Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and fix sentence fragments.

例: I usually choose clothes according to the occasion and the weather. For example, I wear formal attire like a blazer and dress shoes to interviews or classes, but I prefer comfortable jeans and a T-shirt when I go out with friends.

提案: Give a direct answer first, then briefly explain with clear linking words. Correct grammar and avoid incomplete sentences. Provide one concrete example to support your point.

例: I prefer smart clothes for formal events but casual clothes for leisure. For instance, I wear a suit to job interviews, whereas I choose sneakers and jeans when meeting friends.

提案: This is a good direct answer. To improve, add a specific detail or short example using a linking word to enrich the response while keeping it concise.

例: Yes, I love wearing T-shirts because they are comfortable and easy to move in. For example, I often wear a cotton T-shirt when I study or hang out with friends.

提案: Structure the answer with one clear topic sentence, then explain briefly with specific detail. Use correct collocations and avoid repeating similar words.

例: Yes, I spend quite a bit of time choosing my clothes because I am picky about my appearance. For example, before going out I usually try on three or four outfits to choose the best one.

提案: Be precise and avoid contradictions (blazer is smart rather than casual). Start with a clear statement, then contrast weekdays and weekends with specific examples and linking words.

例: Yes, I dress differently on weekdays and weekends. On weekdays I usually wear smart-casual items such as a blazer with jeans for work, whereas on weekends I relax in long T-shirts and comfortable jeans.

提案: Start with a concise topic sentence, give a reason and a brief specific example. Correct small grammar issues and list colours clearly.

例: I mostly prefer black clothes because they are versatile and easy to match. However, I like trying new colours too; for example, I recently bought dresses in butter yellow and light pink.

× It depends on location and the weather.

✓ It depends on the location and the weather.

The noun phrase needs a definite article before 'location' because we refer to a specific context (the place where you are). Add 'the' to make the sentence natural and grammatically correct.

× If I am going on an interview or I'm attending a class so I will.

✓ If I am going to an interview or attending a class, I will dress more formally.

The original sentence is fragmented and uses an incorrect verb phrase 'going on an interview'. Use 'going to an interview' and complete the main clause. Also combine clauses correctly and use a clear verb ('dress') to show the intended action.

× We are more formal and formal clothes but if I'm going with out with my friends, my family so I prefer wearing comfortable clothes.

✓ I wear more formal clothes in those situations, but if I'm going out with my friends or family, I prefer wearing comfortable clothes.

The sentence used 'we' incorrectly and repeated 'formal'. Change to 'I wear' to match the singular speaker. 'going with out' is incorrect; use 'going out'. Reorganize to two contrasting clauses for clarity.

× Feeling comfortable and casual clothes or smart clothes also depend on the occasion I'm wearing it for.

✓ Whether I wear comfortable, casual clothes or smart clothes also depends on the occasion.

The original is ungrammatical and has incorrect word order. Start with 'Whether' to present the choice, use parallel adjectives 'comfortable, casual' and make the verb agree with the subject: 'depends on the occasion'.

× If I am attending a business meeting or I'm giving am I am going out for an interview.

✓ If I am attending a business meeting, giving a presentation, or going to an interview,

The original is jumbled and contains repetition ('am I am'). List the activities in parallel form and use correct verb forms: 'giving a presentation' and 'going to an interview'. Complete clause needed depending on sentence continuation.

× So definitely I would wear a proper smart clothes.

✓ So definitely I would wear proper smart clothes.

The article 'a' cannot be used before the plural noun 'clothes'. Remove 'a' and keep the adjectives 'proper smart' before the plural noun.

× But if I am going out with my friends or.

✓ But if I am going out with my friends, I would choose something more casual.

The original is an incomplete clause ending with 'or.' Complete the thought with a main clause and a clear verb to make the sentence grammatical.

× Yes, I love wearing T-shirts because I feel comfortable in them and more relaxed than other tops or outfits.

✓ Yes, I love wearing T-shirts because I feel more comfortable and relaxed in them than in other tops or outfits.

Improve parallel comparison by placing 'more' before both adjectives 'comfortable and relaxed' and repeat 'in' for the comparison: 'relaxed in them than in other...'. This makes the comparative structure clear.

× Yes I spend a lot of time choosing my clothes like what to wear in for a day because I'm so choosy and picky and the outfit.

✓ Yes, I spend a lot of time choosing my clothes, deciding what to wear for the day, because I'm very choosy about my outfits.

The original has awkward phrases ('in for a day', 'choosy and picky and the outfit'). Rephrase to 'deciding what to wear for the day' and 'choosy about my outfits' for clarity and conciseness.

× So if I'm going out I will definitely try 4 to 5 outfits and then come to final outfit.

✓ So if I'm going out I will definitely try four to five outfits and then choose the final one.

Use words for numbers in formal speech ('four to five'), and 'come to final outfit' is awkward; use 'choose the final one' for clarity. Also add 'the' before 'final'.

× Yes, I do wear different kinds of clothes on weekdays and weekends.

✓ Yes, I wear different kinds of clothes on weekdays and at the weekend.

Both forms are acceptable; corrected to include 'at the weekend' as an alternative British phrasing. Also simplified 'do wear' to 'wear' for naturalness.

× On weekdays I prefer wearing more casual clothes like Blazers and jeans and on weekends I prefer being relaxed while I wear long T-shirts and in long T-shirts and jeans.

✓ On weekdays I prefer wearing more casual clothes like blazers and jeans, and on weekends I prefer being relaxed, wearing long T-shirts and jeans.

Fix capitalization ('Blazers' -> 'blazers'), remove redundant phrase 'in long T-shirts', and use parallel gerund phrases 'wearing' to maintain structure. Add commas for clarity.

× Mostly I love black clothes, black coloured clothes.

✓ Mostly I love black clothes, black-coloured clothes.

Combine the phrases into one clear expression. Use hyphen in 'black-coloured' if needed; avoid unnecessary repetition.

× If you will see my wardrobe, you will definitely find most of the my outfits are of black colour, but I love to explore other colours also.

✓ If you look in my wardrobe, you will definitely find that most of my outfits are black, but I also like to explore other colours.

Use 'If you look' instead of 'If you will see' (conditional form), remove extra 'the' before 'my outfits', simplify 'are of black colour' to 'are black', and place 'also' appropriately: 'I also like'.

× Recently I bought some dresses of butter yellow light pink.

✓ Recently I bought some dresses in butter yellow and light pink.

Use 'in' to indicate colour, and separate the colours with 'and' to list them. The original lacked proper preposition and conjunctions.