Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid grammatical errors (use 'formal clothes', 'a shirt and trousers', 'gives me the vibe of a grown man'), and reduce hesitations. Add one specific reason or brief example using a linking word (e.g., 'because' or 'so') to make your answer coherent.

例: I like to wear formal clothes, such as shirts and trousers. I prefer this style because it gives me a more professional and confident appearance when meeting colleagues or guests.

提案: Answer directly and avoid contradictions (you said 'yes' but need to state which you prefer). Remove fillers and finish your thought. Use one linking word (e.g., 'because' or 'especially') and give a specific example of an occasion.

例: I prefer casual clothes because they make me feel comfortable and confident when I meet friends. For example, I often wear a nice T-shirt and jeans to casual dinners or weekend outings.

提案: Be specific and correct vocabulary: say 'T-shirts are one of my favorite types of clothing' and avoid unclear words like 'bolo'. Give one clear reason and an example of when you wear them. Keep to 2–3 sentences and use linking words like 'for example' or 'because'.

例: Yes. T-shirts are one of my favorite types of clothing because they are comfortable and versatile. For example, I wear plain or graphic T-shirts for daily errands and layering under a jacket for casual meetups.

提案: Structure your answer: start with a clear statement, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words like 'because' and 'so'. Fix grammar ('spend a lot of time choosing', 'clothes express your personality'). Avoid trailing off—complete your final sentence.

例: Yes, I spend a lot of time choosing my clothes because appearance expresses my personality and shows respect to others. So I often plan my outfit in advance for meetings or events.

提案: Give a clear direct answer (Yes or No) and explain briefly with specific examples and correct vocabulary ('T-shirt' not 'AT shirt'). Avoid trailing off. Use linking words like 'however' or 'but' to contrast weekday and weekend styles.

例: Not really. I mostly wear casual clothes like T-shirts and trousers during weekdays for work and study, and on weekends I choose even more comfortable clothes such as sweatpants and hoodies for relaxing.

提案: Be concise and correct grammar: say 'I prefer dark colors like black, grey and brown.' Explain the reason clearly using linking words ('because' or 'so') and avoid awkward phrasing about skin tone—use polite, clear language like 'they suit my darker skin tone'.

例: I prefer dark colors such as black, grey and brown because they suit my darker skin tone and look more flattering on me.

× I really like to wear a formal clothes such as a shirt and a trousers.

✓ I really like to wear formal clothes such as a shirt and trousers.

The noun 'clothes' is plural and should not be used with the singular article 'a'. Also 'trousers' is plural and should not be preceded by 'a'. Remove 'a' before 'formal clothes' and before 'trousers' to correct number agreement.

× This give me a vibe of a growth man and this is a formal and very polite, uh, style when you meet some someone.

✓ This gives me the vibe of a grown man and this is a formal and very polite style when you meet someone.

The subject 'This' requires the third-person singular verb 'gives' (subject-verb agreement). 'Growth man' is incorrect; use the adjective 'grown' to modify 'man'. 'Some someone' is redundant; use 'someone'. Remove filler words for clarity.

× I prefer wearing uh, casual clothes, uh, which make me feel umm, appropriate and confident when I go out to meet some, uh, my friends, especially in the special occasions.

✓ I prefer wearing casual clothes, which make me feel appropriate and confident when I go out to meet my friends, especially on special occasions.

No modal error per se, but subject-verb agreement applies: 'which make' correctly matches 'clothes' (plural). Change 'in the special occasions' to 'on special occasions' (preposition correction). Remove extraneous 'some' before 'my friends'.

× Umm, the casual clothes also make me look more.

✓ Umm, casual clothes also make me look better.

The sentence is incomplete/awkward: 'look more' needs a comparative adjective such as 'better' to complete the idea. Use 'better' to convey improved appearance.

× Yes, uh, T-shirt is one of my favorite piece of clothes.

✓ Yes, a T-shirt is one of my favorite pieces of clothing.

'T-shirt' requires an article 'a' when singular. 'Piece of clothes' is incorrect; use 'piece of clothing' or 'pieces of clothing'. Also pluralize 'piece' to 'pieces' because 'one of my' requires plural noun after 'of my'.

× Uh, I have a lot of T-shirt in my wardrobe.

✓ I have a lot of T-shirts in my wardrobe.

Use plural 'T-shirts' after 'a lot of'. Also article 'a' was unnecessary before 'lot' is fine as 'a lot of T-shirts' but change to plural noun.

× Umm, especially you can see a, a bolo is one of my favorite type is very appropriate, uh, for a special occasions, even for a daily life.

✓ Especially, a bolo is one of my favorite types; it is very appropriate for special occasions and even for daily life.

Original is run-on and ungrammatical. Use 'one of my favorite types' (plural 'types' after 'one of'). Insert a clause 'it is' to connect ideas. 'a special occasions' incorrect—use 'special occasions' without 'a'.

× Yes uh, I spend a lot of time to choosing my clothes because I think that uh, appearance is very important when you meet someone, it express your, uh, personalities and also your respect to a person.

✓ Yes, I spend a lot of time choosing my clothes because I think that appearance is very important when you meet someone; it expresses your personality and also shows your respect for a person.

After 'spend time' use the gerund 'choosing' rather than 'to choosing'. 'It express' needs third-person singular 'expresses'. Use singular 'personality' not plural 'personalities' when referring to one person's appearance. Use 'respect for a person' (preposition 'for').

× So choosing a close should, uh, take your, uh, should take your.

✓ So choosing clothes should take careful consideration.

Original is fragmented and repetitive. Replace with a complete, concise sentence. 'Close' is incorrect singular; use 'clothes'. Provide a clear object 'careful consideration' to complete the thought.

× I'm not really umm, because I usually, uh, wear the casual style, uh, such as AT shirt and a trousers during uh, the weekdays for work, for walk and study, and during the weekend I will wear the comfortable clothes to uh, to.

✓ Not really, because I usually wear a casual style, such as a T-shirt and trousers during weekdays for work, walking, and studying, and during the weekend I wear comfortable clothes.

Remove filler 'I'm' contraction awkwardness; 'a casual style' needs article and 'T-shirt' spelled correctly. 'a trousers' incorrect; use 'trousers' without 'a'. Use gerunds 'walking' and 'studying' instead of nouns. Remove unfinished ending and keep consistent tense 'I wear'.

× Umm, I usually choose the clothes that has the black or grey or brown color, uh, those dark colors because I don't like the bright color since my skins is the is the dark skin.

✓ I usually choose clothes that are black, grey, or brown — those dark colors — because I don't like bright colors since my skin is dark.

'Choose the clothes that has' incorrect agreement; use 'clothes that are'. Use plural 'colors' to match list. 'Bright color' should be 'bright colors'. 'My skins is the is the dark skin' is ungrammatical; use 'my skin is dark'.

× So when I you, you write, you wear a bright color. It's make the contract and make you like darker.

✓ So when you wear a bright color, it makes the contrast and can make you look darker.

Remove extraneous words 'I you, you write'. Subject should be 'you'. 'It's make' needs 'it makes' (third-person singular). 'Make you like darker' should be 'make you look darker'. Use 'contrast' spelling and article usage: 'the contrast' or simply 'contrast'; here 'the contrast' works.