Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and consistent. Start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition and contradictory statements (you said formal then casual).

例: I prefer wearing casual clothes because they suit the hot climate in my country. For example, lightweight cotton shirts and shorts keep me cool and comfortable during the long, hot summers.

提案: Give a clear direct answer then support it with specific reasons. Use linking words (because, so, therefore) and avoid vague or incomplete phrases. Keep to 2–4 sentences max.

例: I prefer comfortable clothes because they allow me to move freely and stay energetic throughout the day. For example, wearing breathable trousers and a loose shirt helps me feel less tired during long walks or work.

提案: Answer directly and clearly, then add a specific condition. Reduce filler words (uh, um) and repetitive phrases. Use one linking phrase (for example, in summer) to connect your reason.

例: Yes, I do. I usually wear T-shirts in summer because they are light and breathable. For example, I prefer cotton T-shirts when temperatures rise because they help me stay cool.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence (No, I don't), then explain exceptions using linking words (but, however, when). Provide one concrete example of a situation where you choose carefully.

例: No, I don't usually spend much time choosing clothes. However, when I go to a wedding or a party I pick more fashionable outfits; for instance, I will choose a smart shirt and trousers for a family wedding.

提案: Provide a direct answer (Yes/No/It depends) and then give clear contrasting examples for weekdays and weekends using linking words such as whereas or while. Keep sentences short and focused.

例: It depends on my activities: on weekdays I usually wear my college uniform or smart clothes for classes, whereas on weekends I prefer comfortable casual clothes to relax with my family.

提案: Be concise and give a clear reason for your preference. Avoid filler words and repetition. Use one linking phrase to explain why a colour suits you and, if possible, add a short example of an item you wear.

例: I like black clothes because they flatter my complexion and look smart. For example, I often wear a black shirt or jacket because it suits my face shape and is easy to match with other items.

× Actually I would like to wear formal clothes as they are more comfortable.

✓ Actually, I like to wear formal clothes because they are more comfortable.

The original uses 'would like to' which implies a conditional or polite preference; simple present 'like' is appropriate to state general preference. Also 'as' is acceptable but 'because' is clearer. Add comma after 'Actually' for natural style.

× And in my country, the temperature of my country is it's really hot, hotter, so I feel comfortable while wearing the casual clothes and.

✓ In my country it is really hot, so I feel more comfortable wearing casual clothes.

The original repeats 'my country' and mixes structures ('is it's', 'hot, hotter') causing redundancy and ungrammatical phrasing. Simplify to 'it is really hot' and use 'more comfortable wearing' as correct verb pattern. Remove trailing 'and'.

× Usually I used to wear comfortable clothes as they are good for my health as well and this evening comfortable.

✓ Usually I wear comfortable clothes because they are good for my health and make me feel comfortable.

'Used to' indicates a past habitual action; here the speaker means a habitual present action, so simple present 'I wear' is correct. The phrase 'this evening comfortable' is unclear; replace with 'make me feel comfortable' to express effect.

× Energetic, more and more energetic and even. I'm happy and fit all the time and they also.

✓ They make me feel more energetic; I'm happy and fit all the time when I wear them.

Original sentence fragments and unclear pronoun reference ('they also') create incoherence. Combine into a complete sentence showing cause and effect and clarify 'they' refers to comfortable clothes.

× You, yeah, of course, uh, I like to wear T-shirt, but, uh, it depends on the weather condition, uh, as, uh, if the summertime is there, then I used to wear T-shirts as they keep my body, uh, energetic and more comfortable

✓ Yes, of course, I like to wear T-shirts, but it depends on the weather. In summer, I wear T-shirts because they keep my body comfortable and energetic.

Use plural 'T-shirts' for general statements. 'Used to' wrongly implies past habit; use simple present 'I wear' for current habitual actions. 'Summertime is there' is awkward; use 'in summer'. Simplify 'weather condition' to 'weather' and correct word order.

× And, uh, as due to temperature, due to the high rise, rising of temperature in summers, hot summers does.

✓ Also, because temperatures rise in the hot summer, I prefer lighter clothes.

Original contains repetition and ungrammatical fragment ('hot summers does'). Use 'because' and a clear clause 'temperatures rise in the hot summer' and state the consequence 'I prefer lighter clothes'.

× Basically, I, I not used to spend lot of times while choosing the clothes as whenever it, it depends on the situation or the as, as whenever I'm going to any party or something like that, any marriage.

✓ Basically, I don't usually spend a lot of time choosing clothes; it depends on the situation, for example, when I go to a party or a wedding.

'I not used to' is incorrect; use 'I don't usually' for habitual negative. Use 'a lot of time' (singular) and simplify repetition. 'Any marriage' should be 'a wedding' or 'a marriage' depending on meaning.

× And then I used to wear fashionable clothes and it and, uh, when I'm in at home alone and then I used to wear light clothes, which gives comfort to.

✓ Then I wear fashionable clothes for events, and when I am at home alone I wear light clothes that are comfortable.

Replace 'used to' with simple present 'I wear' for habitual present actions. Remove extra filler words and make 'which gives comfort to' into 'that are comfortable' for grammatical correctness.

× Not like that. It depends on the again, I would like to say it depends on the situation.

✓ Not really. It depends again on the situation.

Original is repetitive and awkward. Use 'Not really' as natural short negation and concise phrasing 'It depends again on the situation.' Maintain present tense.

× As on weekends we spend a lot of time with with our family. Then I used to wear comfortable clothes and whenever I am, there are no, no weekdays when I am working something somewhere or I'm going to college, then I used to wear college dresses.

✓ On weekends we spend a lot of time with our family, so I wear comfortable clothes. On weekdays, when I am working or going to college, I wear more formal or uniform clothes.

Remove repetition and incorrect 'used to' for present habits; use simple present 'I wear'. 'College dresses' is unclear in English; clarify as 'more formal or uniform clothes'. Ensure proper article use and cohesive sentences.

× Uh, if I talk, talk about colours, there are many colours, uh, and uh, people used to choose the colours according to their wish.

✓ If I talk about colours, there are many, and people choose colours according to their preference.

Remove redundant 'talk, talk' and 'used to' (past habit) replaced with simple present 'choose'. 'According to their wish' is better phrased as 'according to their preference'.

× So I like the black colour, how much as it suits to my, uh, face, face cut and also it, it suits to my body as I'm a bit, uh, white and uh, it, I look, I, I like to wear black.

✓ So I like the colour black because it suits my face shape and body; I am a bit fair, and I feel I look good in black.

'How much as it suits to my face' is ungrammatical. Use 'because it suits my face shape and body'. 'White' to describe skin tone should be 'fair'. Remove repeated fillers and use clear clause 'I feel I look good in black'.