Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a clear, concise topic sentence and then one or two specific supporting details. Avoid filler words and unclear phrases (e.g., “rose” likely meant “shorts”). Use correct grammar for seasons and plural nouns. Link ideas with a simple connector (e.g., “in summer,” “in winter”).

例: I like to wear different clothes depending on the season. In summer I usually wear T-shirts and shorts because they are cool and comfortable, while in winter I wear coats and warm trousers to stay warm.

提案: Start with a direct answer, then give a specific reason and one brief example. Avoid vague praise like “too amazing” and complete your sentence. Use linking words like “because” and “for example.”

例: I prefer to wear comfortable, casual clothes because they are practical for everyday activities. For example, I often wear a soft sweater and jeans when I study or meet friends because they allow me to move freely.

提案: Answer directly and expand with a specific reason or short example. Use natural phrasing and avoid adding unnecessary words like “also very much.”

例: Yes, I enjoy wearing T-shirts in summer because they are lightweight and keep me cool. For instance, I wear printed T-shirts when I go to the park.

提案: Organize your answer: give a clear reason and one coherent example. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., “patterns,” “colors,” “styles”) and avoid confusing or incorrect words (“fork,” “frog”). Keep the example short and relevant.

例: Yes, I often spend time choosing clothes because I care about colors and styles that suit the occasion. For example, last week I chose a blue shirt with a floral pattern because it looked smart and cheerful for a family dinner.

提案: Give a direct contrast between weekdays and weekends using linking words (e.g., “On weekdays… but on weekends…”). Be specific about what you wear and why. Correct grammar for verb forms and prepositions.

例: Yes. On weekdays I usually wear simple T-shirts and trousers because I stay at home or attend classes, but on weekends I wear more comfortable or casual outfits like hoodies and jeans because I go out and travel.

提案: Answer directly, then give a concise reason and a short example. Avoid repetition and unclear adjectives like “weird.” Use proper phrasing: “my favorite color is black.”

例: I like many colors, but my favourite colour is black because it looks elegant and matches easily. For example, I often choose a black jacket for evenings because it is simple and stylish.

× I like to be a different type of clothes, uh, in different seasons.

✓ I like to wear different types of clothes in different seasons.

The verb 'be' is incorrect with 'clothes'; use 'wear'. 'Different type of clothes' should be plural 'different types of clothes'. Also remove filler and extra commas. Use 'in different seasons' for clarity.

× For example in summer season I wear T-shirts and rose and in winter season I wear different type of coats and pants and it is too amazing.

✓ For example, in summer I wear T-shirts and shorts, and in winter I wear different types of coats and pants; I really like that.

Use commas after introductory phrase. 'Summer season' and 'winter season' are redundant; use 'summer' and 'winter'. 'Rose' seems incorrect; likely 'shorts'. 'Different type' should be 'different types'. 'It is too amazing' is informal; replace with 'I really like that'.

× And most of people wear different colors and they suit their personality also.

✓ Most people wear different colors that suit their personalities.

Use 'most people' not 'most of people'. 'They suit their personality' should match plural: 'suit their personalities'. Reorder for natural English.

× I prefer to wear comfortable clothes because comfortable clothes are too amazing and most of people wear these clothes because they are convenient and they're.

✓ I prefer to wear comfortable clothes because they are very comfortable, and most people wear them because they are convenient.

Avoid repetition 'comfortable clothes are too amazing'. 'Too amazing' is unnatural; use 'very comfortable'. 'Most of people' -> 'most people'. Replace dangling 'they're' with 'they are convenient' or 'they suit me'.

× Yes, I love wearing T-shirts during summer days also very much.

✓ Yes, I love wearing T-shirts during the summer.

'During summer days also very much' is awkward. Use 'during the summer' and omit unnecessary adverbs. 'Love wearing' already expresses degree.

× Yes, I spend a lot of time choosing clothes because I choose a different type of colour clothes than I choose the styles and different traditions and styles are also see on all the clothes.

✓ Yes, I spend a lot of time choosing clothes because I select different colors and styles; different traditions and styles are also visible on the clothes.

Replace repetitive 'choose' with 'select'. 'Different type of colour clothes' -> 'different colors'. 'Are also see on' is ungrammatical; use 'are also visible on'.

× For example, last weeks I wore a beautiful fork.

✓ For example, last week I wore a beautiful jacket.

'Last weeks' should be 'last week' for a single past example. 'Fork' is likely a wrong word; context suggests a garment like 'jacket' or 'skirt'—provide a reasonable correction. Ensure past tense 'wore' matches.

× It is a colour of blue colour and it's it is planted on the frog is flowering.

✓ It was blue and had a floral pattern.

Avoid redundant 'colour of blue colour'. Combine into 'was blue'. 'Planted on the frog is flowering' is unintelligible; interpret as 'floral pattern' and rephrase. Use past tense 'was' to match 'wore'.

× We are I wear different styles of clothes on weekends and weekend days because during my weekdays I wear different type of T-shirts and clothes and other clothes but in the weekends I traveling in different places than I wear comfortable clothes to prefer me cold.

✓ I wear different styles of clothes on weekends because during weekdays I wear various T-shirts and other clothes, but on weekends I travel to different places so I prefer to wear comfortable clothes to keep warm.

Remove 'We are' which is incorrect. Use 'weekdays' and 'weekends' properly. 'Different type of T-shirts' -> 'various T-shirts'. 'I traveling' should be 'I travel'. 'To prefer me cold' is ungrammatical; interpret intent as 'to keep warm'.

× I like many type of colour clothes but my but my favorite colour is black so I like weird black colour clothes.

✓ I like many colors, but my favorite color is black, so I often choose black clothes.

Use plural 'many types' or 'many colors'. Remove duplicate 'but my'. 'Weird black colour clothes' is odd; replace with 'often choose black clothes' to express preference.