Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid vague phrases like "and so on." Use singular/plural and articles correctly (e.g., "oversized shirts," "a new style"), and keep to 2–4 sentences.

例: I prefer comfortable clothes such as baggy pants and oversized shirts because they allow me to move freely. However, I also enjoy experimenting with new styles, for example wearing cute cardigans when I want a softer look.

提案: Correct grammar and organize into a clear structure: state your main choice, then give one specific reason and an example. Remove repetitions and unfinished sentences. Use singular/plural and articles correctly (e.g., "the occasion," "smart clothes").

例: It depends on the occasion: at home I usually choose comfortable, casual clothes because they are relaxing. For special events I prefer smart outfits; for example, I wear a blazer and neat trousers when I attend a formal dinner.

提案: Reduce repetition and improve word choice. Start with a direct answer, then give one clear reason and a brief example. Use correct pronouns and verb forms (e.g., "prints on them," "they").

例: Yes, I like wearing T-shirts, especially those with cute prints, because they brighten my outfit and lift my mood. For instance, a T-shirt with a playful design makes me feel more confident when I meet friends.

提案: Eliminate hesitations and fix grammar. Give a direct answer, a clear reason, and a brief specific example. Correct subject-verb agreement ("my mother and sister are"). Avoid filler words.

例: Yes, I do. I like to pick outfits carefully because I want to look coordinated, so when we're in a hurry my mother and sister often get frustrated. For example, I may try on different tops before deciding which one matches my shoes.

提案: Answer directly and politely without challenging the question. State your main point concisely and give a specific supporting detail. Remove unclear words (e.g., "Gen. styles or panache") and avoid repetition.

例: Not really; I choose clothes based on the occasion rather than the day of the week. For example, I might wear casual clothes for a weekend lunch but a smarter outfit for an evening event regardless of whether it's a weekday or weekend.

提案: Make a clear, grammatical statement and give a specific reason. Use correct adjectives ("warm-toned skin") and remove redundancy. Limit to two or three sentences with one supporting detail.

例: I prefer warm, autumn colours such as deep reds, browns and mustard because they complement my warm-toned skin. These shades make my complexion look healthier and more vibrant.

× The clothes that I would like to wear are clothes that feel comfortable like baggy pants, oversize shirts, but I also like to discover new genre like cutesy cardigans and so on.

✓ The clothes that I would like to wear are clothes that feel comfortable, like baggy pants and oversized shirts, but I also like to discover new genres, such as cutesy cardigans.

Errors: 'oversize' should be the adjective 'oversized' (present participle form used as adjective). 'genre' is countable here and should be plural 'genres'. Also punctuation and parallel structure needed: use 'and' between items and 'such as' for examples. Suggestion: use correct adjective forms and pluralize countable nouns, and join items with commas and 'and'.

× It depends on what the occasions.

✓ It depends on the occasion.

Error: incorrect preposition + plural noun. Use the fixed expression 'depends on the occasion' or 'depends on the occasions' with different structure. Suggestion: use singular 'the occasion' after 'depends on' for general meaning or rephrase to 'which occasion it is'.

× When I'm just in my house I usually wear comfortable and casual clothes, but when I go out I tend to overdo it. I I wear a smart clothes I.

✓ When I'm at home I usually wear comfortable, casual clothes, but when I go out I tend to dress up and wear smart clothes.

Errors: 'in my house' is less natural than 'at home'; duplicate 'I I'; 'a smart clothes' mixes singular article with plural noun. 'Tend to overdo it' is acceptable but unclear—'tend to dress up' is clearer. Suggestion: remove duplicates, match article and noun number, and use idiomatic expressions.

× Yes, I do like wearing T-shirts. I I also love T-shirts with lots of cute prints on it because it really elevates the overall theme and mood of what I am wearing.

✓ Yes, I do like wearing T-shirts. I also love T-shirts with lots of cute prints on them because they really elevate the overall theme and mood of what I am wearing.

Errors: duplicate 'I I'; pronoun agreement: 'T-shirts' is plural so use 'them' not 'it', and use plural verb 'elevate' with plural subject. Suggestion: fix duplicates and ensure pronouns and verbs agree in number with their antecedents.

× It also boosts my confidence when I go out.

✓ It also boosts my confidence when I go out.

This sentence is correct. No change required.

× Yes, to be honest, I spend a lot of time when I when I am choosing my clothes.

✓ Yes, to be honest, I spend a lot of time choosing my clothes.

Errors: duplicate phrase 'when I when I'; unnecessary 'when I am' + gerund. Use 'spend time' followed directly by gerund 'choosing'. Suggestion: remove duplicates and use correct gerund structure after 'spend time'.

× My mother and sister is always frustrated at me when we were, we, we are, you know, in a hurry because I tend to choose.

✓ My mother and sister are always frustrated with me when we are in a hurry because I take time choosing.

Errors: subject-verb agreement: 'My mother and sister' is plural, so use 'are' not 'is'. Preposition: use 'frustrated with' not 'at'. Tense confusion and repetitions: use present simple for habitual actions ('are frustrated', 'we are in a hurry'). 'I tend to choose' is incomplete; better 'I take time choosing' or 'I take a long time to choose.' Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement, correct preposition, remove repetitions, and use a complete verb phrase.

× Actually no, I think that is not the question. I think the question should be whether the what the occasion is, because I actually tend to have different Gen. styles or panache of clothes depending on on occasions not on days.

✓ Actually, no. I think the question should be about what the occasion is, because I tend to wear different styles or outfits depending on the occasion, not the day.

Errors: awkward phrasing 'whether the what the occasion is' and repeated 'on on'. Abbreviations: 'Gen.' unclear. 'Panache of clothes' is unnatural—use 'styles' or 'outfits'. Use singular 'occasion' for general meaning. Suggestion: simplify to 'what the occasion is' and use 'depending on the occasion' with clear nouns.

× The clothes the colored clothes I lie are usually autumn clothes that are dark that really brightens my skin up because I have a warm toned skin and it the warm tone colors tends to enhance my skin color more.

✓ The colored clothes I like are usually autumnal, darker colors that really brighten my skin because I have warm-toned skin, and warm tones tend to enhance my complexion.

Multiple errors: word order and choice ('the clothes the colored clothes I lie' should be 'the colored clothes I like'); 'autumn clothes' better as 'autumnal' or 'autumn colors'; verb agreement: 'that really brightens' should be 'that really brighten' to agree with plural 'colors'; 'a warm toned skin' should be 'warm-toned skin' without article; 'it the warm tone colors tends' is ungrammatical—use 'warm tones tend'. Suggestion: reorder words for clarity, fix verb agreement, hyphenate compound adjectives, and use appropriate nouns ('complexion').