Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and avoid filler words (e.g., “umm”). Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Use a linking phrase to connect ideas.

例: I prefer comfortable, easy-to-wear clothes. For example, light cotton shirts are ideal because they dry quickly and keep me cool in our humid climate.

提案: Give a clear direct answer first, then briefly explain with a specific example. Remove repetition and finish with a linking word showing contrast or condition.

例: I prefer both, depending on the occasion. For daily life I wear casual clothes for comfort, but I choose smart attire for school events or formal gatherings.

提案: Avoid repeating the same idea and using fillers. State your main point once, then give one clear reason and an example. Use linking words like “because” to show cause.

例: Yes, I like wearing T-shirts because they are comfortable and practical. For example, I wear breathable T-shirts when I exercise or run errands.

提案: Start with a direct answer and then explain concisely why, using a specific detail or example. Reduce repetition and use linking words such as “because” or “so”.

例: Yes, I spend time choosing clothes because I want them to be appropriate for the occasion. For instance, I plan outfits the night before if I have an interview or a formal event.

提案: Provide a clear contrast with one or two specific details. Remove repeated words and fillers. Use linking words like “while” or “however” to make the difference explicit.

例: Yes, I wear different styles: on weekdays I usually wear smart-casual clothes for work, while on weekends I choose breathable, comfortable outfits for relaxation or outdoor activities.

提案: Answer directly and add a concise reason with a specific example. Replace vague phrases like “heat resistant” with clearer language such as “suitable for hot weather.”

例: I prefer light-coloured clothes because they suit my skin tone and are better for hot weather. For example, I often wear white or pastel shirts since they reflect sunlight and keep me cooler.

× I like to wear clothes that are comfortable and very umm, easy to wear, especially in the humid weather in our country.

✓ I like to wear clothes that are comfortable and, um, easy to wear, especially in the humid weather of our country.

Use of present participle is fine here; main issue is preposition and minor wording: 'in the humid weather in our country' is awkward. Change to 'in the humid weather of our country' for clearer phrasing and natural English. Also add commas around 'um' and 'very' is redundant with 'easy to wear'. Suggestion: remove unnecessary 'very' and place commas correctly.

× I prefer to wear both casual and smart clothes depending on the occasion where I would be attending.

✓ I prefer to wear both casual and smart clothes depending on the occasion I will be attending.

The original uses 'would be attending' which is conditional/polite and not needed here. Use simple future 'will be attending' to show planned attendance. Also remove the relative 'where' which is unnecessary after 'occasion'. Suggestion: use 'I will be attending' when referring to future events or 'I am attending' if it's planned and definite.

× For example, I would just want to wear casual clothes for my everyday living and for special occasions or let's say school activities I would want to wear.

✓ For example, I would just want to wear casual clothes for everyday life, and for special occasions or school activities I would prefer to wear smart clothes.

Original sentence is incomplete and ends abruptly; it lacks the object after 'would want to wear'. Also 'everyday living' is awkward; 'everyday life' is more natural. 'Prefer' is clearer than repeated 'would want'. Ensure both clauses have parallel structure and include the noun 'smart clothes' for the second clause. Suggestion: complete the second clause and keep parallel structure.

× I feel comfortable wearing T-shirts, especially for day-to-day activities, umm, athletic activities.

✓ I feel comfortable wearing T-shirts, especially for day-to-day and athletic activities.

Redundant repetition 'activities, umm, athletic activities' is awkward. Combine phrases into 'day-to-day and athletic activities'. Keep gerund 'wearing' is correct; just streamline the nouns for clarity. Suggestion: avoid repetition and use concise coordination.

× But for most of the time, I wear T-shirts for, umm, suitable comfiness.

✓ But most of the time, I wear T-shirts because they are comfortable.

'Suitable comfiness' is not a correct phrase. Use 'comfortable' as an adjective or 'comfort' as a noun. Also remove unnecessary commas around 'umm'. Suggestion: use standard adjective 'comfortable' or noun 'comfort' instead of informal or incorrect 'comfiness'.

× I do take a lot of time on choosing clothes, but I do it for the sake of the appropriateness of the clothes that I would wear to the occasion or the activities that I would do within the day.

✓ I do take a lot of time choosing clothes, but I do it to ensure the clothes are appropriate for the occasions or activities I will do during the day.

Use 'time choosing' rather than 'time on choosing'. 'For the sake of the appropriateness' is wordy; use 'to ensure the clothes are appropriate'. Replace 'to the occasion' with 'for the occasions'. Use 'during the day' instead of 'within the day'. Also change 'would wear' and 'would do' to 'will' for future reference or present simple depending on context. Suggestion: simplify phrasing and use correct prepositions: 'time choosing', 'appropriate for', 'during the day'.

× I do prefer different styles of clothes on weekdays and weekends, especially when busy day-to-day activity.

✓ I prefer different styles of clothes on weekdays and weekends, especially when I have busy day-to-day activities.

'I do prefer' is acceptable for emphasis but unnecessary; simpler 'I prefer' is more natural. 'When busy day-to-day activity' lacks a subject and plural noun. Add 'I have' and pluralize 'activities'. Suggestion: ensure subject present and noun agreement: 'when I have busy day-to-day activities'.

× I would prefer something more breathable and comfortable while on a weekend and if there are any occasions or I would go somewhere, I prefer to wear smart, smart clothes.

✓ On weekends I prefer something more breathable and comfortable, and if I have an occasion or I go somewhere special, I prefer to wear smart clothes.

Original has awkward phrasing 'while on a weekend' and repeats 'smart, smart clothes'. Reorder to 'On weekends' and combine clauses with clear condition 'if I have an occasion or go somewhere special'. Remove duplicate word and keep consistent verb tense 'prefer'. Suggestion: avoid repetition and use clearer conditional phrasing.

× In general I like light colored clothes that complements my natural skin tone and of course that is perfect for a heat resistant kind of weather.

✓ In general, I like light-colored clothes that complement my natural skin tone and are suitable for hot, humid weather.

Subject-verb agreement: 'clothes' is plural so verb should be 'complement' not 'complements' (fits Grammar problem type ID 27 as well). 'Light colored' should be hyphenated as 'light-colored' or kept as two words; here hyphenated is natural. 'Heat resistant kind of weather' is unnatural; use 'hot, humid weather' or 'heat' isn't 'resistant'. Also add comma after 'In general'. Suggestion: ensure plural subject verb agreement, use natural collocations like 'hot, humid weather' and avoid literal translations like 'heat resistant weather'.