Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and clear: start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid unclear phrases and word choice errors (e.g., "millions" and "themes"). Focus on relevant reasons (comfort, climate, style).

例: I prefer comfortable clothes, especially T-shirts and jeans. For example, I choose cotton T-shirts in summer because they are breathable and suit my casual style, so I can wear them almost anywhere.

提案: Clarify meaning and avoid confusing expressions. Start with a clear preference, then give two concise reasons with linking words (because, so). Replace awkward phrases like "choke comfortably" with clear explanations (e.g., "feel relaxed").

例: I prefer comfortable casual clothes because they help me feel relaxed and confident. For instance, in T-shirts I can talk freely and socialize, whereas smart clothes sometimes make me feel stiff.

提案: Be natural and avoid filler words. Give one clear reason and one specific example or detail. Use linking words like "because" and "also" to connect ideas and keep the answer to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I like wearing T-shirts because they suit my personality and are very comfortable. I usually pair them with jeans for a casual, practical outfit.

提案: Organize the answer: give a direct response (Yes/No) then explain with specific details. Avoid unclear time expressions and grammar errors. Use linking phrases like "because" and "so" to show cause and effect.

例: No, I don't spend much time choosing clothes because I have a set of four or five T-shirts I wear regularly. For example, I plan outfits for the week, which saves time in the mornings.

提案: Avoid repetition and be more specific. Start with a clear general statement, then give an exception with a specific example and use a linking word like "however" or "but" to connect ideas.

例: Usually I wear similar casual clothes on both weekdays and weekends. However, for special occasions or family events I wear smarter clothes, such as a shirt and trousers.

提案: Be precise and grammatical: state your preferences clearly and explain reasons with specific examples. Avoid vague or incomplete sentences; tie ideas together with linking words like "also" and "sometimes".

例: I mainly prefer black because it suits my complexion and is easy to match. I also wear blue or cream sometimes, and at family functions I follow the dress code if there is one.

× I like to wear the comfortable clothes as I can.

✓ I like to wear comfortable clothes whenever I can.

The article 'the' is unnecessary before 'comfortable clothes' and the phrase 'as I can' is awkward. Use the adverb 'whenever' to indicate frequency and remove the definite article to make the noun phrase general.

× Millions wear the T-shirts and themes which suits my personality as well as I also feel comfort in it as I can wear it in summers.

✓ I wear T-shirts and themes that suit my personality, and I also feel comfortable in them during the summer.

The original used 'Millions' incorrectly and mixed singular/plural pronouns. 'Themes' is unclear but kept; 'which suits' should be 'that suit' to agree with plural antecedent. Use 'comfortable' (adjective) with 'feel', and 'them' to refer to plural items. 'During the summer' is a clearer time phrase.

× I can go to any place with by wearing it.

✓ I can go anywhere while wearing them.

The preposition sequence 'with by' is incorrect. 'Anywhere' is more natural than 'any place', and 'while wearing them' correctly links the action of wearing to going places. Use 'them' to match plural clothes.

× I like to wear comfortable clothes as I can be comfortable in a place I can choke comfortably with everyone.

✓ I like to wear comfortable clothes so I can feel at ease and interact comfortably with everyone.

The phrase 'as I can be comfortable in a place I can choke' is ungrammatical and 'choke' is incorrect word choice. Replace with 'so I can feel at ease' and 'interact comfortably' to convey the intended meaning. Also avoid repeating 'comfortable' redundantly.

× I don't feel any hesitation as in smart clothes I look professional but I am not able to deliver that my speech that frequently.

✓ I don't feel any hesitation in comfortable clothes. In smart clothes I look professional, but I am not able to speak as naturally or frequently.

The original has poor sentence structure and wrong word order ('deliver that my speech that frequently'). Break into two sentences and rephrase to 'speak as naturally or frequently' to convey the intended meaning.

× So that's why we like to wear comfortable clothes.

✓ So that's why I like to wear comfortable clothes.

The student switches from 'I' to 'we' inconsistently. Keep a consistent first-person singular 'I' to match the rest of the response.

× Of course, I like to wear T-shirts as it suits my personality.

✓ Of course, I like to wear T-shirts because they suit my personality.

Use 'because' instead of 'as' to avoid ambiguity. 'T-shirts' is plural, so use 'they suit' not 'it suits'.

× Moreover, I also feel comfortable in it.

✓ Moreover, I also feel comfortable in them.

Replace singular pronoun 'it' with plural 'them' to agree with 'T-shirts'.

× Uh, rather than T-shirts, I also like to wear jeans with it.

✓ I also like to wear jeans with T-shirts.

Use 'with T-shirts' to make the partnership clear and use plural agreement. 'Rather than T-shirts' contradicted previous sentence; rephrase to 'I also like to wear jeans with T-shirts.'

× No, I thought like lot of time choosing clothes as I have 4:00 to 5:00 T-shirts that I wear regularly and then tie up the schedule like Monday would be a this and on Tuesday I will wear this T-shirts.

✓ No, I don't spend a lot of time choosing clothes because I have four or five T-shirts that I wear regularly, and I plan my week so Monday I wear one, Tuesday another, and so on.

The original incorrectly used past tense 'thought' and awkward time expressions. Use present tense 'don't spend' to match habitual action. '4:00 to 5:00' was unclear and likely meant 'four or five'. Correct plural agreement 'T-shirts' and simplify the scheduling explanation.

× So it saves me a lot of time and I do another stuff rather than spending a lot of time in choosing clothes.

✓ So it saves me a lot of time and I do other things instead of spending a lot of time choosing clothes.

Use 'other things' not 'another stuff', and 'instead of' is the correct prepositional phrase. Remove unnecessary 'in' before 'choosing clothes.'

× Usually I don't wear different clothes on weekdays or anything, but on any special occasion I like to wear some professional clothes.

✓ Usually I don't wear different clothes on weekdays or weekends, but on special occasions I like to wear professional clothes.

Clarify 'weekdays or anything' to 'weekdays or weekends.' Use plural 'occasions' and remove 'some' which is unnecessary. 'Professional clothes' suffices.

× Uh like shirts or any professional clothes in weekends.

✓ For example, I might wear shirts or other professional clothes on weekends for special events.

The fragment lacked a clear subject and contained wrong preposition 'in weekends.' Rephrase into a full sentence with correct 'on weekends' and clarify purpose.

× But usually I don't like to wear different clothes on weekdays or weekends.

✓ But usually I don't like to wear different clothes for weekdays and weekends.

Slight rewording to make the contrast clearer: 'for weekdays and weekends' rather than repeating 'on'.

× I like to wear black clothes as it suits my skin.

✓ I like to wear black clothes because they suit my skin tone.

Use 'because' to explain reason and 'they suit' for plural agreement. 'Skin tone' is the correct collocation.

× Moreover, sometimes I also wear blue or cream colour which are really famous here.

✓ Sometimes I also wear blue or cream, which are popular here.

'Colour' after 'cream' is unnecessary; use the adjectives 'blue or cream' as colors. 'Which are really famous' is unnatural; use 'popular.' Ensure plural agreement with 'are.'

× And sometimes the dress codes in our family functions so that's why we wait.

✓ Sometimes our family events have dress codes, so we follow them.

The original is incomplete and unclear. Make a full sentence: 'our family events have dress codes' and 'we follow them' explains why the speaker waits or chooses certain clothes.