Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Reduce repetition, use clearer sentence structure and linking words. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repeating phrases like “I can do” and use correct collocations (e.g., “at a party” not “in a party”).

例: I prefer comfortable clothes, such as T-shirts and sweatpants, because they help me relax and concentrate at home. However, when I go to a party I usually choose smarter outfits, like a shirt and blazer, to look more presentable.

提案: Make your main point concise and explain the reason clearly. Use a logical connector (because/so) and avoid unclear phrases like “regenerate my with myself.” Give a specific example to support your reason.

例: I prefer comfortable clothes because they make me feel relaxed and more productive. For example, I often wear a T-shirt and jeans when studying, which helps me focus for longer periods.

提案: Keep sentences short and correct grammar mistakes. Use one clear reason and a brief example. Avoid repeating phrases like “in T-shirts.”

例: Yes, I like wearing T-shirts. For example, I usually wear a soft cotton T-shirt when relaxing at home because it is comfortable and suits my casual style.

提案: Organize your answer: state clearly how much time you spend, then give 1–2 specific reasons and examples. Correct collocations (e.g., “choose clothes,” “a specific outfit,” “at a party”). Avoid unfinished sentences.

例: Yes, I spend quite a lot of time choosing clothes because I like to match my outfit to the occasion. For example, I pick a formal suit for parties, while for weddings I often choose a traditional or more elegant outfit.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence then one specific contrast with a linking word (while/on the other hand). Use correct phrasing (e.g., “on weekdays” not “in my weekdays”).

例: Yes. On weekdays, when I go to university, I usually wear smart-casual clothes like a shirt and chinos; on weekends, however, I prefer relaxed clothes such as T-shirts and joggers.

提案: Make one clear point and support it with a brief reason. Use natural expressions like “I prefer black” and avoid repeating “colour.” You can mention one example of when you choose black.

例: I prefer black clothes because they are slimming and easy to match. For example, I often wear a black shirt to interviews because it looks neat and professional.

× I like to wear comfortable clothes such as T-shirts and pajamas because I think in comfortable clothes I can do I can do work with more energy.

✓ I like to wear comfortable clothes such as T-shirts and pajamas because when I wear comfortable clothes I can work with more energy.

Incorrect use of 'in' and a repeated fragment 'I can do I can do' create ungrammatical present-tense expression. Replace 'in comfortable clothes' with 'when I wear comfortable clothes' to show the condition and remove the repeated phrase. This keeps the present tense and clarifies meaning.

× And for example, I usually wear casual clothes in my home and whenever I want to go outside in a party, I do prefer smart clothes.

✓ For example, I usually wear casual clothes at home, and whenever I go to a party I prefer smart clothes.

Redundant conjunction 'And for example' and incorrect preposition 'in my home' and 'in a party' cause awkwardness. Use 'For example' to introduce an example, 'at home' for location, 'go to a party' and omit unnecessary 'do' in preference statement.

× I do prefer comfortable clothes because whenever I feel more comfortable I regenerate my with myself and work with more energy.

✓ I prefer comfortable clothes because when I feel comfortable I recover and work with more energy.

Unnecessary emphatic 'do prefer' is acceptable but awkward here. 'Regenerate my with myself' is ungrammatical and unclear. Use 'recover' or 'recharge' to express regaining energy. Keep present simple 'I prefer' to match habitual action.

× Yes, I do wear T-shirts. Whenever I am at my home spending my leisure time, I wore I wear T-shirts because in T-shirts I feel more comfortable and in T-shirts I think I look more cozy.

✓ Yes, I wear T-shirts. Whenever I am at home spending my leisure time, I wear T-shirts because I feel more comfortable and I think I look cozier in them.

Mixed tenses and repetition: 'wore I wear' mixes past and present. Use present simple 'I wear' for habitual action. Use 'at home' not 'at my home', and 'cozier' (comparative adjective) and 'in them' to refer to T-shirts.

× Yes, I spend a lot lot of time in choosing clothes because I am very choosy kind of person and I want to wear a specific clothes on a specific occasion.

✓ Yes, I spend a lot of time choosing clothes because I am a very choosy person and I want to wear specific clothes on specific occasions.

Remove duplicated 'lot' and incorrect preposition 'in choosing' (use gerund directly 'choosing clothes'). 'A very choosy kind of person' is wordy; use 'a very choosy person'. 'A specific clothes' is wrong—'clothes' is plural, so use 'specific clothes' and plural 'occasions' for general statements.

× Such as whenever I want to go in a party I do prefer formal clothes but whenever I want to go any wedding occasion I prefer more.

✓ For example, whenever I want to go to a party I prefer formal clothes, but for wedding occasions I prefer something more formal.

Use 'go to a party' not 'go in a party'. 'I do prefer' is unnecessary. 'Go any wedding occasion' is ungrammatical; say 'for wedding occasions'. Clarify 'prefer more' by specifying 'something more formal'.

× Yes, as I am a student in my weekdays I go to university so I prefer more formal clothes in my weekdays and on weekends as I am free and I prefer simple casual clothes such as T-shirts and pajamas.

✓ Yes. On weekdays, because I am a student and go to university, I prefer more formal clothes. On weekends, when I am free, I prefer simple casual clothes such as T-shirts and pajamas.

Original sentence is run-on and awkwardly ordered. Break into two sentences and place time expressions ('On weekdays', 'On weekends') at the beginning for clarity. Use 'when I am free' for reason and avoid repeating 'in my weekdays'.

× I prefer black colour clothes because in my perspective I look slim in black colour clothes and black colour is eye-catching colour so I do prefer black over other colours.

✓ I prefer black clothes because, in my opinion, I look slimmer in black and it is an eye-catching colour, so I prefer black over other colours.

'Black colour clothes' is redundant; use 'black clothes'. 'In my perspective' should be 'in my opinion'. Use comparative 'slimmer' not 'slim'. Avoid repeating 'colour'. Remove unnecessary emphatic 'do prefer'.