Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve clarity and grammar, use a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details. Correct vocabulary (e.g., "clothes" not "closest") and simplify sentences. Use linking words like "because" or "so" to connect ideas and avoid repetition.

例: I prefer clothes that are comfortable because I enjoy hiking. For example, I usually wear shorts and T-shirts rather than skirts because skirts are not practical for walking long distances.

提案: Make a clear contrasting structure: state preference for each situation, use correct verb forms and concise phrasing. Replace vague words like "modern activities" with specific examples and avoid filler words.

例: It depends on the occasion. For formal events like parties or work I prefer smart clothes with a few accessories, but at home I usually wear casual clothes because they are comfortable and help me relax.

提案: Be concise and avoid repetition. Use correct collocations ("go hiking" not "doing hiking") and explain briefly why T-shirts are suitable. Remove unrelated information or connect it clearly.

例: Yes, I like wearing T-shirts because they are lightweight and breathable, which makes them ideal when I go hiking. I also wear comfortable clothes like pajamas at home.

提案: Start with a direct answer, then give specific reasons and use linking words. Avoid repeating the same idea and be specific about what you do when choosing clothes.

例: Yes, I usually spend quite a while choosing clothes because I want to look nice for social events. I try on a few outfits to see which dress matches the mood and the venue before I go out.

提案: Clarify the contrast between weekdays and weekends and use accurate time references. Avoid self-contradiction (saying you stay home on weekends then go out). Keep sentences short and coherent with linking words like "however" or "usually".

例: Yes. On weekdays I wear casual or smart-casual clothes for work or classes, but on weekends I often wear pajamas at home. However, if I go out with family or friends on a weekend, I choose outfits that suit the occasion.

提案: Provide a clear direct answer, then explain with a reason. Correct grammar ("unusual"→"usually") and finish the thought. Use simple vocabulary to explain why you choose neutral colours in public.

例: I like pink, but I usually wear neutral colours like white, grey or black in public because they are more practical and blend in better on the street.

× I would prefer closest which are comfortable to me because I like hiking a lot and wearing skirt.

✓ I would prefer clothes that are comfortable for me because I like hiking a lot and wearing skirts.

The word 'closest' is incorrect; 'clothes' is the noun needed. Use 'that are' to introduce a relative clause. 'Wearing skirt' should be plural 'wearing skirts' or 'a skirt' depending on meaning; here plural is more natural when speaking generally. Also use 'comfortable for me' rather than 'to me'.

× I think skirt is not suitable for the hiking trip, so I like wearing something like shorts and T-shirts.

✓ I think a skirt is not suitable for a hiking trip, so I like wearing things like shorts and T-shirts.

Countable singular nouns like 'skirt' need an article: 'a skirt'. 'Hiking trip' is a countable event here so use 'a hiking trip'. Use 'things like' rather than 'something like' when listing examples. 'T-shirts' plural is correct for general statements.

× If I go to some modern activities I would prefer wearing modern dress and just get a lot of accessories beyond And if I just stay at home I would prefer casual wear of course because it was very comfortable for me and feel feeling relaxed.

✓ If I go to modern events, I prefer wearing modern dresses and adding a lot of accessories. If I stay at home, I prefer casual wear because it is very comfortable and makes me feel relaxed.

Use present simple 'prefer' for habitual preferences rather than 'would prefer' in this context. 'Modern activities' is better as 'modern events'. 'Dress' should be plural 'dresses' for general statements. 'Get a lot of accessories beyond' is awkward; use 'adding a lot of accessories'. For the second clause use present 'is' not past 'was'. 'Feel feeling relaxed' is ungrammatical; use 'makes me feel relaxed'.

× As I mentioned that I am a hiking lover and I spend a lot of time doing hiking wearing T-shirt.

✓ As I mentioned, I am a hiking lover and I spend a lot of time hiking and wearing T-shirts.

Avoid 'doing hiking'; use the verb 'hiking'. Include a comma after 'As I mentioned'. Use plural 'T-shirts' for general statements. 'Doing hiking wearing T-shirt' had wrong word order; separate actions with 'and'.

× T-shirt is suitable to to process hiking, so a part of them I like pyjamas too.

✓ T-shirts are suitable for hiking, and sometimes I also like wearing pyjamas.

Use plural 'T-shirts' for general statements and correct preposition 'suitable for' not 'suitable to'. 'Process hiking' is incorrect wording; simply 'hiking'. 'A part of them I like pyjamas too' is unclear; use 'sometimes I also like wearing pyjamas' to express occasional preference.

× Yes, every time I hang out with my friends I would spend a lot of time because I want to look so pretty and just match the perfect mood and also I prefer wearing dresses with my friends so I would spend a lot of time choosing the best dress.

✓ Yes, every time I hang out with my friends I spend a lot of time choosing clothes because I want to look pretty and match the mood. I also prefer wearing dresses with my friends, so I spend a lot of time choosing the best dress.

Use present simple 'spend' for habitual actions rather than conditional 'would spend'. 'Look so pretty' is informal; 'look pretty' is sufficient. 'Just match the perfect mood' should be 'match the mood'. Keep parallel structure and separate ideas into clearer sentences.

× I usually stay at home all day on weekend days so I'm usually just wearing pajamas and not changing any of them.

✓ I usually stay at home all day on weekends, so I usually just wear pajamas and don't change them.

Use plural 'weekends' for recurring events. Use simple present 'wear' not progressive 'am wearing' for habitual actions. 'Not changing any of them' is awkward; 'don't change them' is clearer and matches plural 'pajamas'.

× But during weekends I would all go shopping with my family or hang out with my friends. I would try to to to just which match the occasion a lot and.

✓ But on weekends I usually go shopping with my family or hang out with my friends. I try to choose clothes that match the occasion.

Replace 'during weekends I would all go' with 'on weekends I usually go' for natural phrasing. Remove repeated 'to' and unclear fragments. 'Try to choose clothes that match the occasion' is clear and grammatically correct.

× I like pink a lot, but unusual people do not wear so colorful clothes on the street, so I always dress white, grey or black color which could make me not be too.

✓ I like pink a lot, but usually people do not wear such colorful clothes on the street, so I usually wear white, grey, or black so I don't stand out too much.

Use 'usually' instead of 'unusual'. 'So colorful' should be 'such colorful'. 'Dress white, grey or black color' is incorrect; use 'wear white, grey, or black'. Complete the idea: 'so I don't stand out too much'.