Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and clear. Start with a direct topic sentence stating your general preference, then give one or two specific supporting details (occasions, colours or items) using linking words for coherence. Avoid repetition and minor grammar errors (e.g., "on based" -> "based").

例: I don't have a fixed style; I choose clothes based on my mood and the image I want to show. For example, when I want to look professional I wear a blazer and tailored trousers, but on relaxed days I prefer jeans and a sweater because they are comfortable and still look neat.

提案: Organize your answer: state a clear preference then explain with specific examples and linking words. Correct small disfluencies and sentence fragments. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and avoid hesitations.

例: It depends on the occasion — I usually prefer casual clothes for everyday activities. For instance, when I hang out with friends I wear sweatpants or jeans because they're comfortable, but for weddings or formal dinners I choose smart clothes like a dress or a shirt and blazer.

提案: Give a focused answer: say yes, then explain why with specific reasons (comfort, fabric) and avoid overgeneralizing ("everyone"). Use correct noun forms and smoother linking phrases.

例: Yes, I like wearing T-shirts because they are comfortable and versatile. In summer I prefer cotton T-shirts since they breathe well, while for casual evenings I might choose a polyester blend for durability.

提案: Answer directly in present tense and fix vocabulary errors ("drive" -> "buy"; "personal" -> "preferences"). Explain briefly where you shop and why, with one clear reason and linking word. Reduce hesitations and repetitions.

例: No, I don't spend much time choosing clothes because I usually buy them online or at general stores rather than brand shops. This way I can compare many options quickly and find items that match my personal preferences.

提案: Structure your response: state yes/no, then explain weekday and weekend differences with linking words and specific examples. Correct grammar and finish thoughts (avoid trailing fragments).

例: Yes. On weekdays I wear a school uniform, but I try to show my style by wearing jewelry or different shoes. On weekends I dress based on my mood — sometimes casual jeans and a T-shirt, other times a more fashionable outfit for going out.

提案: Be precise and use correct grammar. Start with a general statement, then mention recent preferences and reasons, and finish with a clear concluding sentence. Avoid filler words like "umm" and unclear fragments ("BA").

例: I like many colours, but recently I've been choosing turquoise and light pink because they look fresh and pair well with basic shades like white and black. However, my go-to colour is usually black because it's versatile and easy to match.

× I don't think I have a specific style, I just choose my clothes on based on how I want to reflect my style and my personality in general depending on my mood.

✓ I don't think I have a specific style; I just choose my clothes based on how I want to reflect my style and personality depending on my mood.

Remove the incorrect preposition 'on' after 'choose my clothes' and join clauses properly. Use 'based on' not 'on based', and 'my personality' does not need 'in general'. Use a semicolon or period to separate independent clauses.

× Both of them depending on where I'm going to go, for example at the days that I'm going to. Hang out with my friends and then other place. I prefer comfortable casual clothes such as sweatpants, but if it's a special occasion I prefer smart clothes.

✓ Both, depending on where I'm going. For example, on days when I'm going to hang out with my friends or going somewhere else, I prefer comfortable casual clothes such as sweatpants; but for special occasions I prefer smart clothes.

Original has fragmented sentences and incorrect phrase order. Change 'at the days that I'm going to' to 'on days when I'm going to', combine fragments, and use 'or going somewhere else' for clarity. Use proper punctuation and conjunctions to connect ideas.

× They're comfortable and there are variety of options that you can choose on.

✓ They're comfortable and there are a variety of options you can choose from.

Use the quantifier 'a variety of' and the correct preposition 'choose from'. The original omitted the article 'a' and used an incorrect trailing preposition 'on'.

× Choose based on the style and if it's cotton or polyester, you can choose them.

✓ Choose based on the style and whether it's cotton or polyester; then choose accordingly.

Use 'whether' instead of 'if' for alternatives, avoid repeating 'choose' awkwardly with 'them'. Make the structure parallel and clearer.

× I didn't spend a lot of time choosing clothes since I prefer to drive them online or in stores umm rather than going to umm brand stores since I can find more clothes there that can reflect my style and my personal.

✓ I don't spend a lot of time choosing clothes because I prefer to browse for them online or in stores rather than going to brand stores, since I can find more clothes there that reflect my style and personality.

Tense should match habitual action: use present simple 'don't spend' and 'prefer'. 'Drive' is incorrect; use 'browse for'. 'My personal' is incomplete — use 'personality'.

× I do on weekdays I have to go to school so I wear a uniform usually but I still try to reflect my styles by wearing jewelry to school On weekends I can wear more freely on how I feel that day based on.

✓ I do. On weekdays I have to go to school, so I usually wear a uniform, but I still try to reflect my style by wearing jewelry to school. On weekends I can dress more freely depending on how I feel that day.

Add punctuation to separate sentences. Use singular 'style' not 'styles' for consistency. 'Wear more freely on how I feel' is ungrammatical; use 'dress more freely depending on how I feel'.

× I like all kinds of color but recently I prefer turquoise or light pink clothing since they really cute colors and they're nice with BA more basic colors such as white or black.

✓ I like all kinds of colors, but recently I prefer turquoise or light pink clothing since they are really cute and go well with more basic colors such as white or black.

Use plural 'colors' after 'kinds of'. Add verb 'are' for 'they are really cute'. Replace 'they're nice with BA more basic colors' with 'go well with more basic colors' for correct adjective/adverb usage and clarity.

× But my go to color is usually black clothes since you can wear them however.

✓ But my go-to color is usually black, since you can wear it however you like.

'Go-to' needs hyphen; 'color' is singular, so refer to it with 'it' not 'them'. 'Black clothes' is plural; better to say 'black' or 'black clothes' and match pronoun. Add 'you like' to complete the idea.