Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and confident: begin with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (umm), reduce repetition, and add one specific reason or example to support your preference. Use a linking word when adding the reason.

例: I prefer well-fitted cotton clothes, usually in black. For example, I often choose a slim-fit black cotton shirt because it’s comfortable in hot weather and helps me blend in at work.

提案: Start with a clear direct answer and improve grammar: use comparative structure correctly and add a brief specific example. Use a linking word to connect preference and reason.

例: I prefer comfortable clothes rather than smart outfits because my country is very hot. For instance, I usually wear loose cotton shirts when commuting to stay cool and avoid feeling sticky.

提案: Avoid trailing off and repetition. Give a clear topic sentence, then add one supporting detail with a linking word. Replace vague phrases like 'these' with specific nouns.

例: Yes, I like wearing T-shirts. They are comfortable and, because they are usually plain and dark, they also make me feel less noticeable at work.

提案: Answer directly and be precise. Remove hedging like 'I think so' and give a short reason or consequence. Use a linking word to connect the fact and its impact.

例: Yes, I usually spend about 30 minutes in the morning choosing clothes for work, so I sometimes run late if I don’t plan outfits the night before.

提案: Provide a clearer topic sentence and add a brief supporting detail or example. Use a linking phrase to explain the reason and mention any exception if applicable.

例: No, I don’t usually change styles between weekdays and weekends because my wardrobe is limited. For example, I often wear the same plain black shirts both at work and during free time.

提案: Begin with a direct sentence about colour preference, remove repetition, and give a specific example or two of neutral colours. Use a linking word to explain your reason.

例: I prefer neutral colours such as black, gray, and beige because they help me stay subtle and feel less noticeable.

× I want my clothes to be a cotton fabric with umm not too loose and not too fit, just perfectly fit my my size.

✓ I want my clothes to be made of cotton fabric, not too loose and not too tight, just a perfect fit for my size.

Original uses 'to be a cotton fabric' and 'perfectly fit' incorrectly. Use past participle 'made of' to describe the material (Grammar Problem Type ID 10: Verb in the present participle form relates to participle usage) and use 'tight' (adjective) and the noun phrase 'a perfect fit for my size'. Improve sentence clarity by removing fillers and duplicate words.

× And I want it to be color black because I don't want to be noticeable.

✓ And I want it to be black because I don't want to be noticeable.

Use the adjective 'black' directly after 'be' rather than the phrase 'color black'. The original misuses an extra noun phrase. Keep the adjective form to describe color.

× I prefer to wear comfortable than casual or smart clothes because the weather in my country is hot so I don't want to feel sticky.

✓ I prefer to wear comfortable clothes rather than casual or smart clothes because the weather in my country is hot, so I don't want to feel sticky.

When comparing preferences use 'prefer X rather than Y' or 'prefer X to Y'. Original used 'prefer to wear comfortable than', which is ungrammatical. Also add a comma before the coordinating conjunction 'so' for clarity.

× Yes, I wear T-shirts all the time, even when I go to work because these make me feel comfortable and less noticeable and. Yeah.

✓ Yes, I wear T-shirts all the time, even when I go to work, because they make me feel comfortable and less noticeable.

Use 'they' to refer to plural 'T-shirts' (correct pronoun) and remove the stray 'and.' Also add a comma before 'because' to separate clauses. Original sentence had pronoun and punctuation issues (subject-pronoun agreement and sentence structure).

× Yes, I think so because I usually spend 30 minutes in the morning searching for clothes that I would wear in work.

✓ Yes, I think so because I usually spend 30 minutes in the morning searching for clothes that I will wear to work.

Use future 'will wear' or present simple 'wear' depending on context; 'to work' is the correct prepositional phrase, not 'in work'. The change avoids awkward conditional 'would' and fixes the preposition.

× No, because I have a limited wardrobe and I usually wear the same clothes again in different occasions.

✓ No, because I have a limited wardrobe and I usually wear the same clothes again on different occasions.

Use the preposition 'on' with 'occasions' ('on different occasions') rather than 'in'. This fixes the collocation between noun and preposition.

× I prefer these with with neutral colors to make me subtle and feel less noticeable.

✓ I prefer clothes in neutral colors to make me appear subtle and less noticeable.

'These' is vague; use 'clothes' or 'items' instead. Also say 'in neutral colors' (correct preposition) and 'appear subtle' is more natural than 'make me subtle'. Removed duplicate 'with'.