Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with a linking word. Correct minor grammar (remove duplicate words) and finish within 3–4 sentences.

例: I prefer fashionable, smart clothes because I like keeping up with current trends. For example, wearing a well-coordinated outfit makes me feel more confident and relaxed, especially at social events.

提案: Good structure and clear contrast. Improve naturalness by using linking words (however, while) and correct small grammar (use plural 'comfortable clothes' or 'comfortable clothing'). Add a brief specific example to support your choice.

例: It depends on the occasion. If I attend a formal event, I prefer smart clothes; however, for Sundays or evenings at home I choose comfortable clothing, such as a hoodie and jeans, to relax.

提案: Avoid filler sounds and repeated words. Give a clearer reason for the change and one specific example to make the answer more informative. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

例: When I was a student I wore T-shirts a lot because they were practical for classes. Since graduating and starting work, I have switched to smarter shirts and blouses because they look more professional.

提案: Be direct and avoid repetition. State current habit clearly, explain why with a specific detail, and use correct verb forms ('I keep up with fashion trends'). Finish the thought (what you make an effort on).

例: Yes, I do spend time choosing clothes because I like to keep up with fashion trends. For example, I often plan outfits the night before important events to ensure everything matches.

提案: This answer is unclear and contains many hesitations and incomplete sentences. Give a clear topic sentence about whether styles differ, then add a specific example and a linking word. Remove fillers and finish your ideas.

例: There is only a small difference: on weekdays I usually wear smart or work-appropriate clothes, while on weekends I wear more casual or personal styles, such as a comfortable sweater and jeans, because they make me happier.

提案: Good, clear preference. Remove fillers and improve phrasing: say 'I usually choose green items' and give a brief reason why green appeals to you (mood, meaning) or a specific example.

例: I like green best because it feels calming and natural to me. For instance, when I shop I often buy green shirts and accessories because they brighten my mood.

× I like to wear fashionable smart clothes because I I like keeping the trends so a good outfit.

✓ I like to wear fashionable, smart clothes because I like keeping up with trends, so a good outfit makes me feel confident.

The sentence has repeated 'I' and incorrect pronoun/phrase structure. Use 'keeping up with trends' (correct verb + preposition), and include the subject for 'makes' to show what the outfit does. Also add a comma between adjectives. Suggestion: remove the duplicate 'I', use 'keeping up with' for the collocation, and complete the clause with a subject and verb. Use in context: present habit, so present simple is correct.

× A good outfit also makes me more confident and relaxed especially.

✓ A good outfit also makes me feel more confident and relaxed, especially.

The original is missing the verb 'feel' which is required with 'confident and relaxed' describing internal states. Place 'especially' at the end with a comma. Suggestion: add 'feel' to link the subject and the adjectives and position adverb 'especially' properly.

× If I need to attend an event, I prefer to wear smart clothes.

✓ If I need to attend an event, I prefer to wear smart clothes.

No correction needed; sentence is grammatically acceptable. (Included only if identification required.)

× But if I want to relax myself, the comfortable clothes is my first choice.

✓ But if I want to relax, comfortable clothes are my first choice.

'Clothes' is a plural noun and should take the plural verb 'are' not 'is'. Also 'relax myself' is unnatural in English; use 'relax'. Drop the definite article 'the' before general plural noun 'comfortable clothes'. Suggestion: use plural verb agreement and simpler reflexive structure.

× Uh, when I was a student, I usually wore T-shirts.

✓ When I was a student, I usually wore T-shirts.

No major tense error; this is correct past habitual action. Remove filler 'Uh'. Kept past simple 'wore' for habitual past.

× After graduating, something has changed.

✓ After graduating, something changed.

Both 'has changed' and 'changed' can be used, but narrative sequence often uses simple past 'changed' after the time marker 'after graduating'. Use simple past for completed change at that time. Suggestion: prefer 'changed' for clearer sequencing.

× Uh, now I mostly I like wearing smart clothes.

✓ Now I mostly like wearing smart clothes.

Duplicate 'I' should be removed. Use present simple 'like' for current habit. Suggestion: eliminate repeated pronoun and keep present tense.

× Yes, and I did this when I was when I was a high school student.

✓ Yes, I did this when I was a high school student.

Remove the repeated phrase 'when I was'. Use past simple 'did' to match the past time reference. Suggestion: avoid repetitions and keep concise past tense.

× As I said, I like keep keeping the fashion trends, so I actually make an effort on.

✓ As I said, I like keeping up with fashion trends, so I actually make an effort to do so.

Use 'keeping' (gerund) with the correct collocation 'keeping up with' and 'fashion trends' (no 'the'). 'Make an effort on' is incorrect; use 'make an effort to do so' or 'make an effort about it'. Suggestion: use correct phrasal verb and complete the object of 'make an effort'. This matches 'Verb + -ing form' and 'Incorrect use of prepositions'.

× Uh, actually they there are there is a small difference between this because I like wearing what I like, which can makes me which can make me more happy if I don't wear the.

✓ Actually, there is a small difference because I like wearing what I enjoy; that makes me happier than if I wore something I did not like.

Original contains multiple redundancies and fragments ('they there are there is', 'which can makes me which can make me', incomplete clause 'if I don't wear the'). Correct sentence simplifies structure, uses 'there is' once, uses comparative 'happier', and completes the conditional. Use 'make' not 'makes' after 'which' referring to 'that' or 'which' with plural/singular agreement. Suggestion: simplify and complete clauses, ensure subject-verb agreement and proper comparative form.

× What colour clothes do you like? Definitely green, uh, because green is my favorite color and when I shop I usually choose green things, uh, not only include clothes but also everything.

✓ Definitely green, because green is my favorite color and when I shop I usually choose green items, not only clothes but many other things too.

Use 'items' instead of 'things' for clarity. 'Not only include clothes but also everything' is ungrammatical; correct structure is 'not only clothes but also other things' or 'not only clothes but many other things too'. Suggestion: use parallel structure with 'not only ... but also ...' and prefer 'items' for clarity.