Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and avoid fillers. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons or examples. Use smoother phrasing and reduce repetition.

例: I like wearing fashionable clothes because they make me feel confident in different situations. For example, a well‑fitted jacket at an interview helps me appear professional and boosts my confidence.

提案: Give a direct answer then add a clear reason with a brief example. Replace vague phrases with specific situations and avoid repeating words.

例: I prefer comfortable, casual clothes because they help me relax during long days. For instance, I often wear jeans and a soft sweater when studying or traveling because I can move easily and focus better.

提案: Clarify and correct unclear parts. Use one or two specific points (comfort, variety, climate) and avoid grammatical errors. Keep it brief and coherent.

例: Yes, I like wearing T‑shirts because they are comfortable and come in many colors and styles. In summer I usually wear cotton T‑shirts because they keep me cool and are easy to wash.

提案: Make the answer clearer and more organized. Start with a direct yes/no, explain why with a specific routine or reason, and avoid broken phrases. Use correct vocabulary for actions (e.g., ‘decide’, ‘pick’).

例: Yes, I usually spend time choosing clothes because I want to look appropriate for the occasion. For example, before going out I check the weather and pick an outfit—shirt and trousers—that matches the event and is comfortable.

提案: Good clear contrast. Improve by making sentences smoother and more precise: specify typical weekday and weekend clothes and give one short example of activities.

例: Yes. On weekdays I usually wear smart clothes like a shirt and trousers because I have meetings at work. On weekends I prefer casual clothes such as jeans and a T‑shirt when I meet friends or go on short trips.

提案: Be more natural: state the colors you like, then give a specific reason and an example of how you use them. Avoid awkward phrasing like 'best designed for a good clothes'.

例: I prefer black and white because they look simple and professional. For example, I often wear a white shirt and black trousers to work because they are easy to mix and always look neat.

× Actually, I like to wear fashion clothes because I think fashion clothes can make me feel confident in, uh, in any environment.

✓ Actually, I like to wear fashionable clothes because I think fashionable clothes can make me feel confident in any environment.

Use of adjective form: 'fashion clothes' is incorrect; the adjective form 'fashionable' should modify 'clothes'. Also remove the extra preposition 'in' before 'any environment' and pause filler 'uh' for clarity. Suggestion: use 'fashionable clothes' and 'confident in any environment'.

× Actually, I prefer wearing comfortable and casual clothes because I think wearing comfortable clothes can make me feel better and it is suitable for me.

✓ Actually, I prefer wearing comfortable, casual clothes because I think comfortable clothes make me feel better and suit me.

Parallel structure and conciseness: use commas between adjectives and avoid repeating 'wearing'. Use simple present 'make' to express general truth; 'suit me' is more idiomatic than 'it is suitable for me'.

× When I wear some smart clothes, I will feel a little nervous.

✓ When I wear smart clothes, I feel a little nervous.

Use simple present to describe habitual or general reactions. 'Will feel' implies future; prefer 'feel' for regular occurrences.

× For sure, I do like wearing T-shirts because T-shirts have diverse color and style preference.

✓ For sure, I like wearing T-shirts because T-shirts come in a diverse range of colors and styles.

Use correct noun phrases: 'diverse color and style preference' is incorrect. Use 'a diverse range of colors and styles' to express variety. Also remove redundant 'do' unless for emphasis.

× I can choose and teachers can make me feel cool in the summer.

✓ I can choose them and they make me feel cool in the summer.

Pronoun reference unclear: 'and teachers can make me feel cool' is wrong contextually; likely intended 'they' referring to T-shirts. Use 'them' as object of choose and 'they' as subject. Ensure pronouns agree with antecedent.

× Yes, absolutely. I always check my experience before I go in out, so I always spend a lot of time choosing clothes I need select a perfect and good clothes and and trousers to me.

✓ Yes, absolutely. I always check my outfit before I go out, so I spend a lot of time choosing the right clothes and trousers for me.

Multiple issues: 'check my experience' is wrong; use 'check my outfit'. Remove incorrect 'go in out' -> 'go out'. Simplify redundant phrases and correct article use: 'a perfect and good clothes' -> 'the right clothes'. Remove duplicate 'and'. Use 'for me' to indicate suitability.

× For sure, on weekdays I always wear some smart clothes to enter some meeting, but on weekends I always wear some comfortable clothes, play with my friends and have a trip.

✓ For sure, on weekdays I usually wear smart clothes to attend meetings, but on weekends I wear comfortable clothes, hang out with my friends and go on trips.

Use correct verbs: 'enter some meeting' is unnatural; use 'attend meetings'. Use adverb 'usually' rather than repetitive 'always'. Use parallel verb forms and idiomatic phrases: 'hang out' and 'go on trips'.

× Actually, I like black and white because I think a simple color is best designed for a good clothes and trousers.

✓ Actually, I like black and white because I think simple colors are best for good clothes and trousers.

Agreement and word choice: 'a simple color' conflicts with two colors; use plural 'simple colors'. 'Designed for' is unnecessary; say 'best for good clothes'. Also correct article and noun agreement: 'a good clothes' -> 'good clothes'.

× I really like professional design in my daily life.

✓ I really like professional designs in my daily life.

Use plural 'designs' when speaking generally about styles or elements. Alternatively, 'a professional design' could be used if referring to a specific item. Ensure noun number matches intended meaning.