Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more grammatical, concise and organized. Start with a clear topic sentence, use correct verbs and articles, avoid filler words, and give one specific example. Try: "I prefer lightweight summer clothes because they are comfortable and suitable for activities. For example, I often wear moisture-wicking shorts and a breathable T-shirt when I go to the gym or swim."

例: I prefer lightweight summer clothes because they are comfortable and great for active days. For example, I often wear moisture-wicking shorts and a breathable T-shirt when I go to the gym or swim.

提案: Answer directly and avoid repetition. Use one clear reason and a brief supporting detail with a linking word. Correct phrasing: "I prefer casual, sporty clothes because they're more comfortable and practical. For instance, they let me move freely during long shifts or while exercising."

例: I prefer casual, sporty clothes because they're more comfortable and practical. For instance, they let me move freely during long shifts or while exercising.

提案: Be specific and avoid unclear phrases. State a clear opinion and give a concrete detail about your collection or how you use T-shirts. Use linking words to connect ideas. For example: "Yes, I like T-shirts. I own many different styles and colors because I like changing my look every day."

例: Yes, I like T-shirts. I own many different styles and colors because I enjoy changing my look every day.

提案: Organize the response: give a direct answer, then explain with specific timing and reason. Correct grammar and remove fillers. For example: "Yes. Because I own many styles and colors, I usually take about five to ten minutes to choose my outfit in the morning depending on my mood and plans for the day."

例: Yes. Because I own many styles and colors, I usually take about five to ten minutes to choose my outfit in the morning depending on my mood and plans for the day.

提案: Good content but correct grammar and be concise. Give a clear contrast with a linking word and specific example of weekend activities. For example: "Yes. On weekdays I wear scrubs for my job at the hospital. On weekends I choose comfortable clothes so I can relax and do activities like jogging or shopping."

例: Yes. On weekdays I wear scrubs for my job at the hospital. On weekends I choose comfortable clothes so I can relax and do activities like jogging or shopping.

提案: Be concise and correct: state preference, give reason and a short example. Avoid vague phrasing. For instance: "I usually prefer black clothes because they look smart and match easily with other items. For example, a black shirt is quick to pair with jeans or trousers when I go out."

例: I usually prefer black clothes because they look smart and match easily with other items. For example, a black shirt is quick to pair with jeans or trousers when I go out.

× Basically, I refer wearing the summer clothes because at that time I feel so comfortable and I want to wear these clothes during my active activities like, uh, gym, swim or something like that.

✓ Basically, I prefer wearing summer clothes because at that time I feel so comfortable and I want to wear these clothes during active activities like going to the gym or swimming.

The student used 'refer wearing' which is incorrect. The correct verb is 'prefer' followed by the -ing form (prefer wearing). Also 'gym, swim' should be expressed as gerunds with verbs or nouns: 'going to the gym' and 'swimming'. These changes make verb selection and -ing usage correct and the list parallel. Grammar problem type ID: 8

× So as I mentioned before, I refer wearing the sporty clothes like the casual clothes because it is the best way for me to make my life is easier and I can enjoy every moment of my life whenever I wear some comfortable clothes like that way.

✓ As I mentioned before, I prefer wearing sporty, casual clothes because they make my life easier and I can enjoy every moment when I wear comfortable clothes.

Replace 'refer wearing' with 'prefer wearing' (verb + -ing). 'Sporty clothes like the casual clothes' is redundant; combine as 'sporty, casual clothes'. 'It is the best way for me to make my life is easier' has wrong structure; use 'they make my life easier'. Simplify 'whenever I wear some comfortable clothes like that way' to 'when I wear comfortable clothes'. These corrections fix verb usage and sentence structure. Grammar problem type ID: 8

× So yes, I do, I have the phone collection of T-shirt collars, uh, because that's everyday is different.

✓ Yes, I do. I have a large collection of T-shirts because every day is different.

'phone collection' is wrong word choice; likely 'a huge/large collection'. Use 'a large collection of T-shirts'. 'everyday is different' should be 'every day is different' (two words) when meaning each day. This fixes quantifier/article and word choice errors. Grammar problem type ID:14

× So that's why I try to make a difference, uh, especially with my clothes when I wear these things like that.

✓ That's why I try to make a difference, especially with my clothes when I wear them.

Unnecessary filler 'these things like that' is unclear. Replace with the pronoun 'them'. This fixes preposition/pronoun and clarity; simplifies the sentence. Grammar problem type ID:11

× Yes, definitely yes. So I have many kinds of clothes like casual and formal and with varieties of colors.

✓ Yes, definitely. I have many kinds of clothes, such as casual and formal, in a variety of colors.

'with varieties of colors' is incorrect; use 'a variety of colors' or 'various colors'. Also remove redundant 'yes' and add commas for clarity. Grammar problem type ID:14

× So that's why I have to choose the close break carefully in the morning, especially in my it depends on my moods.

✓ So that's why I have to choose my clothes carefully in the morning; it depends on my mood.

The sentence has wrong words ('close break') and poor structure. Replace with 'choose my clothes carefully'. 'it depends on my moods' should be 'it depends on my mood'. Use a semicolon or split into two clauses for clarity. Grammar problem type ID:26

× So that's why whenever I go for work, I have to choose at least 5 minutes or 10 minutes. It depends on.

✓ So whenever I go to work, I have to take at least five to ten minutes to choose my clothes; it depends.

'go for work' should be 'go to work'. The idea 'choose at least 5 minutes or 10 minutes' is wrongly ordered; correct is 'take at least five to ten minutes'. Spell out numbers in formal speech optionally. Add 'to choose my clothes' for clarity. Grammar problem type ID:26

× So in the weekday I normally wear the formal clothes because I have to work in the hospital and that's why I have to wear the scrub all the time.

✓ On weekdays I normally wear formal clothes because I work at the hospital, and that's why I have to wear scrubs all the time.

Use 'On weekdays' (plural) rather than 'in the weekday'. 'work in the hospital' is acceptable but 'work at the hospital' is more natural. 'the scrub' should be plural 'scrubs' (specific uniform). Correct article and noun number. Grammar problem type ID:22

× Whereas in the the in the weekend I always use the comfortable clothes because that can help me to erase my days and I can get easily to do some my own activity.

✓ On weekends I always wear comfortable clothes because they help me relax and allow me to do my own activities easily.

Remove redundant 'the the in the'. Use 'On weekends' and 'wear' rather than 'use' for clothes. 'erase my days' is wrong; intended meaning is 'relax'. 'get easily to do some my own activity' should be 'do my own activities easily'. This fixes conjunction/word choice and sentence flow. Grammar problem type ID:16

× So normally I refer wearing the black clothes because at that time the this cloth is usually to, uh, connect with any office and I feel comfortable to wear that when I go outside.

✓ Normally I prefer wearing black clothes because they usually match any office outfit and I feel comfortable wearing them when I go outside.

Replace 'refer wearing' with 'prefer wearing' (verb + -ing). 'the this cloth' is incorrect; use 'they' or 'black clothes'. 'is usually to connect with any office' is unclear; use 'usually match any office outfit'. Use plural pronouns 'they/them' for clothes. Corrects verb form and pronoun agreement. Grammar problem type ID:8