Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons or an example. Use varied vocabulary (e.g., loose, comfortable, casual) and keep it under 4 sentences.

例: I usually wear loose T-shirts and baggy pants because they are very comfortable and suit my casual lifestyle. For example, I wear them when I study or hang out with friends because they let me move freely and feel relaxed.

提案: Clarify your idea and avoid unclear or incorrect expressions. Begin with a direct statement of preference, give one clear reason with a relevant example, and avoid contradictory or confusing phrases. Use linking words like 'because' and 'however' correctly.

例: I prefer comfortable, casual clothes because they help me feel relaxed and confident. However, I wear smart clothes for job interviews or formal events because they create a more professional impression.

提案: Give a clear direct answer and correct the seasonal mismatch. Say when you do or do not like T-shirts, then give a reason and an example. Keep sentences short and coherent.

例: It depends on the weather and my mood. I like wearing T-shirts in hot weather because they are light and breathable, but I avoid them in winter when I need warmer layers.

提案: Be clearer and more natural. Start with a direct answer, then explain briefly why and give a specific detail about your routine. Avoid vague phrases like 'bottom of hand' and reduce hesitation.

例: No, I don't spend much time choosing clothes. Usually I pick the first outfit that looks right because I get overwhelmed by too many options, so I decide quickly and move on.

提案: Provide a clearer contrast between weekdays and weekends with specific examples. State the weekday style and the weekend style, then give a reason and one example of when you wear each.

例: Yes. On weekdays I wear simple, practical clothes for work or study, such as jeans and a shirt. On weekends I dress more casually or creatively, like wearing bright T-shirts or different styles to relax and feel more confident.

提案: This answer doesn't address colour. Answer the question directly by naming colours you prefer, then give a brief reason and an example. Keep it specific and avoid repeating previous points about comfort.

例: I prefer neutral colours like navy, grey and black because they are easy to match and look neat. For example, I often wear a navy T-shirt with grey pants because it feels simple and tidy.

× Well the clothes that I like to wear are generally big T-shirt and the baggy pants because I feel comfortable wearing it as it is very natural and comfortable to wear.

✓ Well, the clothes that I like to wear are generally big T-shirts and baggy pants because I feel comfortable wearing them as they are natural and comfortable.

The nouns 'T-shirt' and 'pants' need correct plural forms to match 'clothes' and the plural verb 'are'. Pronouns 'it' should agree with plural antecedent 'clothes', so use 'them' and 'they'. Also remove redundant phrase 'to wear' and 'very' repetition for clarity.

× I prefer wearing comfortable and casual clothes because wearing socks clothes only help us to be in more fluent and more positive way.

✓ I prefer wearing comfortable and casual clothes because wearing such clothes only helps us to be more confident and positive.

The phrase 'socks clothes' is incorrect; likely 'such clothes' was intended. Subject-verb agreement requires 'helps' for singular 'wearing such clothes'. 'Fluent' is not appropriate here; 'confident' fits the meaning. Also streamline the phrase 'in more ... way' to 'more ...'.

× But wearing the smart clothes generally means that you are a small and it shows us that we are showing them unnecessary activities about being smart.

✓ But wearing smart clothes generally means that you are formal, and it can give others the impression of being overly concerned with appearance.

'The smart clothes' should be 'smart clothes' (no article). 'You are a small' is meaningless; likely 'formal' or 'well-dressed' fits. 'Shows us that we are showing them unnecessary activities' is ungrammatical; rephrased to a clear idea. Use appropriate adjectives and concise phrasing.

× Well, it depends on the season or my mood, because wearing T-shirt is really helpful for us generally when there is very cold weather, I mean very hot weather, yeah.

✓ Well, it depends on the season or my mood, because wearing a T-shirt is generally helpful when the weather is very hot.

Use article 'a T-shirt' and correct the weather reference: 'very cold' conflicts with T-shirt so change to 'very hot'. Remove filler words and ensure present simple tense consistency.

× No, I don't really prefer spending time choosing lots of clothes because whenever I choose, I choose from bottom of hand and whenever I see so many clothes, my mind only stuck on one cloth and yeah I will choose that one in that instant time.

✓ No, I don't really like spending time choosing lots of clothes because when I choose, I pick quickly, and if I see many clothes, my mind gets stuck on one item and I choose that one immediately.

'Prefer spending time' is awkward; 'like spending time' is natural. 'From bottom of hand' is incorrect idiom; use 'pick quickly'. 'Cloth' should be 'item' or 'piece of clothing'. Verb tense: 'stuck' should be 'gets stuck'. 'In that instant time' is unnatural; use 'immediately'.

× Yeah, I prefer wearing different style of clothes during weekend because it shows my natural environment and it will help me to be in good mood and build my confidence.

✓ Yeah, I prefer wearing different styles of clothes during the weekend because it reflects my personality and helps me be in a good mood and build my confidence.

Use plural 'styles' to match 'different'. Include article 'the weekend'. 'Shows my natural environment' is incorrect meaning; 'reflects my personality' is clearer. Use parallel verbs 'helps me be' and 'build my confidence'.

× I generally like wearing casual clothes and the shorts and pants because wearing such clothes help me to be more comfortable and to be more helpful than ever.

✓ I generally like wearing casual clothes like shorts and pants because wearing such clothes helps me feel more comfortable and confident than before.

Do not use 'the shorts and pants'—use 'shorts and pants' or 'like shorts and pants'. Verb agreement: 'wearing such clothes helps' requires 'helps'. 'Be more helpful' is odd; 'confident' or 'comfortable' fits. Simplify 'than ever' to 'than before'.