Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and complete your answer with a clear topic sentence, one or two supporting details, and avoid filler words (uh, um). Mention current preference first, then briefly contrast with past style using a linking word (e.g., "but" or "however").

例: I prefer casual clothes now because they are comfortable and suit my daily life. However, when I was younger I often wore rock and metal styles, with band T‑shirts and leather jackets, which reflected my music tastes at the time.

提案: Start with a direct topic sentence stating your preference, then give clear reasons with specific examples. Remove fillers and redundant phrases. Use a linking phrase to introduce an example or consequence (e.g., "for example", "so").

例: I prefer comfortable, casual clothes because they help me focus and feel relaxed during the day. For example, I often wear soft cotton shirts and jeans when I work from home, which makes it easier to concentrate and stay productive.

提案: Answer directly then give a concise, relevant reason. Avoid exaggeration and repetition. Use a linking word (e.g., "because") and provide one specific detail such as fabric or activity to support your point.

例: Yes, I like wearing T‑shirts because they are breathable and easy to change when I get hot. For instance, I choose lightweight cotton T‑shirts when I exercise or work outdoors.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence (e.g., "No, I don't"), then explain briefly how you organize your clothes with specific details and a linking word (e.g., "so", "therefore"). Remove hesitations and clarify timing or routine.

例: No, I don't spend much time choosing clothes because I plan my outfits in advance. For example, I sort and prepare my clothes each weekend so I can quickly pick an outfit on weekday mornings.

提案: Start with a clear statement that you dress differently, then contrast weekday and weekend styles using a linking word (e.g., "whereas" or "while"). Be specific about items you wear for each context and avoid repetition.

例: Yes, I dress differently: during weekdays I wear business casual like button‑down shirts and chinos for work, whereas on weekends I prefer rock‑inspired outfits such as band T‑shirts and skinny jeans.

提案: Give a short direct answer about current preference, then briefly contrast with the past using a linking word (e.g., "but" or "now"). Use precise vocabulary for colours and explain why the change happened with one specific reason.

例: Nowadays I prefer brighter colours like blue, green and mustard because they lift my mood. I used to wear mostly black and white when I was younger, but now I choose colourful clothes to feel more cheerful and expressive.

× I like to wear more casual clothes and for now, but uh, when I was younger, I, I used to wear kind of rock and metal, uh, style of clothes. So sometimes I.

✓ I like to wear more casual clothes now, but when I was younger I used to wear rock and metal style clothes sometimes.

The original has redundant fillers, misplaced 'for now', and an incomplete final clause. This is a sentence structure issue (ID 26). Remove fillers ('uh', repeated 'I'), place 'now' after 'casual clothes' for clarity, and combine the clauses into one complete sentence. Suggestion: practice making concise sentences and planning the clause order before speaking.

× I prefer to wear a comfortable and casual clothes because I believe that, uh, clothes, uh, are for, you know, the, to give people to feel comfy and to give them some.

✓ I prefer to wear comfortable and casual clothes because I believe that clothes are meant to make people feel comfortable.

The phrase 'a comfortable and casual clothes' mixes singular article 'a' with plural 'clothes' and has unnecessary fillers and awkward phrasing. This is an article/error with noun number (ID 22). Remove 'a' and use 'comfortable and casual clothes' (plural). Also simplify 'to give people to feel comfy' to 'to make people feel comfortable.' Suggestion: match articles to singular/plural nouns and avoid redundant words.

× Yes, as a person that, uh, sweating a lot, I need to change, uh, my T-shirt like for three times a day or more.

✓ Yes, since I sweat a lot, I need to change my T-shirt about three times a day or more.

Using 'that sweating a lot' is ungrammatical; the correct form is a participial clause or subordinating conjunction. This fits verb in present participle issue (ID 10). Use 'since I sweat a lot' or 'as I sweat a lot.' Also change 'for three times' to 'about three times.' Suggestion: use simple clauses ('since I sweat') for reasons and use 'about' or 'around' for approximate frequency.

× So I think the wearing T-shirts is the, the most important thing in my life.

✓ So I think wearing T-shirts is the most important thing in my life.

The phrase 'the wearing T-shirts' has an unnecessary article and repeated 'the.' This is a sentence structure error (ID 26). Remove 'the' before 'wearing' and the duplicate 'the.' Suggestion: when using gerunds as subjects, do not add an extra definite article.

× Not really, but I prepare all my clothes like in addition, so, so I can uh, I can't, I, I don't spend MO uh, much time to choose it, so I prepare all those clothes in a weekend.

✓ Not really. I prepare all my clothes in advance, so I don't spend much time choosing them; I prepare everything over the weekend.

This sentence contains multiple disfluencies and awkward phrases ('like in addition', 'I can't, I, I don't', 'MO', 'in a weekend'). It's a sentence structure error (ID 26). Use 'in advance' instead of 'in addition', 'choose them' rather than 'choose it', and 'over the weekend' for timing. Suggestion: plan the sentence, remove fillers, and use standard time expressions.

× Yes, as an office worker, I need to wear more classy, more, more business casual in the weekdays.

✓ Yes, as an office worker I need to wear more classy, business-casual clothes on weekdays.

'More classy, more, more business casual' is repetitive and misuses comparative 'more' with adjective 'classy' and compound noun 'business casual.' This is an adjective/adverb misuse (ID 13). Use 'classy, business-casual clothes' and 'on weekdays' (not 'in the weekdays'). Suggestion: avoid unnecessary comparatives and use correct preposition for days ('on weekdays').

× And as a music music college, I love to wear more. More rock and jazzy, kind of.

✓ And as a music college student, I love to wear more rock and jazzy styles.

'As a music music college' is incorrect and repetitive; missing 'student' to indicate the person. This is an article/word choice error (ID 22). Change to 'music college student' and combine fragments into one sentence: 'more rock and jazzy styles.' Suggestion: use correct noun for a person ('student') and avoid fragmenting thoughts.

× I used to choose more black and white when I was younger, but now I'm trying to wear more colorful and more bright bright colors as time goes by.

✓ I used to choose mainly black and white when I was younger, but now I'm trying to wear more colorful and brighter clothes as time goes by.

Repetition 'more bright bright colors' is awkward; 'brighter' is the comparative form needed. This is a present tense/word form issue (ID 6) related to comparison and adjective form. Use 'brighter' and 'clothes' for clarity. Suggestion: replace duplicated words with comparative adjectives: 'brighter.'

× So. So for now, I believe that all the clothes are representing my human being.

✓ So for now, I believe that my clothes represent who I am.

'All the clothes are representing my human being' is unnatural and misuses 'my human being.' This is an incorrect use of pronouns/expressions (ID 12). Use 'my clothes' and 'represent who I am.' Also use simple present 'represent' rather than progressive. Suggestion: use idiomatic expressions: 'represent who I am' or 'reflect my personality.'