Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer more concise and coherent: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details (examples or brief reasons) using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g. ‘prefer’ and ‘style’ used many times).

例: I usually wear comfortable, casual clothes because I like a minimalist look. For example, I often choose a plain T-shirt, slim jeans and simple sneakers, which are both comfortable for errands and look stylish for meeting friends.

提案: Clarify and correct language mistakes, give a clear comparison and a brief reason. Use linking words like ‘because’ and avoid awkward phrasing (‘casual coats’ is unclear).

例: I prefer comfortable, casual clothes rather than smart outfits because they don't irritate me and suit my everyday activities. For instance, I usually pick a soft shirt and jeans over formal trousers when I go out.

提案: Be more natural and avoid repetition (don’t say ‘T-shirt T-shirts’). Give one specific reason and an example to support your point, using a linking word like ‘because’ or ‘for example’.

例: Yes, I like wearing T-shirts because they are comfortable and versatile. For example, I often pair a plain T-shirt with jeans for a quick, casual look.

提案: Make the answer more precise and correct the unclear ending (‘and also kind of simple and look’). State how much time and give a specific reason or example, using linking words.

例: Yes, I usually spend about 10–15 minutes choosing an outfit, especially if I'm going out, because I want to look stylish but keep my clothes simple and coordinated.

提案: Answer directly then give one clear example. Remove filler phrasing and use linking words such as ‘however’ or ‘for example’ to show contrast between occasions.

例: Not really — I choose clothes based on the occasion rather than the day. For example, I wear casual jeans and a T-shirt for errands on weekends, but for a birthday dinner I might wear a smart-casual shirt.

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar (e.g. ‘I prefer’ not ‘prefer’ alone). List a few colors clearly and give a short reason why you like them.

例: I prefer neutral colours such as white, black, beige and brown because they suit my minimalist style and are easy to mix and match.

× Most of the time I prefer comfortable casual clothes, especially when I go out with my friends and run errands.

✓ Most of the time I prefer comfortable, casual clothes, especially when I go out with my friends and run errands.

Adjectives 'comfortable' and 'casual' both modify 'clothes' and should be separated by a comma when used coordinate; adding the comma improves clarity. Suggestion: use a comma between coordinate adjectives or reword as 'comfortable casual clothes' is acceptable in speech but punctuation helps the written sentence.

× Also with my style, I prefer minimalist.

✓ Also, in my style I prefer a minimalist approach.

The original uses 'prefer minimalist' which lacks a noun and misuses the adjective 'minimalist' without a noun. Use a noun phrase like 'a minimalist approach' or 'minimalism'. Also add a comma after 'Also' for clarity.

× It's simple but it's stylish and also up to date so that's how I style myself.

✓ It's simple but stylish and up-to-date, so that's how I style myself.

Use 'stylish' rather than 'it's stylish' for smoother coordination; 'up-to-date' should be hyphenated when used as a compound adjective before the noun or in predicative position consistency; add a comma before 'so' connecting the clauses. This makes the sentence more natural.

× I prefer wearing comfortable in casual coats because for me it's important to wear clothes that will not make me feel irritated and I prefer style that I like.

✓ I prefer wearing comfortable, casual coats because it's important to me to wear clothes that won't make me feel uncomfortable, and I prefer styles that I like.

Preposition 'in' is incorrect after 'wearing'; remove it. Use 'comfortable, casual coats' with comma for adjectives. 'Make me feel irritated' is unnatural for clothing discomfort; use 'uncomfortable'. 'I prefer style that I like' is redundant; use plural 'styles' and rephrase for clarity.

× I do like wearing T-shirt T-shirts as someone who prefer wearing comfortable casual outfits because the T-shirt is just like a simple top and you're good to go.

✓ I do like wearing T-shirts as someone who prefers comfortable, casual outfits because a T-shirt is a simple top and you're good to go.

Remove duplicate 'T-shirt T-shirts'. Subject-verb agreement: 'someone who prefers' (see next entry). Use plural 'T-shirts' for general statement. Add commas between adjectives. Use 'a T-shirt is' rather than 'the T-shirt is' for a general description.

× I do like wearing T-shirt T-shirts as someone who prefer wearing comfortable casual outfits because the T-shirt is just like a simple top and you're good to go.

✓ I do like wearing T-shirts as someone who prefers comfortable, casual outfits because a T-shirt is a simple top and you're good to go.

The relative clause 'someone who prefer' must use the third-person singular verb 'prefers'. Correct subject-verb agreement to 'prefers'.

× Yes, I always give myself time to choose what to wear, especially when I go outside because I prefer looking stylish and also kind of simple and look.

✓ Yes, I always give myself time to choose what to wear, especially when I go out, because I prefer to look stylish but kind of simple.

Use 'go out' instead of 'go outside' for dressing context. Change 'prefer looking stylish and also kind of simple and look' to 'prefer to look stylish but kind of simple' to correct verb form and sentence structure; 'prefer to look' is more natural than 'prefer looking' here.

× I don't have a specific type of style during weekdays or weekends, but I do spend my time to choose the appropriate style depending on the occasion.

✓ I don't have a specific style for weekdays or weekends, but I do take time to choose an appropriate style depending on the occasion.

'Type of style' is redundant; use 'style'. 'Spend my time to choose' is awkward—use 'take time to choose'. 'An appropriate style' is smoother than 'the appropriate style' when generalizing.

× Like is it for a casual errand or a special occasion that I would attend?

✓ For example, is it for a casual errand or for a special occasion that I will attend?

Beginning with 'Like' is colloquial and unclear in this context; replace with 'For example'. Ensure the clause is a proper question with the auxiliary 'is' and clarify future reference with 'will attend' or simply 'attend' depending on context.

× As someone who prefer minimalistic style of clothing, I prefer wearing colors that lean to neutral like white, black or brown or beige like a simple colors that I can.

✓ As someone who prefers a minimalistic style of clothing, I prefer wearing colors that lean toward neutrals like white, black, brown, or beige—simple colors that I can mix and match.

Subject-verb agreement: 'someone who prefers'. Add article 'a' before 'minimalistic style'. Use 'lean toward' rather than 'lean to'. Use plural 'neutrals'. The phrase 'like a simple colors that I can' is ungrammatical; clarify intent, e.g., 'simple colors that I can mix and match.'