Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clearer and more natural: start with a direct topic sentence, correct word choices (e.g., "dresses" not "address"), reduce repetition, and give one specific reason with a brief example. Keep it under 4–5 sentences and use a linking word when adding detail.

例: I like wearing dresses, especially in summer. They keep me cool and the light fabric feels comfortable, so I often choose a cotton sundress when I go out. For example, last weekend I wore a floral dress to a café and felt both comfortable and feminine.

提案: Improve grammar and word choice, be more specific about occasions and use linking words (e.g., "however", "whereas"). Replace vague phrases like "going to class" with precise examples. Limit to 3–4 sentences.

例: It depends on the occasion. I usually wear comfortable, casual clothes for studying at the library or meeting friends; however, I choose smart clothes for presentations or interviews to look more professional.

提案: Make sentences concise and correct collocations ("breathable" not "feel like breathable"). Avoid repetition and clarify the last point about confidence. Use one linking word to add the benefit.

例: Yes, I like wearing T-shirts because Malaysia is very hot. T-shirts are breathable and help me stay cool, and because they are simple I feel more confident when I dress casually.

提案: Fix grammar (plural/singular, verb forms) and complete the final sentence. Give a clear contrast using a linking word like "but" or "however" and provide one specific example of when you spend more time.

例: It depends. I usually spend about ten minutes choosing an outfit, but for simple activities like going to class or a café I just pick something comfortable. However, I spend more time planning my clothes for parties or exams presentations.

提案: Be more direct: state your main point in the first sentence, avoid hesitations, correct tense and phrasing, and give a brief reason with an example. Use a linking word to connect reason and example.

例: Not really — I keep a consistent, girly style all week because it makes me feel comfortable. For example, I often wear skirts and pastel tops both on weekdays and weekends since they reflect my personality.

提案: Improve grammar and cohesion: use a clear topic sentence, explain the influence briefly and contrast with a practical choice (black) using a linking word like "however". Finish the thought about when you choose black.

例: I like pink — I have liked it since childhood because watching Barbie influenced my preference. However, I also wear black often because it is practical and easy to match for work or formal occasions.

× I like to address, especially during summer because I think by wearing those kind of clothes, it's flattened by still so much and it's also makes me look more feminine.

✓ I like to wear dresses, especially during summer, because I think that wearing those kinds of clothes keeps me cool and also makes me look more feminine.

Original sentence used incorrect verb 'address' instead of 'wear dresses' and mixed forms 'by wearing' and awkward passive 'it's flattened by still so much'. Also 'those kind of' should be 'those kinds of' or 'that kind of'. Suggested correction uses correct verb forms and noun plurals and fixes word order to express cause and effect clearly. Suggestions: use 'wear' for clothing verbs; use 'those kinds of' or 'that kind of'; express effects with 'keeps me cool' or 'makes me look'. Use simpler clause structure (because + clause).

× And I also love how, uh, the, how fluid the dress is and it's very cute to wear on daily life.

✓ I also love how fluid dresses are, and they are cute to wear in daily life.

Original had article and reference problems ('the, how fluid the dress is') and 'on daily life' is incorrect preposition/phrase. Correction pluralizes 'dress' to match general statement and uses 'in daily life'. Suggestions: for general statements about types, use plural nouns (dresses) and 'in daily life' or 'everyday'.

× It depends on the occasional.

✓ It depends on the occasion.

The word 'occasional' is an adjective; the correct noun is 'occasion'. Use 'depends on the occasion' to indicate it varies by event. Suggestion: choose noun forms after 'depends on'.

× So I would wear comfortable and casual clothes when I'm just going to study at the library or even outings with my friends.

✓ So I would wear comfortable, casual clothes when I'm just going to study at the library or when I go out with my friends.

Original used 'going to study' which is acceptable but 'or even outings with my friends' is incorrectly formed; 'outings' is a noun and needs a verb phrase. Correction uses parallel verb structures 'going to study' and 'go out' and commas for adjectives. Suggestion: keep parallel structures and use verb phrases for activities.

