Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and use cleaner sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler sounds (uh, um) and hedging words like maybe. Give one brief supporting reason with a linking word. Use a wider phrase than just “comfortable”.

例: I prefer wearing T-shirts because they are comfortable and practical. For example, they allow me to move freely and suit my everyday lifestyle, whether I’m studying or meeting friends.

提案: Give a complete, grammatical explanation using linking words and avoid disfluencies. State your choice, then add one or two clear reasons using connectors like because or so. Use full sentences and correct word forms (e.g., “do more activities” or “be more active”).

例: I prefer comfortable, casual clothes because they help me feel relaxed and allow me to be more active. For instance, in casual clothes I can exercise, cycle or walk without worrying about my outfit.

提案: Answer directly and avoid repetition and fillers. Clarify what you mean by “a Prince” (designer, motif, or band?). Give a short, specific example of a favourite T-shirt and why it matters to you.

例: Yes. I especially like T-shirts with band logos or artist prints because they show my interests. For example, I have a T-shirt with my favorite band’s album cover that always starts conversations with other fans.

提案: Explain more clearly: do you spend time because you try to save money or because you dislike shopping? Use a linking phrase like because or so to make the reason logical and give one concrete detail about how you choose (e.g., compare prices, read reviews).

例: Yes, I often spend time choosing clothes because I want good value for money. For example, I compare prices online and wait for sales to avoid wasting money on items I won’t wear often.

提案: Be clearer about whether you change styles between weekdays and weekends. Avoid unclear phrases like “UH-1 style.” State your routine and give one specific contrast (work vs free time) and reason using linking words such as however or because.

例: Not really — I usually stick to a grunge style both on weekdays and weekends because it reflects my personality. However, for formal occasions I might wear smarter clothes to make a better impression.

提案: Start without conjunctions like “And.” Use correct grammar (e.g., “it definitely suits me”) and give a concrete reason or example why green reflects your feelings. Use one linking phrase such as because or as a result.

例: My favourite colour is green because it feels calming and reminds me of nature. For example, wearing green makes me feel more relaxed and confident when I’m out with friends.

× I think it's more comfortable to wear than maybe some suit.

✓ I think they are more comfortable to wear than a suit.

The original sentence uses 'it's' (it is) which is a singular pronoun referring to T-shirts (plural). Use 'they' to match the plural noun 'T-shirts' and change 'some suit' to 'a suit' for natural reference. Also adjust verb agreement to 'are' to match the plural subject. Suggestion: Make sure pronouns agree in number with the nouns they replace; use 'they' for plural items like T-shirts.

× so when I wear T-shirts, I feel freedom.

✓ so when I wear T-shirts, I feel free.

'Freedom' is a noun, but the intended description of a feeling should use the adjective 'free.' Using 'free' correctly describes the subject's state. Suggestion: Use adjectives (free) to describe feelings rather than nouns (freedom) after verbs like 'feel.'

× I prefer to wear comfortable and casual clothes 'cause I feel more relaxed and umm, it's umm.

✓ I prefer to wear comfortable and casual clothes because I feel more relaxed when I do.

The original has an incomplete clause 'it's umm' which is unclear and conversational. Replace the vague fragment with a complete clause 'when I do' to refer back to wearing comfortable clothes. Also use 'because' instead of colloquial ''cause' for formal correctness. Suggestion: Avoid fragments; complete the thought with a full clause.

× Can help me, uh, make more activities?

✓ It can help me do more activities.

The original is a fragment starting with a modal-like structure 'Can help me' without a subject. Add the subject 'It' and use the base verb 'do' after 'help' for correct structure. Remove the question mark because the context is a statement. Suggestion: Ensure sentences have a subject and use correct verb forms after 'help' (help + bare infinitive).

× Yes, I do 'cause, uh, the most attractive thing for me is a Prince on T-shirts, and I have a lot of T-shirts with, uh, pictures of my favorite groups, musical groups, uh, et cetera.

✓ Yes, I do because the most attractive thing for me is a print on T-shirts, and I have a lot of T-shirts with pictures of my favorite musical groups, etc.

'Prince' appears as a misspelling; context indicates 'print' is intended. Also replace colloquial ''cause' with 'because' and remove filler words. 'Musical groups' can be combined; 'etc.' is acceptable. Suggestion: Watch for homophone/misspelling errors and avoid filler words for clarity.

× For me it's too hard to choose clothes 'cause I really don't want to spend a lot of money for this.

✓ For me it's too hard to choose clothes because I really don't want to spend a lot of money on them.

Use the preposition 'on' with 'spend money on something.' Also replace 'for this' with 'on them' to refer back to clothes. Suggestion: Use 'spend money on' + object; ensure pronouns refer clearly to the intended noun.

× Uh, no, I tried to wear UH-1 style.

✓ Uh, no, I try to wear UH-1 style.

The original uses past tense 'tried' but the context is about current habit/preference, so present tense 'try' is appropriate. Suggestion: Match tense to meaning: use present for habits/preferences.

× It's, uh, grunge.

✓ It's grunge style.

While 'grunge' can be used as a noun or adjective, adding 'style' clarifies the meaning when describing clothing style. Suggestion: Use noun 'style' to make the phrase clearer in this context.

× I feel that I, uh, can be attractive for people when I wear this, uh, style.

✓ I feel that I can be attractive to people when I wear this style.

Use the preposition 'to' with 'attractive' (attractive to someone), not 'for.' Remove fillers for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'attractive to people' and avoid unnecessary hesitation words.

× And my favorite color is green. It's definitely suits me and it can reflect my inner feelings.

✓ My favorite color is green. It definitely suits me and can reflect my inner feelings.

Remove leading 'And' for formality. The clause 'It's definitely suits me' mixes 'it is' with verb 'suits'; remove the contraction and use 'It definitely suits me.' Also 'it can reflect' is fine but can omit repeated subject for conciseness. Suggestion: Ensure subject-verb structure is consistent and avoid unnecessary conjunctions at sentence start.