Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and clear. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect words (e.g., “question clothes”). Use natural collocations like “American-style clothes” or “American fashion.”

例: I prefer American-style clothes because I find them stylish and comfortable. For example, I like casual denim jackets and graphic T-shirts, which suit my everyday look and are easy to combine with different outfits.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and one specific reason with a linking word. Correct grammar (e.g., “I often work,” not “I often working”) and avoid repetition. Mention a concrete example of comfortable clothing and how it helps you. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: I prefer comfortable, casual clothes because I often work outside and need to move around. For instance, I usually wear sneakers and breathable trousers, which make it easier to walk between meetings and run errands.

提案: Answer directly, then give a clear specific example. Fix word order and remove repetitions. Use linking words like “for example” to introduce details and explain why you like T-shirts (comfort, style, occasions).

例: Yes, I like wearing T-shirts. For example, when I go out in the city I often wear printed or plain T-shirts because they are comfortable and easy to match with jeans or shorts.

提案: Start with a clear negative or positive response, then give a reason and one brief detail. Improve grammar (e.g., “I don't spend much time choosing clothes; in the morning I’m in a hurry”). Use linking words like “because” and “so.”

例: No, I don't spend much time choosing clothes because I am usually in a rush in the morning. So I pick simple outfits, like a T-shirt and jeans, that I know will look fine quickly.

提案: Give a direct answer and clarify the contrast between weekdays and weekends. Use linking words (e.g., “however,” “but,” “because”) and provide a concrete example of how your clothing differs. Correct repetition and unclear phrases.

例: Not really, but I sometimes change my style on weekends. For example, on weekdays I wear casual, practical clothes for school, but on weekends I might wear smarter or more fashionable outfits when I go out with friends.

提案: Answer directly, then explain why and give a specific example. Use correct phrases (e.g., “mint green is in fashion right now”) and avoid fragmented sentences. Keep it to two or three sentences.

例: Lately I like white and mint green. I think mint green is trendy right now, so I often buy shirts or dresses in that colour because they look fresh and modern.

× I like American fashion clothes the most because American question clothes are very cool and cute and the American clothes suit me those, but that is my favorite.

✓ I like American fashion the most because American clothes are very cool and cute and they suit me, so they are my favorite.

The sentence misuses adjectives and has awkward word order and unnecessary words. Replace 'American fashion clothes' with 'American fashion' or 'American clothes', remove 'question', and use the pronoun 'they' to refer to 'clothes'. Also simplify the clause 'that is my favorite' to 'they are my favorite' for clarity and correct reference.

× I prefer to wear comfortable wear because I often working.

✓ I prefer to wear comfortable clothes because I often work.

The original uses 'working' without the auxiliary verb, causing a tense/form error. Use the simple present 'work' to match the habitual action 'I often'. Also replace the redundant 'comfortable wear' with 'comfortable clothes'.

× I often work around the city, so I want to move. Moving where where move clothes moving move.

✓ I often work around the city, so I want to wear clothes that are easy to move in.

The original contains repeated fragments and lacks clear structure. Combine ideas into a single clear sentence: cause ('I often work around the city') and result ('so I want to wear clothes that are easy to move in'). Use 'wear clothes that are easy to move in' to express mobility.

× Yes, of course, I often wear T-shirts, such as when when I got you strip the the city's city T-shirts are so cute. So my friend with things.

✓ Yes, of course. I often wear T-shirts, for example when I go out in the city because city T-shirts are so cute, and my friends like them too.

This sentence has tense and lexical errors and repetitions. Replace 'got you strip' with 'go out', remove duplicate words, and use 'because' to give a reason. Add 'my friends like them too' to make the fragment 'So my friend with things' meaningful.

× I don't spend more time selecting my clothes because I in morning I don't have time so I want to choose speedy select.

✓ I don't spend much time selecting my clothes because in the morning I don't have time, so I try to choose quickly.

Use 'much' with uncountable time instead of 'more'. Add the definite article 'the' before 'morning'. Replace 'speedy select' with 'try to choose quickly' for natural phrasing and correct adverb use.

× Actually no, but I want to wear different style clothes because the weekdays I I have to go to school but weekdays I go to pray with my friend going to pray.

✓ Actually no, but I want to wear different styles because on weekdays I have to go to school, and on weekends I go to pray with my friends.

Use the plural 'styles' for variety. Add 'on' before 'weekdays' and 'weekends' to indicate time. Correct repetition and clarify that praying happens on weekends and that 'friends' should be plural if more than one.

× Recently I like white and mint green because mint green is my in. And very famous colour in the time, so mint green wearing.

✓ Recently I have liked white and mint green because mint green is trendy and very popular now, so I wear mint green often.

Adjust tense to present perfect 'have liked' or simple present 'like' for current preference. Replace 'mint green is my in' with 'mint green is trendy' and 'very famous colour in the time' with 'very popular now'. Use 'I wear mint green often' for correct verb and adverb placement.