Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clearer and more accurate. Start with a direct topic sentence naming the styles you prefer (e.g., formal, casual), avoid contradictory labels (T-shirts are casual, not formal), and correct grammar and repetition. Add one specific supporting detail with a linking word. Keep to under five sentences.

例: I prefer smart-casual clothes rather than strictly formal wear. For example, I often choose long-sleeve shirts or high-waist trousers for a neat appearance because they look professional yet are comfortable for daily wear.

提案: Avoid repetition and incorrect word choice. Begin with a clear topic sentence saying you like both, then use a linking word to explain when you choose each. Replace vague words like 'cashmeres' with appropriate items (e.g., cashmere sweater). Keep sentences concise and grammatical.

例: I prefer both depending on the situation. For instance, I wear comfortable items like a cashmere sweater and jeans at home, but I choose smart clothes such as a blazer and dress trousers for work meetings because they make a better impression.

提案: Give a direct answer and a specific reason. Avoid irrelevant questions and incomplete phrases. Use one linking phrase to explain occasions when you wear T-shirts and include a concrete example.

例: Yes, I enjoy wearing T-shirts, especially when I travel or spend time with friends. For example, I usually pack several cotton T-shirts for weekend trips because they are comfortable and easy to wash.

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a topic sentence about how much time you spend, then give a reason with a linking word. Specify what you consider (e.g., color, formality) to show detail.

例: Yes, I usually spend quite a bit of time choosing clothes because I want to feel confident. For example, I often consider the color and level of formality before deciding what to wear for meetings or social events.

提案: Answer in present tense and structure your response: state the contrast, then give examples using linking words (e.g., however, while). Correct grammar (singular/plural, verb forms) and be specific about typical outfits.

例: Yes, I usually dress differently on weekdays and weekends. While I wear more formal clothes like a shirt and trousers for work or meetings, I prefer casual outfits such as jeans and a hoodie when I meet friends on weekends.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence about preferred colours, then explain why you like them with a specific example. Fix grammar (singular/plural, word order) and avoid fragments. Use linking words like because or for example.

例: I prefer pastel and neutral colours because they look elegant and are easy to match. For example, I often choose a beige or light blue shirt since these colours make my whole outfit look softer and more coordinated.

× I like wearing formal clothes like T-shirts or long sleeves that blends with my my. High waist.

✓ I like wearing formal clothes like T-shirts or long sleeves that blend with my high-waisted style.

Subject-verb agreement and pronoun/word choice: 'that' refers to plural noun 'T-shirts or long sleeves', so the verb should be 'blend' not 'blends' (Grammar Problem Type ID 27 and 1). The phrase 'my my. High waist' is unclear and repeats 'my'; it should be 'my high-waisted style' or 'my high waist'. Suggestion: use a clear noun phrase and ensure verb agrees with the plural subject. Grammar Problem Type IDs: 27,1

× Both, I like them both I like comfortable and cashmeres clothes or smart clothes because it feels comfortable and easy to wear and make you look good.

✓ Both. I like comfortable and cashmere clothes as well as smart clothes because they feel comfortable, are easy to wear, and make you look good.

Agreement and word form: 'cashmeres' is incorrect plural form; use 'cashmere' as an uncountable adjective/noun. Pronoun agreement: refer to 'clothes' with plural pronoun 'they' and plural verbs 'feel' and 'make' (Grammar Problem Type IDs 13 and 27). Also split run-on into clearer sentence. Suggestion: use correct adjective forms and match verbs to plural subject. Grammar Problem Type IDs: 13,27

× Yes, I like wearing T-shirts, especially when I'm traveling or having a friendship day or making. Yeah, you plan to visit?

✓ Yes, I like wearing T-shirts, especially when I'm traveling, on Friendship Day, or when I plan to visit someone.

Sentence fragments and unclear phrasing: 'making. Yeah, you plan to visit?' is fragmented and awkward. 'Friendship Day' should be capitalized if a named event and the clause should be parallel 'when I'm traveling, on Friendship Day, or when I plan to visit someone.' Suggestion: make parallel structures and complete clauses for clarity. (Grammar Problem Type ID 26).

× Yes, usually I spend more time selecting what clothes to to put on my or what kind of style do I want to make to make me feel good.

✓ Yes, usually I spend more time selecting what clothes to put on or what kind of style I want to choose to make myself feel good.

Pronoun and reflexive use: 'my' is incorrect and should be omitted or changed to 'myself' when referring back to the subject; also 'to to' is a typo and 'do I want' is incorrect word order in a statement. Use 'choose' and 'make myself feel good' (Grammar Problem Type IDs 12 and 15 and 26). Suggestion: remove extra words, fix verb form and use reflexive 'myself'. Grammar Problem Type IDs: 12,15,26

× Yes I did. When it is weekdays or I have a meeting or I have friends to meet, I usually make I usually put clothes that is more formal than in on.

✓ Yes. On weekdays, when I have a meeting or meet friends, I usually choose clothes that are more formal.

Tense and agreement errors: 'Yes I did' is wrong if referring generally—use 'Yes' or 'Yes, I do.' 'When it is weekdays' should be 'On weekdays.' 'Put clothes that is' has subject-verb agreement: 'clothes' requires 'are' not 'is'. Remove repeated fragments 'I usually make I usually put' and use 'choose' or 'wear' (Grammar Problem Type IDs 5,6,27,26). Suggestion: use correct time preposition 'on weekdays', match plural subject with plural verb, and avoid repetition. Grammar Problem Type IDs: 5,6,27,26

× I like clothes that is pastel color, the neutral ones which is. Makes my outfit or my my color more.

✓ I like clothes that are pastel in color, the neutral ones which make my outfit and my complexion look better.

Agreement and word choice: 'clothes that is' should be 'clothes that are' (subject-verb agreement). 'Pastel color' should be 'pastel in color' or 'pastel colors.' 'Which is.' is a fragment; use 'which make' to agree with plural 'ones.' 'my my color' repeats and is unclear—likely 'my complexion' or 'my coloring.' Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement and replace vague/repeated words with clear nouns (Grammar Problem Type IDs 27,13,26).