" not "strip"). Add a brief example or frequency phrase to make it specific.

例: Yes, I love wearing T-shirts, especially at home, because they are comfortable and allow me to move easily. I usually wear a loose cotton T-shirt most evenings and on weekends.

提案: Answer directly and provide specific details about your routine. Use linking words to explain reasons and keep sentences concise. Replace awkward phrases ("wherein I could") with natural expressions.

例: Yes, I spend some time choosing clothes before work because I want to be comfortable but still look chic and presentable. For example, I usually plan outfits the night before to make sure my clothes are clean and match properly.

提案: Provide a clear contrasting structure using linking words ("On weekdays..., On weekends..."). Correct vocabulary and grammar ("ruffles" not "raffles") and be specific about examples and frequency. Keep within 3–4 sentences.

例: On weekdays I usually wear comfortable, office-appropriate clothes like tailored trousers and knit tops because I need to work comfortably. On weekends I dress up more and wear cute outfits with ruffles or a skirt for social events or shopping.

提案: Give a clear opening sentence stating your preferred colours, then explain briefly why with correct vocabulary and sentence structure. Use examples and avoid broad negative statements; say which colors you avoid and why, with specific observations.

例: I prefer warm, darker colours such as navy blue, brown and black because they suit my olive skin tone and make me look healthier. I tend to avoid very bright or neon colours because they can wash me out and make my complexion look dull.

× I have two distinct styles that I love to wear.

✓ I have two distinct styles that I love.

The verb 'wear' is unnecessary because 'styles' implies clothing; removing 'to wear' makes the sentence more natural. Use of pronoun is fine but sentence was wordy; simplify by omitting redundant verb.

× The first one is the cat style we're in.

✓ The first one is the cute style I'm into.

Original sentence is unclear and has incorrect phrase 'we're in'. Use 'I'm into' to express personal preference. Also 'cat' seems wrong; likely 'cute' fits context.

× I love to wear cute clothes with ruffles.

✓ I love wearing cute clothes with ruffles.

Use of 'love wearing' is more natural than 'love to wear' in spoken English. The adjective 'cute' correctly modifies 'clothes'.

× Then the next one is St. wear we're in.

✓ The second one is streetwear that I'm into.

Original is fragmented and uses incorrect abbreviation 'St. wear' and 'we're in'. 'Streetwear' is the correct term and 'I'm into' expresses preference.

× I love to wear baggy clothes like a street fashion wear right and I get cool vibes on it.

✓ I like wearing baggy streetwear because it gives off cool vibes.

Combine and streamline phrase: 'baggy streetwear' is concise; use 'gives off' to express producing vibes. Remove filler 'right' and incorrect preposition 'on it'.

× I am both but I prefer comfortable clothes specially when working because it if I wear something like smart clothes it restricts my movement and I feel like it it slowed down my pace on when working.

✓ I like both, but I prefer comfortable clothes, especially when working, because if I wear smart clothes they restrict my movement and slow down my pace.

Fix tense and agreement: 'I am both' should be 'I like both'; 'specially' -> 'especially'; remove extraneous words 'it if' and duplicated 'it'; match plural 'they' with 'smart clothes'; use present tense 'slow down' rather than past 'slowed'.

× So I usually wear comfortable clothes wherein I could get.

✓ So I usually wear comfortable clothes so I can move easily.

Original 'wherein I could get' is ungrammatical. Replace with clear purpose clause 'so I can move easily' to express reason for choosing comfortable clothes.

× Yes, I love wearing T-shirts especially when I am at home because it is the most comfortable clothes that I could wear because it doesn't strip my movement and it feels very cool when I'm wearing T-shirts.

✓ Yes, I love wearing T-shirts, especially at home, because they are the most comfortable clothes I can wear; they don't restrict my movement and feel very cool.

Agreement and tense: 'it is the most comfortable clothes' should be 'they are the most comfortable clothes'; 'could' -> 'can' for general truth; 'strip my movement' is incorrect — use 'restrict my movement'. Remove repetition and streamline.

× Yes, every day when going to work I have to think what I am about to wear on that day wherein I could feel comfortable but still look chic and presentable and clean.

✓ Yes, every day before going to work I have to think about what I will wear so I can feel comfortable but still look chic, presentable, and neat.

Improve structure: include 'before' and 'think about'; use future 'will wear' or present 'to wear' for planned action; 'clean' is unusual for appearance—use 'neat'. Replace 'wherein I could feel' with 'so I can feel' for clarity.

× Yes, when it is weekdays because weekdays is where working days so I usually wear comfortable clothes for office and when it is weekend I try to become more stylish like I wear cute clothes with raffles on it because that's the only day that we have half day so I get very stylish clothes.

✓ Yes. On weekdays, since they are working days, I usually wear comfortable clothes for the office. On weekends I try to be more stylish and wear cute clothes with ruffles because we have a half day then, so I dress up more.

Fix articles and plurality: 'weekdays is' -> 'they are'; use 'On weekdays' and 'On weekends'; 'raffles' -> 'ruffles'; break into sentences for clarity and correct verb forms 'try to be' and 'dress up'.

× Since I am an olive skin tone I love wearing colors which are warm tone for example like Navy blue, brown, black because colorful clothes is not good for my skin because I look grayish or dark or not fresh on those clothes.

✓ Since I have an olive skin tone, I prefer wearing warm colors such as navy blue, brown, and black because bright colors don't suit my skin; they can make me look grayish, dark, or less fresh.

Use correct noun phrase 'have an olive skin tone'; 'warm colors' not 'warm tone'; 'for example like' is redundant—use 'such as'; 'colorful clothes is' should be 'bright colors don't suit' (subject-verb agreement and word choice). Use clearer phrasing for effects on appearance.