Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Speak more clearly and use correct grammar and vocabulary. Start with a direct topic sentence (I like to wear...), avoid filler phrases ("you know", "I'm saying"), and keep sentences concise (max 3–4). Use correct nouns and plural/singular forms (e.g., "shorts" not "short clothes"; "winter clothes" or "a coat"). Add one specific detail about the traditional dress (describe it briefly).

例: I prefer lightweight clothes in summer and warmer clothes in winter. For example, in summer I usually wear shorts and T-shirts because it's very hot where I live. In winter I wear coats and sweaters. I also often wear my traditional outfit called the Thobe, which is a long white robe worn on special occasions.

提案: Answer directly and correct contradictions. Begin with a clear topic sentence (I prefer comfortable clothes). Avoid saying "uncomfortable" if you mean the opposite. Use one or two linked supporting details (reason and example) and a linking word (because/so).

例: I prefer comfortable, casual clothes because I spend a lot of time outdoors. For instance, I usually wear breathable sneakers and loose trousers so I can move easily during the day.

提案: Give a clear yes/no and add a concise reason with correct vocabulary. Avoid repetition and incorrect forms. Use linking words (for example/when) and one brief example of when you wear T-shirts.

例: Yes, I like wearing T-shirts, especially when I exercise or play sports. For example, I usually wear a cotton T-shirt and shorts when I go to the gym or play football.

提案: Structure your answer: start with a direct statement (No, I don't spend much time choosing clothes), then explain briefly why with clear vocabulary. Replace unclear phrases ("right equality") with "good quality" and avoid redundancy.

例: No, I don't spend much time choosing clothes because I usually buy online and compare a few options. I focus on finding good quality items, so I check reviews and only compare a couple of shops before deciding.

提案: Give a clear direct answer and explain briefly with specific details. Avoid repetition and filler words. If there is an exception (Friday), explain what is different and why.

例: No, I usually wear the same style of clothes on weekdays and weekends. However, on Fridays I wear a traditional outfit for family or religious activities, while on other days I stick to casual clothes like jeans and T-shirts.

提案: Use accurate vocabulary ("color" not "killer") and give a clear topic sentence with reasons. Provide specific, concise reasons and one example of how you use those colors (clothes or accessories).

例: I like green because it reminds me of nature and feels lively. I also like blue since it reminds me of the sky; for example, I often wear a green jacket or a light blue shirt in casual outfits.

× It depends on the summer.

✓ It depends on the season.

'Summer' is a specific season; the student likely means 'season' in general. The verb 'depends' is present tense and fine, but the noun choice is incorrect for the intended meaning. Use 'season' to match general contexts.

× I usually wear a short clothes, you know, I'm saying because the weather in my country is incredibly high.

✓ I usually wear short clothes because the weather in my country is extremely hot.

'Clothes' is plural, so 'a short clothes' is incorrect (singular article with plural noun). 'Short' should modify 'clothes' without 'a'. Also 'incredibly high' incorrectly describes temperature; use 'extremely hot'. Remove filler phrases like 'you know, I'm saying' for clarity.

× But in winter I do prefer that winter clothes.

✓ But in winter I prefer winter clothes.

The auxiliary 'do' before 'prefer' is unnecessary in a simple present affirmative sentence. 'That winter clothes' mixes demonstrative 'that' with plural noun; use 'winter clothes' or 'those winter clothes'.

× You go what I'm saying.

✓ You know what I'm saying?

The phrase 'You go what I'm saying' is ungrammatical. The correct conversational tag is 'You know what I'm saying?' which uses 'know' and places the question tag form at the end.

× But we usually I wear the traditional clothes we call Thorpe.

✓ But usually I wear the traditional clothes we call Thorpe.

Word order is incorrect: 'we usually I wear' mixes subjects. Place adverb 'usually' before the verb and keep a single subject: 'I usually wear'. Also 'the traditional clothes' is acceptable; confirm the name 'Thorpe' if intended.

× And my perspective, I do prefer wearing uncomfortable clothes 'cause I do spend a lot of time outside.

✓ From my perspective, I prefer wearing comfortable clothes because I spend a lot of time outside.

'My perspective' needs a preposition: 'from my perspective'. The student said 'uncomfortable' but context implies 'comfortable'; correct word choice matters (see original intent later). 'Do' auxiliaries are unnecessary in simple present affirmative. Use 'because' instead of informal ''cause'.

× So in I'm into I'm into the comfortable clothes.

✓ So I'm into comfortable clothes.

Repeated fragments 'I'm into' are redundant and 'the' before 'comfortable clothes' is unnecessary in general statements. Simplify to 'I'm into comfortable clothes.'

× T-shirt is my thing when I do some exercise or when I do uh sports things.

✓ T-shirts are my thing when I exercise or play sports.

Use plural 'T-shirts' for general preference. Omit 'do' before 'exercise' and 'sports things'; use 'exercise' and 'play sports'. Also 'my thing' is conversational but acceptable.

× So teaches my things and they usually wear it when they do exercise and sporty things.

✓ They usually wear T-shirts when they exercise or play sports.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'So teaches my things' makes no sense. Rephrase to a clear subject and verb: 'They usually wear T-shirts when they exercise or play sports.'

× Nowadays I do buy it from the online and I don't spend a lot of time, but I do compare.

✓ Nowadays I buy clothes online and I don't spend a lot of time, but I do compare options.

'Do buy' is unnecessary in simple present; use 'buy'. 'From the online' is incorrect preposition/article use: use 'online' or 'on the internet'. Add an object 'clothes' and clarify what is compared: 'options'.

× So comparing doesn't take from me a lot of time.

✓ Comparing doesn't take me a lot of time.

Incorrect word order 'take from me' should be 'take me' in English. Move adverbial elements to natural positions.

× But I'm focusing on the on the right equality, so I don't spend a lot of time to buy that things I'm looking for.

✓ But I focus on the right quality, so I don't spend a lot of time buying the things I'm looking for.

'Focusing on the on the' has a duplicated article. 'Equality' is the wrong word; use 'quality'. Use 'focus' or 'am focusing' (either present simple or progressive). After 'spend time', use the gerund 'buying' not 'to buy'. 'That things' should be 'the things.'

× I'm I'm the same person on weekend day, on on weekend days or on the weekend.

✓ I'm the same person on weekdays and on weekends.

Reduce repetitions. Use 'weekdays' vs 'weekends' to contrast; original phrasing 'on weekend day' is incorrect. Keep parallel plural forms.

× I do, I do. I do wear the same kind of clothes so there is no special clothes for me in different days beside one day on a Friday.

✓ I do wear the same kind of clothes, so there are no special clothes for me on different days except on Fridays.

Avoid repetitive 'I do' fillers. 'No special clothes' requires plural agreement with 'there are'. Use 'on different days' rather than 'in different days'. 'Beside' is wrong; use 'except'. 'One day on a Friday' is better as 'on Fridays' or 'except on Fridays.'

× I'm into the green killer 'cause that killer related to our nature and related to the lively things.

✓ I'm into the green color because it is related to nature and to lively things.

'Killer' is an incorrect word; student likely meant 'color'. Use 'color' and correct verb agreement: 'is related'. Use 'because' not ''cause' for formal clarity. 'Our nature' -> 'nature' and 'lively things' is vague but acceptable.

× The green color is my thing. Not to mention even the blue color where the sky has that color.

✓ Green is my favorite color. I also like blue because the sky is that color.

'The green color is my thing' is informal; better 'Green is my favorite color.' 'Not to mention even the blue color where the sky has that color' is awkward; rephrase to 'I also like blue because the sky is blue.'