Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and focused: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Reduce fillers (umm, like) and avoid repetition. Also correct small grammar issues (e.g., 'tight outfit' → 'tight outfits', 'working on the street' → 'being outdoors' if appropriate).

例: I prefer casual clothes because they are relaxed and practical. For example, loose T-shirts and jeans are comfortable for daily activities, and they allow me to move freely when I work outdoors.

提案: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence, then provide a specific reason using linking words. Avoid vague phrases like 'it's pretty much like' and reduce hesitations. Fix grammar: 'Smart clothes for me are too formal' and 'my job isn't very formal.'

例: I prefer casual clothes rather than smart clothes because my job is informal. For instance, wearing casual shirts or hoodies suits my work environment and helps me feel comfortable all day.

提案: Start with a direct statement and give one clear, specific reason with a linked example. Use correct plural/forms ('T-shirts are', 'they make up about 80% of my wardrobe'). Remove fillers and make the sentence flow logically.

例: Yes, I wear T-shirts most of the time — they make up about 80% of my wardrobe because they are comfortable and versatile. For example, I can pair a graphic T-shirt with jeans for a casual look or with a jacket for something slightly smarter.

提案: Be specific about how and why you spend time choosing clothes. Avoid self-contradictions and hesitations; give concrete examples of what you consider when choosing clothes (colors, fit, trends). Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' to organize ideas.

例: Yes, I spend quite a bit of time choosing clothes because I care about style and fit. For example, I often try on several outfits to check the color and comfort before deciding what to wear for work or a weekend outing.

提案: Give a clear contrast between weekdays and weekends using linking words (e.g., 'whereas', 'however'). Correct word choice (a hoodie is not 'formal'—say 'part of our uniform'). Provide a brief specific example of weekend style.

例: Yes — during weekdays I wear our company hoodie as part of the uniform because I work at a skydiving company, whereas on weekends I choose more casual or varied outfits, such as colorful shirts and jeans for going out with friends.

提案: Answer directly, then give a specific reason and possibly an example of items in those colours. Avoid fillers and refine grammar ('they represent nature'). Use linking words like 'because' to show reasoning.

例: I like green and blue because they are natural and calming. For example, I often wear green shirts and blue jeans since those colours remind me of nature and suit my relaxed style.

× I don't want to wear very like tight outfit because it makes me not very comfortable working on the street or like working.

✓ I don't want to wear very tight outfits because they make me uncomfortable when I'm working on the street or working.

Pronoun and number agreement: 'outfit' should be plural ('outfits') to match general preference; 'it' should be 'they' to agree with plural 'outfits'. Word order and redundancy cleaned ('makes me not very comfortable' -> 'make me uncomfortable'). Also add 'when I'm' to clarify time.

× Smart clothes for me is too formal and my job is not that formal and I can wear whatever I want to go to work every day.

✓ Smart clothes for me are too formal; my job is not that formal, and I can wear whatever I want to work every day.

Subject-verb agreement: 'Smart clothes' is plural, so use 'are' not 'is'. Also streamline phrasing: 'to go to work every day' -> 'to work every day'.

× Yes, I like to wear T-shirt.

✓ Yes, I like to wear T-shirts.

Singular/plural: When speaking generally about a type of garment, use plural 'T-shirts' or 'a T-shirt'. Using plural sounds natural for habitual actions.

× T-shirt is like my 80% of choice in my daily life.

✓ T-shirts make up about 80% of my choices in daily life.

Unnatural sentence structure and quantifier placement. Use 'make up about 80% of my choices' to express proportion. 'T-shirt is like my 80% of choice' is ungrammatical.

× it's also you have a lot of stylish choice if you choose uh.

✓ there are also many stylish options to choose from.

Pronoun and subject issue: 'it's also you have' is ungrammatical. Use 'there are' for existence and 'options' plural. Replace vague 'choice' with 'options' and 'to choose from' for clarity.

× I would say yes, definitely because I'm a very kind of, uh, close.

✓ I would say yes, definitely, because I'm quite particular about clothes.

Incorrect adjective phrase 'a very kind of close' is unclear. Use 'quite particular about clothes' to convey being selective. Also remove filler words.

× Nope. I think I'm, uh, I have a lot of like fashionable, stylish ideas and also, yeah, umm, I can spend a lot of time choosing clothes.

✓ No. I think I have many fashionable, stylish ideas, and I can spend a lot of time choosing clothes.

Remove disfluent fillers and fix pronoun duplication 'I'm, uh, I have' -> 'I have'. Use 'many' with countable 'ideas'.

× in weekdays we always wear a like, 'cause I work in the skydive company in New Zealand and we have a hoodie, it's a formal, just like a smart uniform for us to wear.

✓ On weekdays we always wear one: I work for a skydiving company in New Zealand, and we have a hoodie as a kind of smart uniform.

Preposition and article issues: use 'on weekdays' not 'in weekdays'. 'the skydive company' should be 'a skydiving company' or 'the skydiving company' depending on context; 'a hoodie, it's a formal' is incorrect—use 'a hoodie as a kind of smart uniform'.

× And in the weekend I want to wear something different.

✓ And on the weekend I like to wear something different.

Preposition use: use 'on the weekend' (or 'at the weekend' British English). Also 'want to' -> 'like to' fits habitual contrast better.

× Umm, I'm a very colorful person, so it's hard to decide what color is the best.

✓ I'm a very colorful person, so it's hard to decide which color is best.

Pronoun and clause choice: 'what color is the best' is awkward; use 'which color is best' for choosing between options.

× Umm, I would say green or blue.

✓ I'd say green or blue.

Contraction and style: 'I would' -> 'I'd' is more natural in speech; sentence is fine otherwise.

× It's uh, these two colors are very natural colors.

✓ These two colors are very natural.

Redundancy: remove repeated 'colors' and filler 'It's uh,'; 'are very natural' is sufficient.

× Uh, Yup, it's represent nature.

✓ Yes, they represent nature.

Subject-verb agreement and pronoun: 'it's represent' is incorrect; use plural 'they represent' to agree with 'these two colors'. Also 'Yup' -> 'Yes' for formality.