Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a clear topic sentence, avoid hesitations and repetitions, and use specific vocabulary to describe the clothes. Mention one or two key reasons and an example. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: I like to wear loose, comfortable clothes such as baggy T‑shirts and wide trousers because they allow free movement. I also enjoy wearing traditional outfits like a Kabaki shirt with a waistcoat for cultural events, as they feel special and respectful. For everyday activities I prefer casual clothes for comfort.

提案: Start with a direct topic sentence stating your preference, then contrast weekdays and weekends using a linking word such as "however" or "but." Eliminate repetition and give one specific reason for each choice.

例: I prefer to wear smart clothes during weekdays because they look professional at work. However, on weekends I choose comfortable clothes to relax, since I spend time at home and want to feel at ease.

提案: Answer directly, avoid filler sounds, and explain briefly why you like T‑shirts with a specific detail or example. Use a linking phrase like "because" to connect reason and result.

例: Yes, I like wearing T‑shirts because they are very comfortable and easy to move in. For example, I often choose a baggy T‑shirt for outdoor activities since it keeps me cool and relaxed.

提案: Give a concise topic sentence and provide one or two specific factors you consider when choosing clothes (e.g., occasion, color, comfort). Avoid hesitations and unclear words; use precise vocabulary for colors and items.

例: Yes, I spend quite a bit of time choosing clothes because I'm picky about my appearance. I usually decide based on the occasion and color — for example, I pick white shirts for formal meetings and casual T‑shirts for relaxed outings.

提案: Make a clear contrast using linking words like "on the other hand" or "while," and add a brief reason or specific example to support your answer. Keep it to two sentences for clarity.

例: On weekdays I wear smart clothes for work, such as shirts and trousers. On the other hand, I wear comfortable clothes like sweatpants and T‑shirts on weekends to relax at home.

提案: Start with a direct statement of your favourite color, give a clear reason, and mention an alternative color briefly. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., "white looks clean and neat") and avoid repeating phrases.

例: My favourite colour is white because it looks clean and smart. I also like black sometimes because it is elegant, but overall I prefer white for most of my clothes.

× Especially in a more dialectual Kabaki shirts and loose T-shirts and loose uh, uh, loose pants as uh, because they are free, free movement and uh, in our country, I like to wear traditional clothes such as server, chemist with and a waistcoat.

✓ Especially I prefer dialectal Kabaki shirts, loose T-shirts and loose pants because they allow free movement. In my country I also like to wear traditional clothes such as a sherwani, chamis and a waistcoat.

The sentence has multiple adjective and word choice errors and unclear nouns. 'More dialectual' is incorrect: use 'dialectal' or 'traditional' and place it before the noun. 'Free, free movement' is redundant; use 'allow free movement'. Some words seem misspelled (server, chemist) and should be corrected to 'sherwani' and 'chamis' (or the appropriate local terms). Also the sentence was run-on; split into two sentences for clarity. Suggestion: place adjectives before nouns, avoid repetition, and use correct vocabulary."

× In week days, on working week days, I like to wear smart clothes smart clothes. While on weekends I prefer a comfortable comfortable clothes to relax. As for the weekend, like I only have two days to especially in relax I wear comfy clothes.

✓ On weekdays I like to wear smart clothes. On weekends I prefer comfortable clothes to relax. Since I only have two days off at the weekend, I especially wear comfy clothes to relax.

Repetition and tense/wording errors: 'week days' should be 'weekdays'. Remove duplicated phrases and unnecessary fillers. 'A comfortable clothes' is incorrect article use; use 'comfortable clothes' (no article). The third sentence needed rephrasing to show reason and correct word order. Suggestion: use concise sentences, correct compound nouns ('weekdays') and proper articles with plural nouns (no 'a')."

× Uh, especially, yeah, that could teach you to a lot because, uh, they are very comfortable and big. I like baggy shirts and baggy pants as they're very good.

✓ Yes, especially T-shirts; they are very comfortable and roomy. I like baggy shirts and baggy pants because they are comfortable.

'That could teach you to a lot' is nonsensical and likely a misuse of pronouns/phrases. Replace with clear pronoun 'they' referring to T-shirts and use appropriate adjectives ('roomy' or 'loose'). Also 'as they're very good' is vague; specify 'comfortable'. Suggestion: ensure pronouns clearly refer to the intended noun and avoid filler phrases."

× Yeah, I like to I, I'm very picky person. Therefore I spend most of my time choosing my clothes. I'm usually I'm very thinking about which clothes should I wear today like blue white bread, which color should I wear or, or or should I wear smart clothes or comfortable clothes?

✓ Yes, I am a very picky person. Therefore I spend a lot of time choosing my clothes. I often think about which clothes I should wear today, which color to choose, or whether I should wear smart clothes or comfortable clothes.

Errors include missing article ('a very picky person'), contractions folded awkwardly and subject-verb agreement and word order in questions. 'I'm usually I'm very thinking' is incorrect; use 'I often think'. 'Which clothes should I wear today' should be embedded as a reported question: 'which clothes I should wear today'. Remove filler words. Suggestion: use correct article with nouns, use simple present for habitual actions, and use proper word order for indirect questions."

× Yeah, like on weekdays I I wear smart clothes and on weekends I wear comfortable clothes, like to relax in my home.

✓ On weekdays I wear smart clothes, and on weekends I wear comfortable clothes to relax at home.

Duplicate 'I I' and awkward phrasing 'to relax in my home'. Use 'at home' for the location and combine clauses with 'and' for smoother flow. Tense is present habitual, so simple present is correct. Suggestion: remove repetitions and use correct preposition 'at' for locations."

× I like white clothes the most because they show you clean and they show your cleanness. And about black color, like I also like black art but the most the color I like the most is the white color.

✓ I like white clothes the most because they make you look clean and show cleanliness. I also like black, but my favorite color is white.

Phrases such as 'show you clean' and 'show your cleanness' are unidiomatic; use 'make you look clean' and 'show cleanliness'. 'Black art' is likely a mistake; use 'black' or 'black clothes'. Avoid redundant phrases 'the most the color I like the most'. Suggestion: use idiomatic expressions ('look clean'), avoid repetition, and keep the sentence concise.