× But I wear smart clothes for any important occasion like going to class or more kind of professional event.

✓ But I wear smart clothes for important occasions, like going to class or for more professional events.

Original 'more kind of professional event' is ungrammatical. Correction uses plural 'occasions' and parallel prepositional phrases 'like... or for ... events'. Suggestion: use parallel prepositions and pluralize when speaking generally.

× Yeah, of course, I like to wear T-shirt, especially in Malaysia, the weather is really hot and when I wear when I'm wearing T-shirts, it makes me feel like breathable and it's also keep me from getting hotter easily, hot easily and also more confident wearing those layers clothes.

✓ Yeah, of course, I like to wear T-shirts, especially in Malaysia because the weather is really hot. When I wear T-shirts, I feel more comfortable and they help prevent me from getting hot easily; I also feel more confident wearing those layers of clothes.

Multiple errors: 'T-shirt' needs plural 'T-shirts' for general statements; repetition 'when I wear when I'm wearing' is redundant; 'feel like breathable' is incorrect — use 'feel more comfortable'; 'it's also keep me' wrong verb form; 'layers clothes' needs 'layers of clothes'. Correction fixes plurality, verb forms, and phrase choices. Suggestion: avoid repetition, use plural for general habits, use correct verb forms after 'they' or 'it'.

× It depends, I usually spend about 10 minute to just to choose my clothes.

✓ It depends. I usually spend about 10 minutes just to choose my clothes.

Use plural 'minutes' for more than one minute; remove duplicate 'to'. Also split into two sentences for clarity. Suggestion: check plural forms for time expressions and avoid duplicated words.

× But when I'm just going out for a simple thing like going to classes or even eat at the cafe, I would just wear anything I can see and something that comfortable and.

✓ But when I'm just going out for something simple, like going to classes or eating at a cafe, I would just wear anything I can find and something that is comfortable.

Original 'eat at the cafe' needed gerund 'eating' for parallelism; 'anything I can see' should be 'anything I can find'; 'something that comfortable and.' missing 'is' and extra 'and'. Correction provides correct verb forms and completes the adjective clause. Suggestion: maintain parallel verb forms and include 'is' in adjective clauses.

× And I wore it consistently, especially during weekends, because I feel most comfortable in that kind of clothes and I feel like that's me.

✓ And I wear it consistently, especially on weekends, because I feel most comfortable in that kind of clothing and I feel like that's me.

Mix of past 'wore' and present 'feel' creates tense inconsistency; use present 'wear' to match habitual action. Use 'on weekends' (idiomatic) and 'that kind of clothing' (singular 'kind' takes singular 'clothing' or 'those kinds of clothes'). Suggestion: use present tense for habits and choose consistent noun phrases.

× I personally like a pink colour, I've been liking it since my childhood because I really love to watch Barbie and it influence me to like more of those colour.

✓ I personally like pink; I have liked it since my childhood because I loved watching Barbie and it influenced me to like that colour more.

'Like a pink colour' is odd—use 'like pink'. 'I've been liking' is unnatural for states; use 'have liked'. 'It influence' wrong verb form; use past 'influenced' to match 'since my childhood' context. 'those colour' incorrect plural/ demonstrative; use 'that colour'. Suggestion: use stative verbs in simple or present perfect ('have liked'), match verb tense for influence, and use correct demonstratives.

× But of course I would wear something like black because it's more comfortable in kind of clothes and but personally I would choose.

✓ But of course I would wear something black because it's more comfortable for that kind of clothing, and personally I would choose it.

Original had awkward phrasing 'something like black' and 'more comfortable in kind of clothes'. Correction uses 'something black' and 'for that kind of clothing' and completes the final clause with 'it'. Suggestion: use 'something black' for clothing colour, 'for that kind of clothing', and ensure sentences are complete.