Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clearer and correct basic vocabulary and grammar. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one specific example. Avoid repetition and correct word forms (e.g., "suit", "blouses"). Use one linking word to connect the reason.

例: I usually wear smart, classic clothes because I work as a teacher and go to university. For example, I often wear a suit or a blouse with trousers so I feel comfortable and look professional while teaching.

提案: Give a concise direct answer, correct tense and pronouns, and use a linking word to clarify contrast (e.g., "however" or "but"). Limit to two sentences: one topic sentence and one supporting detail with a specific situation.

例: I prefer both, but for different occasions. For example, I wear smart clothes for work and university, but I wear comfortable casual clothes on weekends when I go out with friends and family.

提案: Good direct answer and reason. Improve precision (replace "pressable" with "breathable" or "stretchy") and avoid minor awkward phrasing. Keep to two sentences and use a linking word like "so" or "therefore".

例: Yes, I like wearing T-shirts because they are comfortable and allow easy movement. Therefore, I often wear them for casual outings or when I exercise, and they are easy to style with jeans.

提案: This answer is unclear and contains many mistakes. Give a clear topic sentence explaining whether you spend time choosing clothes, then one specific reason with corrected vocabulary (e.g., "my size is rare" or "my size is hard to find"). Use a linking word (because) and keep to two sentences.

例: Yes, I spend a lot of time choosing clothes because my size is hard to find. For example, I used to exercise a lot and now my measurements are unusual, so I need to try many items to find a good fit.

提案: Answer directly and organize with a linking word (for example / whereas). Correct vocabulary (e.g., "to concerts", "dresses", "do full makeup"). Limit to two sentences and give one clear contrasting example for weekdays vs weekends.

例: Yes, it depends on where I am going. For example, I dress up and do full makeup for concerts or formal events, whereas I wear casual clothes when I go to parks.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence naming preferred colors, then one clear reason using precise vocabulary (e.g., "fresh", "light"). Avoid filler words and keep to two sentences. Use a linking word like "because".

例: I prefer bright colors because they feel fresh and light. For example, I often wear light colors in hot weather because they feel cooler and more comfortable.

× I prefer to wear smart classic clothes because I work as a teacher and attend university every day.

✓ I prefer to wear smart, classic clothes because I work as a teacher and attend university every day.

The original sentence lacks a comma between coordinate adjectives 'smart' and 'classic'. This is an article/wording clarity issue: add a comma to separate equal adjectives describing 'clothes'. Suggestion: use punctuation to separate adjectives that modify the noun equally.

× For example, I usually wear a suite or a smart Blues or trousers to feel comfortable and to look professional while teaching and studying.

✓ For example, I usually wear a suit or smart blouses or trousers to feel comfortable and to look professional while teaching and studying.

Errors: 'suite' should be 'suit' (wrong word form) and 'Blues' should be 'blouses' (incorrect capitalization and form). This is an adjective/noun correctness issue. Suggestion: use correct noun spellings and lowercase common nouns.

× Uh, I prefer both of them because I wear smart clothes while working and attending the university and also I were comfortable casual clothes when at the weekends when I go out with my friends and my family.

✓ Uh, I prefer both of them because I wear smart clothes while working and attending university, and I also wear comfortable casual clothes on weekends when I go out with my friends and family.

Errors: 'were' is incorrect past tense; should be present 'wear' to match habitual action. 'at the weekends' is nonstandard; use 'on weekends'. Remove redundant 'the' before 'university'. Suggestion: use simple present for habitual actions and correct prepositions.

× Yes, I like wearing T-shirts because they are comfortable and easy to move in.

✓ Yes, I like wearing T-shirts because they are comfortable and easy to move in.

No grammatical correction needed; sentence is correct. Included to confirm no change is required.

× I often wear them for casual outings or when I exercise since the fabric is pressable and they are simple to style with jeans.

✓ I often wear them for casual outings or when I exercise since the fabric is breathable and they are simple to style with jeans.

'Pressable' is incorrect in this context; likely meant 'breathable' or 'washable'. This is an incorrect adjective choice. Suggestion: choose adjectives that accurately describe T-shirt fabric properties (breathable, stretchy, lightweight).

× Yes it's hard to choose close to me because my size is leg like I were exercise and when I was it's rare and I can't find my size so so that's why I need to spend more time.

✓ Yes, it's hard to choose clothes for me because my size is large when I exercise, and it is rare that I can find my size, so I need to spend more time choosing.

The original has many structure and word choice errors: 'close' should be 'clothes'; 'leg like I were exercise' is unintelligible — interpreted as 'large when I exercise'; tense and pronoun errors ('were','was') need correction. This is a sentence structure problem; rewrite using clear clauses and correct verbs. Suggestion: simplify: 'It's hard to choose clothes because my size is uncommon, so I need more time.'

× Yes, it depends where I'm going to.

✓ Yes, it depends on where I'm going.

'Depends where I'm going to' is nonstandard. 'Depend on' is the correct verb+preposition, and avoid trailing 'to' after 'going' when followed by a clause. Suggestion: use 'it depends on where I'm going.'

× For example, if weekends I go to the teachers or concerts I try to wear umm, dress dresses and make full makeup.

✓ For example, on weekends if I go to theatres or concerts I try to wear dresses and apply full makeup.

Multiple errors: 'if weekends' should be 'on weekends'; 'teachers' likely intended 'theatres'; 'dress dresses' is redundant; 'make full makeup' should be 'apply full makeup'. This is mainly article/word choice errors. Suggestion: use correct nouns and collocations: 'wear dresses' and 'apply makeup.'

× Uh, if I go to parks I choose like just uh, casual clothes.

✓ Uh, if I go to parks I just choose casual clothes.

'Choose like just uh, casual clothes' contains filler words and awkward word order. Simplify and place adverb 'just' before verb for clarity. Suggestion: remove fillers and use natural word order: 'I just choose casual clothes.'

× I choose bright colors because it gives a sense of, uh, freshness and the clearness and it's, umm, it's cooler when it's hot outside.

✓ I choose bright colors because they give a sense of freshness and clarity, and they feel cooler when it's hot outside.

Errors: subject-verb mismatch ('it gives' should be 'they give' to match 'colors'); 'the clearness' is unnatural—use 'clarity'; repetition of 'it's' and fillers should be removed. This is an adjective/adverb and pronoun agreement issue. Suggestion: match plural subjects with plural verbs and use concise vocabulary.