Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more fluent and correct basic grammar; reduce hesitation and repetition; organize answer with a clear topic sentence and one or two specific supporting details, using linking words. Avoid filler words like 'umm' and correct vocabulary (e.g., 'jeans' instead of 'gin').

例: I usually dress smart-casual. For example, I often wear a plain shirt and a pair of jeans with minimal accessories because I prefer understated colours that don’t attract attention.

提案: Good structure and relevance. Improve by combining ideas to avoid repetition and add a linking phrase to make it smoother. Use one or two concise supporting details or an example.

例: It depends on the occasion: on workdays I wear smart clothes for a professional appearance, but at weekends I prefer comfortable casual outfits when I’m with family or friends.

提案: Be more concise and avoid fillers. Give a brief reason and an example of exceptions. Use linking words to show contrast (e.g., 'however').

例: Yes, I love T-shirts and would wear them most days because they’re comfortable. However, I avoid them for formal events or important meetings, when I choose a shirt or blazer instead.

提案: Correct tense and be clearer: avoid contradictory phrases and repetition. Start with a direct topic sentence, explain briefly why you spend time, and conclude with a result using linking words.

例: I don’t enjoy choosing outfits, but I often take time deciding because I have many options. As a result, I usually end up wearing the same few favourites.

提案: Clear answer but can be tightened to avoid redundancy. Use linking words and one specific contrast example to show the difference.

例: Yes, although the difference is small: on weekdays I wear smart-casual outfits for the office, whereas at weekends I usually choose a casual shirt and jeans when I’m meeting friends.

提案: Good vocabulary and clear idea. Improve by avoiding slight repetition and by using linking words to explain the reason (e.g., 'because of my mood'). Add a concise example of when you choose bright colours.

例: I prefer neutral colours such as black, white, grey, beige and brown, but sometimes I wear bright colours like red or blue depending on my mood — for instance, I’ll choose a red top for a celebratory occasion.

× I am a smart casual dressed person.

✓ I am a smart-casual dresser.

The original uses 'dressed' incorrectly as a noun. Use a compound adjective 'smart-casual' or the noun 'dresser'. Hyphenate 'smart-casual' and use 'dresser' to describe a person who dresses that way.

× I love to wear something simple.

✓ I love to wear simple clothes.

'Something simple' is vague; because we're talking about clothes, 'simple clothes' is clearer and plural. This matches the context and common collocation.

× Not too many accessories with the colors that is not really umm attracting attention.

✓ Not too many accessories with colors that are not really attracting attention.

'Colors' is plural, so the verb must be 'are', not 'is'. Also 'attracting attention' is the correct verb form; remove filler 'umm' for clarity.

× A simple gin and a shirt is my favorite are my favorite.

✓ A simple jeans and a shirt are my favorite.

Original is confused and contains contradictions. Assuming intended meaning is 'simple jeans and a shirt', use plural 'jeans' with 'are' to agree with compound subject. If 'jeans' intended, 'a simple pair of jeans and a shirt are my favorite' is more natural.

× Depends on the occasion.

✓ It depends on the occasion.

Complete sentence needs a subject; add 'It' and use simple present 'depends' to state a general truth.

× For office days I would wear smart clothes, but during weekends, on the weekends when I hang out with my friends with my family, I prefer to wear something very casual.

✓ For workdays I wear smart clothes, but on weekends, when I hang out with friends or family, I prefer to wear something very casual.

Use 'workdays' or 'weekdays' rather than 'office days'. 'On weekends' is correct preposition. Use 'or' between 'friends' and 'family' and simplify verb tense to simple present for habitual actions.

× Yes, T-shirts are the best. If I could, I would wear them every day, every time.

✓ Yes, T-shirts are the best. If I could, I would wear them every day.

'Every time' is redundant after 'every day'. Keep 'every day' to express frequency. Pronoun use 'them' is fine.

× But then since they are, you know, there are some occasions where you cannot wear T-shirts, then I need to go with another set of wardrobe.

✓ But there are some occasions when you cannot wear T-shirts, so I need to choose other clothes.

'Since' and 'then' together are redundant; use 'there are some occasions when'. 'Go with another set of wardrobe' is unidiomatic; use 'choose other clothes' or 'change my outfit'.

× I hate to say that I do.

✓ I hate to say that I do.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable in present tense to express current feeling; no change needed. Included here to indicate it's correct and matches the context.

× I have plenty of clothes in the wardrobe.

✓ I have plenty of clothes in my wardrobe.

Add possessive 'my' for natural English. Tense is present perfect (have) appropriate for possession; make the noun phrase idiomatic.

× But then when it comes to the time of choosing my clothes, I always took time and at the end I always wore the same thing over and over.

✓ But when it comes to choosing my clothes, I always take time, and in the end I always wear the same thing over and over.

Use simple present 'take' and 'wear' for habitual actions instead of past 'took' and 'wore'. Also simplify 'the time of choosing' to 'choosing' and use 'in the end'.

× Yes, but there is not much difference.

✓ Yes, but there is not much difference.

Sentence is acceptable; 'there is not much difference' is idiomatic. No change needed.

× So on the weekdays when I go to office I would wear something smart casual, but on the weekends, because I normally just hang out with friends or family I would wear very casual shirt and jeans.

✓ So on weekdays when I go to the office I wear smart-casual clothes, but on weekends, because I normally hang out with friends or family, I wear very casual shirts and jeans.

Use 'the office' for a specific place of work. 'Smart-casual' hyphenated and 'clothes' plural. Use simple present for habitual actions. 'Very casual shirt' should be plural 'shirts' or 'a very casual shirt' with article; plural fits context.

× I like something neutral like black, white, Gray, beige, brown but I do sometimes wear something bright like red or blue colors.

✓ I like neutral colors like black, white, gray, beige and brown, but I sometimes wear bright colors like red or blue.

Use 'neutral colors' and lowercase 'gray'. Avoid 'something' and redundant 'colors' after listing. 'Sometimes' placement before verb is more natural. Remove duplication 'red or blue colors' to 'bright colors like red or blue'.

× So it just depends on the mood. Some days I would be very neutral, some days I'll be bright.

✓ So it just depends on my mood. Some days I am very neutral; some days I am bright.

Specify 'my mood' rather than 'the mood' for clarity. Use consistent present tense 'am' for habitual or typical states instead of mixing 'would' and contraction 'I'll'.