Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific examples and a brief reason. Avoid filler words (e.g., "and yeah"). Use a linking phrase to connect examples.

例: I prefer comfortable clothes. For example, I often wear oversized T-shirts and sweatshirts because they are easy to move in and suit my casual lifestyle.

提案: Make the conditional structure clearer and remove repetition. Start with a direct topic sentence, then use a linking word (e.g., "however") to contrast situations and give a concise reason for each.

例: It depends on the occasion. If I’m at work or running errands I wear casual, comfortable clothes; however, for interviews or formal events I choose smart, professional outfits to make a good impression.

提案: Clarify and correct unclear phrases ("at home and a half"). Use one or two clear supporting details and a linking word. Mention when and why you choose different T-shirts for different situations.

例: Yes, I love T-shirts, especially oversized ones because they are very comfortable. I usually wear plain oversized tees at home or to the gym, but I pick stylish oversized T-shirts with prints when I go out.

提案: Avoid generalizations and make the answer personal and specific. Start with a direct response, then explain briefly why you take time and give one example of what you consider when choosing clothes.

例: Yes, I do. Because I have a fashion background, I pay attention to color coordination and fabric; for example, I often try outfits on to see how accessories and shoes match before going out.

提案: Good structure but remove repetition and tighten phrasing. Use a linking word to compare weekdays and weekends and include a short reason for each choice.

例: Yes. On weekdays I wear practical, comfortable clothes like oversized T-shirts and casual trousers because I travel for work; on weekends I relax and sometimes dress up more if I’m going out.

提案: This answer is clear and specific. To improve further, add one brief example of a colour choice for a particular occasion and use a linking word to show the reason-effect relation.

例: It depends on my mood, but I usually choose black or grey because they’re versatile. For example, when I wear a dark outfit to a party I add a bright scarf or silver necklace to create contrast and interest.

× I like to wear whatever's comfortable.

✓ I like to wear whatever is comfortable.

Using contractions is acceptable, but in formal spoken answers avoid ambiguous contraction 'whatever's' which can be unclear; expanded 'whatever is' is clearer and maintains correct verb form with 'to wear'.

× For me, I prefer wearing sweatshirts, oversized T-shirts, and I probably love to wear skirts and baggy pants, baggy jeans, and yeah.

✓ For me, I prefer wearing sweatshirts and oversized T-shirts, and I also like wearing skirts, baggy pants, and baggy jeans.

Multiple issues: parallel structure and repetition. Use consistent gerund forms ('prefer wearing', 'like wearing') for parallelism and remove filler 'probably' and 'and yeah' for clarity. This fits present preference context.

× It really depends on where I'm going, if I know here I can be normal like me myself, I like to wear comfortable clothes and casual clothes and if I have an interview, if I have something important, I would definitely wear some smart clothes.

✓ It really depends on where I'm going; if I am going somewhere casual I wear comfortable clothes, but if I have an interview or something important I would definitely wear smart clothes.

Original has run-on clauses and awkward phrasing ('if I know here I can be normal like me myself'). Break into two clauses, use clear conditional structure ('if I am going somewhere casual' vs 'if I have an interview'), and avoid redundant words to improve clarity and grammar.

× I adore wearing T-shirts, especially oversized ones because they're extremely comfortable and I sometimes just wear them in gym and at home and a half.

✓ I adore wearing T-shirts, especially oversized ones, because they're extremely comfortable and I sometimes just wear them at the gym and at home.

Correct preposition is 'at the gym' not 'in gym'. Remove 'and a half' which is unclear. Add commas for clarity.

× Some different good looking oversized T-shirts for going out.

✓ I also have some different good-looking oversized T-shirts for going out.

Original is a sentence fragment lacking a verb. Add subject and verb ('I also have') and hyphenate 'good-looking' as a compound adjective.

× Yes, being a girl, that is a universal problem.

✓ Yes, as a girl, that is a universal problem.

Use 'as a girl' or 'being a girl' with better placement; 'being a girl' at sentence start is acceptable but followed by comma change. 'As a girl' is clearer here.

× We take time to choose our clothes and especially me coming from a fashion background, I like to put some extra effort towards my fashion.

✓ We take time to choose our clothes, and since I come from a fashion background, I like to put some extra effort into my fashion.

Use 'since I come from' or 'coming from' with correct clause connector. Preposition 'into' is correct ('put effort into something'), not 'towards my fashion'. Also fix sentence structure with a comma and rephrase 'especially me' to 'since I'.

× On weekdays I usually travel for work so I wear comfortable clothes like oversized T-shirt and casual trousers.

✓ On weekdays I usually travel for work, so I wear comfortable clothes like oversized T-shirts and casual trousers.

Mismatch: 'oversized T-shirt' should be plural 'oversized T-shirts' to agree with 'clothes'. Add comma before 'so' and maintain plural consistency.

× And weekends I like to relax, take it easy and if I'm going out I would like to put something nice on.

✓ On weekends I like to relax and take it easy, and if I'm going out I like to put something nice on.

Add missing preposition 'On weekends', use parallel verbs 'relax and take', and prefer 'I like' rather than 'I would like' for habitual preference. Add comma for clarity.

× When I wear dark clothes, I often put on some silver jewelry or some bright accessory to create more contrast and make the outfit more interesting.

✓ When I wear dark clothes, I often put on silver jewelry or a bright accessory to create more contrast and make the outfit more interesting.

Minor issue: 'some silver jewelry' and 'some bright accessory' can be more natural as 'silver jewelry' and 'a bright accessory'. Use singular 'a' with 'accessory' for specificity and natural phrasing.