Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (umm, uh), remove repetition, and give one specific reason with an example. Use linking words if adding details.

例: I usually prefer casual clothes, especially in hot weather, because they are comfortable and let me move freely. For example, I often wear a lightweight cotton T-shirt and shorts when I go to the park.

提案: Answer directly and correct small errors. Remove fillers, use a clear reason and a linking word (because, so). Replace unclear phrase 'my car comfort' with 'my comfort'.

例: I prefer comfortable, casual clothes because my comfort is my priority, so I avoid smart outfits unless a special occasion requires them.

提案: Be specific and grammatical. Remove fillers and fix grammar (e.g., 'I was kind of jeans' is unclear). Give one or two concrete reasons and an example of how you wear T-shirts.

例: Yes, I enjoy wearing T-shirts because they are easy to match with jeans or shorts and are comfortable in summer. For instance, I often pair a plain T-shirt with blue jeans for a casual look.

提案: Use present tense consistently for habitual actions and be concise. Start with a direct statement, add a linked detail (sometimes) and an example.

例: I don't spend a lot of time choosing clothes; I usually pick my daily outfit quickly. Sometimes, however, I ask friends for advice when I'm going to a special event.

提案: Be clear and avoid repetition. State the contrast using a linking word (but or however). Correct grammar (I am a student) and give a specific example of weekend clothes.

例: Yes. On weekdays I wear a uniform or smart clothes because I am a student, but on weekends I prefer casual outfits like jeans and a T-shirt where I feel more comfortable and confident.

提案: Be polite and avoid inappropriate language. State your preference clearly, explain why, and give a specific example. Fix grammar (keen on, because this color gives me confidence).

例: I like wearing black clothes because the color makes me feel confident and looks neat. For example, I often wear a black jacket when I want to appear more professional.

× I usually appreciate more to wear casual uh clothes umm, especially in hot weather as they are comfortable, comfortable and easy to move on.

✓ I usually prefer to wear casual clothes, especially in hot weather, because they are comfortable and easy to move in.

The verb 'appreciate' is not used to express preference; use 'prefer'. 'More' is redundant with 'prefer'. 'Casual clothes' is the correct noun phrase (remove filler words). 'Easy to move on' is incorrect; the correct prepositional phrase is 'easy to move in'. Also remove repeated word 'comfortable'. Ensure clear conjunction 'because' for reason.

× I usually uh, appreciate more to wear uh, comfortable and uh, casual clothes, uh, because uh, my car comfort is my priority.

✓ I usually prefer to wear comfortable, casual clothes because my comfort is my priority.

Use 'prefer' not 'appreciate' to indicate preference. 'My car comfort' is incorrect word order and likely a mistake; 'my comfort' is correct. Remove redundant fillers and extra 'uh' and unnecessary 'more'. Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'I prefer' matches subject 'I'.

× That's why umm, I always choose uh, comfortable clothes when I go somewhere.

✓ That's why I always choose comfortable clothes when I go out.

'Go somewhere' is unnatural in this context; 'go out' is more natural. Remove filler words. Adjectives are fine; streamline sentence for clarity.

× Umm, honestly, I really enjoy, uh, wearing T-shirts, uh, because they are easy to match and I was kind of, uh, jeans.

✓ Honestly, I really enjoy wearing T-shirts because they are easy to match with jeans.

'I was kind of jeans' is incorrect and unclear. Likely meant 'match with jeans'. Use present tense 'enjoy wearing' and correct preposition 'match with'. Remove fillers and commas.

× And also it is, uh, the best choice, uh, uh, in summer, uh, because they are convenient.

✓ They are also the best choice in summer because they are convenient.

Avoid starting with 'And also it is'—rewrite to place subject 'They' (T-shirts) first. Remove filler sounds. Keep simple present tense and clear causal connector 'because'.

× Umm, honestly, I spent a while uh, pick, uh, picking out my uh, daily outfit.

✓ Honestly, I spend a while picking out my daily outfit.

The question asks about present habit, so use present tense 'spend' not past 'spent'. 'Pick, picking' is redundant; use 'picking'. Remove fillers.

× Umm, sometimes I uh, try to umm, get advice, advice from my uh, friends when we go out.

✓ Sometimes I try to get advice from my friends when we go out.

Remove duplicated word 'advice'. The preposition 'from' is correct; simply eliminate fillers and repetition for clarity.

× Umm, usually, uh, on weekdays I uh, wear uh uniforms and umm, uniforms and smart clothes, uh, because I'm student, uh, but but weekends I appreciate more to wear umm, clothes where I feel confident.

✓ Usually, on weekdays I wear a uniform or smart clothes because I'm a student, but on weekends I prefer to wear clothes in which I feel confident.

Use singular 'a uniform' if the student wears one uniform. 'I'm student' needs article 'a'. 'Appreciate more to wear' should be 'prefer to wear'. Use 'in which I feel confident' or 'that make me feel confident' for clarity. Remove duplicated words and fillers.

× I'm really keen of wearing black clothes and they are wear because they this color give me confidence and I feel more myself confident.

✓ I'm really keen on wearing black clothes because this color gives me confidence and makes me feel more confident.

Use the correct preposition 'keen on' not 'keen of'. 'They are wear' is incorrect and should be removed. 'This color gives me confidence' requires singular verb 'gives'. 'I feel more myself confident' is ungrammatical; use 'makes me feel more confident'. Remove fillers and profanity.