Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words, and provide one or two specific details. Keep it concise and natural (max 5 sentences). Use linking words if adding details.

例: I prefer simple, minimalist clothing. For example, I usually wear plain black or white shirts because they are easy to match and look neat. Overall, I like styles that are comfortable and low-maintenance.

提案: Start with a direct answer, reduce hesitation, and give a specific reason with a linking word. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and avoid repeating words.

例: I prefer comfortable, casual clothes. Because I commute to work and spend long hours at the office, comfort is more important to me than dressing smart.

提案: Answer directly, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Remove fillers and repetition; three sentences are enough.

例: Yes, I like wearing T-shirts. I wear them most days because they are comfortable and easy to put on, so I don't waste time choosing an outfit.

提案: Give a concise direct answer and one clear supporting detail. Avoid repeating the same point. Use a linking word to connect the reason.

例: No, I don't spend much time choosing clothes because I prefer simple, casual items. Therefore I can decide quickly and get ready fast.

提案: Provide a clear direct answer, then give a concise explanation. Avoid unclear phrases and hesitations; mention a specific example of similarity or difference.

例: Not really — I wear similar clothes on weekdays and weekends. Since my job doesn't require formal attire, I usually stick to casual outfits every day.

提案: State your preference clearly and explain why with one specific reason. Remove repetition and fillers; two sentences are sufficient.

例: I prefer neutral colours, especially black and white. I like them because they give a simple, minimalist impression and are easy to match.

× I like, uh, like simple fashion, you know, like this is more than this is more so I usually like wear like simple stuff, simple clothes like uh, old black or old white, something like that. Simple is more.

✓ I like simple fashion; I usually wear simple clothes, like old black or white ones.

Original has unnecessary fillers and incorrect verb form 'like wear'. Use 'wear' without 'like' before it when already stating preference with 'I like'. Also use plural noun 'ones' for colors referring to clothes and simplify sentence structure to remove fillers.

× I pref, I do prefer to wear a comfortable and then casual like stuff because I usually just go to work, like commute to work and uh, I don't wanna feel like any uncomfortable like while uh, working. So.

✓ I prefer to wear comfortable, casual clothes because I usually commute to work and I don't want to feel uncomfortable while working.

'Prefer' is sufficient without 'do prefer' here; 'a comfortable and then casual like stuff' is ungrammatical — use 'comfortable, casual clothes'. 'Wanna' is informal; use 'want to'. 'Any uncomfortable like' is incorrect word order; use 'feel uncomfortable'.

× Yes I do. I usually wear T-shirts often like in my daily life. Umm, today also I am wearing light T-shirts and this is very comfortable and uh, it's very simple. Uh, it's easy to wear and then choose umm, I don't need to much time to choose.

✓ Yes, I do. I usually wear T-shirts in my daily life. Today I am also wearing a light T-shirt; it is very comfortable and simple. It is easy to wear and choose, so I don't need much time to decide.

Reduce redundancy: 'usually wear T-shirts often' is repetitive; use 'usually'. 'Light T-shirts' should be 'a light T-shirt' for today's single item. 'I don't need to much time' should be 'I don't need much time' (remove 'to'). Use consistent present tense forms and clearer connectors.

× No, I don't. I as I said before, I have a lot like I always like wear like simple and then casual stuff. So I don't need to take a time a lot to choose. Umm, I always TR. I always try to choose like simple and casual stuff like it's I don't need time.

✓ No, I don't. As I said before, I usually wear simple, casual clothes, so I don't need a lot of time to choose. I always try to choose simple and casual items, so I don't need much time.

Fix articles and phrasing: 'I have a lot like' is incorrect; use 'I usually wear'. 'Take a time a lot' should be 'a lot of time' or 'much time'. Repeat unnecessary fragments removed and 'items' clarifies 'stuff'.

× Umm, not really. I would say, umm, always same. It doesn't matter. Like on weekend and week, weekdays I I'm not even shooting and then like, uh, employ the company so I can choose whatever I wear every day, so it doesn't matter.

✓ Not really. I would say I dress the same most of the time; it doesn't matter whether it's weekdays or weekends. I am not required to wear a uniform at my company, so I can choose what to wear every day.

Original is fragmented and unclear: 'always same' should be 'dress the same'; 'on weekend and week, weekdays' is confused — use 'whether it's weekdays or weekends'. 'I'm not even shooting and then like, uh, employ the company' is unintelligible; likely meant 'not required to wear a uniform at my company'. Clarify sentence structure and meaning.

× I like simple one, not like any colorful stuff. I just like uh, like black and white. Umm, it makes my impression. It makes my impression like simple and then like, uh, umm, minimalist.

✓ I like simple colors, not colorful ones. I prefer black and white. It gives the impression that I am simple and minimalist.

'I like simple one' is incorrect; use 'simple colors' or 'simple styles'. 'Makes my impression' is awkward; use 'gives the impression'. Use consistent adjective forms ('minimalist') and correct plural 'ones' for 'colors'.