Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer clearer and more grammatical. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Correct vocabulary (e.g. “kurta” not “Curtis”) and phrase structure will help. Avoid unnecessary words and keep to under five sentences.

例: I prefer modest clothes. For example, I often wear jeans or a kurta with a scarf, and sometimes traditional outfits with a patka (scarf) for special occasions.

提案: Answer directly and concisely. Use a clear topic sentence then a reason or short example linked by a connector (because/so). Remove hesitation and pronoun errors.

例: I prefer comfortable, casual clothes because they are easier to move in and suit my daily routine. For instance, I usually choose loose tops and jeans over formal suits.

提案: Give a direct response and expand slightly with a specific context using a linking word. Improve grammar (e.g. “at home” not “in a home”) and collapse redundant words.

例: Yes, I like wearing T-shirts. For example, I often wear T-shirts and pyjamas at home because they are comfortable and practical.

提案: Make the contrast clearer with linking words (but/however). Use correct verb forms and articles. Keep it concise: one sentence topic, one supporting detail with a short reason.

例: Usually I don't spend much time choosing daily clothes, but when I buy new clothes I think carefully because I want them to fit well and last long.

提案: This answer is unclear and contains many irrelevant or incorrect words. Respond directly (yes/no) and give 1–2 clear, coherent details using simple vocabulary. Remove unrelated phrases and explain contexts (work, home, going out).

例: No, I usually wear the same casual clothes on both weekdays and weekends. However, when I go out to visit relatives or attend religious places, I wear an abaya to be more formal and respectful.

提案: Use correct color terms and avoid confusing phrases. Start with a clear statement of preferred colors, then give a short reason using a linking word. Correct problematic words (e.g. “wear” instead of “use breasts”).

例: I prefer darker, neutral colors like black and brown because they look smart and are easy to match with other items.

× I'd like to wear a modest clothing like jeans and Curtis with scarf and sometimes a traditional finish a lot with the patta.

✓ I'd like to wear modest clothing like jeans and kurtis with a scarf, and sometimes a traditional outfit with a patta.

Use 'modest clothing' (uncountable) not 'a modest clothing'. Use plural 'kurtis' for multiple items. Include articles where needed: 'a scarf' and 'a traditional outfit'. 'Finish a lot with the patta' is unclear; use 'outfit with a patta' to express wearing a traditional piece. Also correct spellings (Curtis -> kurti).

× I do like with her comfortable clothes rather than smart clothing or umm, heavy clothes.

✓ I do prefer comfortable clothes rather than smart or heavy clothes.

Remove incorrect phrase 'like with her' which is ungrammatical. Use 'prefer' to express preference. 'Comfortable clothes' is correct; do not repeat 'clothing' unnecessarily. Keep parallel structure: 'smart or heavy clothes'. 'Do' can be used for emphasis but 'I prefer' is more natural here.

× I do even I wear T-shirts and pyjamas in a home.

✓ I even wear T-shirts and pyjamas at home.

Use preposition 'at' with 'home' (not 'in a home'). Remove unnecessary 'do' and reorder for natural emphasis: 'I even wear...'.

× Now usually I don't spend a lot of time to choose a clothes, but when whenever I purchase clothes I think a lot before I buy.

✓ Usually I don't spend a lot of time choosing clothes, but whenever I purchase clothes I think carefully before I buy.

Do not use 'to choose a clothes'—use the gerund 'choosing' and plural 'clothes' without 'a'. Remove redundant 'now' and 'when'. 'Think a lot' is colloquial; 'think carefully' is clearer. Maintain present habitual tense.

× No, since I have buju telti and my siblings so I wear T-shirts and pyjamas, tweezers and reboot and when I go the Motor City I wear abaya so mine can show them. Pagan humans are hiding.

✓ No. Since I live with my family and siblings, I usually wear T-shirts and pyjamas. When I go to the market/city I wear an abaya to cover myself.

Original sentence contains unclear vocabulary and sentence fragments. 'Buju telti', 'tweezers and reboot', 'mine can show them', and 'Pagan humans are hiding' are unintelligible. Interpret likely meaning: living with family, wearing casual clothes at home, wearing an abaya outside to cover. Use clear clauses, correct prepositions ('go to the city'), and proper articles ('an abaya'). Remove irrelevant or unclear phrases.

× Light dark colors, light black and brown, and in my perspective, whenever I use breasts in black, I usually look smart.

✓ I like light and dark colors, especially black and brown, and in my opinion, when I wear black I usually look smart.

Clarify 'light dark colors' to 'light and dark colors'. 'Light black' is incorrect; use 'black'. 'In my perspective' should be 'in my opinion'. 'Use breasts in black' is incorrect and likely a misphrase for 'wear black'. Use 'wear black' to describe clothing. Maintain correct verb 'wear' and word order.